Lonely Hearts Meet
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Comment from N.K. Wagner
That's supposed to be a bombshell, of course. Michael isn't going to contract HBV from Troy. But This is going to be spun into knots. An excellent depiction of courtroom antics, Barbara. :) Nancy
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2011
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That's supposed to be a bombshell, of course. Michael isn't going to contract HBV from Troy. But This is going to be spun into knots. An excellent depiction of courtroom antics, Barbara. :) Nancy
Comment Written 23-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from PoetlikePoe
i love how easy this is to read. you have really hit on a lot of different feelings with this. i wish i had more time to read more on this right now. great work
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2011
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i love how easy this is to read. you have really hit on a lot of different feelings with this. i wish i had more time to read more on this right now. great work
Comment Written 23-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Sweet Anita
I liked this chapter Barbara. I felt like I was watching L.A. Law. It had realistic courtroom dialogue and held my interest throughout. I don't see how you could have done much better.. I think this deserves a six. Great job of writing.
Nita. :-)
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2011
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I liked this chapter Barbara. I felt like I was watching L.A. Law. It had realistic courtroom dialogue and held my interest throughout. I don't see how you could have done much better.. I think this deserves a six. Great job of writing.
Nita. :-)
Comment Written 23-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2011
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Thank you for the kind review and encouraging words.
Comment from J.E. Brown
I don't normally read book chapters, But in the prusuit to make myself better, I thought it was a good idea to start. I'm glad I chose this one to read. Your dialog is great and your story reads well. Great job! Now to find the time to read the rest!! lol
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2011
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I don't normally read book chapters, But in the prusuit to make myself better, I thought it was a good idea to start. I'm glad I chose this one to read. Your dialog is great and your story reads well. Great job! Now to find the time to read the rest!! lol
Comment Written 23-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2011
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Thank you for the kind review and encouraging words.
Comment from livingwords
This is very well done and builds to great near climax. Best, Dan :))
A couple of nits and suggestions:
"Mrs. Rodger's threaten(ED) to take...
When using italics in FS, use advanced editor and highlight and make the italicized sections two font sizes larger than the rest. Usually, this results in them coming out the same size, rather than smaller, as they do now.
I suggest whenever there is an objection, the Court is required, for the record to sustain or overrule. You didn't do that in every case.
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2011
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This is very well done and builds to great near climax. Best, Dan :))
A couple of nits and suggestions:
"Mrs. Rodger's threaten(ED) to take...
When using italics in FS, use advanced editor and highlight and make the italicized sections two font sizes larger than the rest. Usually, this results in them coming out the same size, rather than smaller, as they do now.
I suggest whenever there is an objection, the Court is required, for the record to sustain or overrule. You didn't do that in every case.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2011
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I will make the corrections thank you. I don't know how to use advanced editor. I wonder if I enlarge the print in word if it would work the same. I will try it.
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advanced editor is easy. Just click on it at the bottom of the text box that says "Basic Editor".
A fresh screen will come up is like "Word" with choices for font, size, bold, etc.
Note: You will want to use Advanced Editor before you type anything because it will, essentially make you start over.
Dan :))
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I will try it. I used it once and messed up everything, so I never used it again. I will try again. If I have issues. I will shake my finger at you.
Comment from missy98writer
Barbara,
you chapter is fantastic and you demonstrated how a defense attorney can make something innocent seem so vile. We seen this done in reality with the Casey Anthony murder case. The defense attorney was allowed to make the insane and untruthful claims that Casey's father molested her without one shred of proof, but the ploy worked and the young woman go away with the murder of her tot, Caylee. Chapter thirty-seven is frustrating for your characters. The dialogue is excellent in this chapter. I hate that ex-monster-in-law. We know that bitch hired someone to kidnap Anna's son. And not it's revealed about Troy being sick. I hope you have a surprise witness come in or police find the creep who was hired by Mrs. Rodgers to kidnapped little Michael. I look forward to your next chapter. You have me at the edge of my seat. I'm just getting over a bad case of the flu that started on Tuesday and lasted until today. I'm feeling much better, but my allergies are bothering me. I hope your feeling good. Please keep on writing first clash chapter, my friend. Please have a super day.
Melissa.
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2011
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Barbara,
you chapter is fantastic and you demonstrated how a defense attorney can make something innocent seem so vile. We seen this done in reality with the Casey Anthony murder case. The defense attorney was allowed to make the insane and untruthful claims that Casey's father molested her without one shred of proof, but the ploy worked and the young woman go away with the murder of her tot, Caylee. Chapter thirty-seven is frustrating for your characters. The dialogue is excellent in this chapter. I hate that ex-monster-in-law. We know that bitch hired someone to kidnap Anna's son. And not it's revealed about Troy being sick. I hope you have a surprise witness come in or police find the creep who was hired by Mrs. Rodgers to kidnapped little Michael. I look forward to your next chapter. You have me at the edge of my seat. I'm just getting over a bad case of the flu that started on Tuesday and lasted until today. I'm feeling much better, but my allergies are bothering me. I hope your feeling good. Please keep on writing first clash chapter, my friend. Please have a super day.
Melissa.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2011
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Thank you for your kind review. I worried about it working. I am glad it did.
Comment from MS Writer
You have shown us the frustration of dealing with lawyers in a courtroom. Everything that is said is turned around and they make truths sound like lies or evasions. You certainly ended this posting with a bang! Well done.
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You have shown us the frustration of dealing with lawyers in a courtroom. Everything that is said is turned around and they make truths sound like lies or evasions. You certainly ended this posting with a bang! Well done.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Maureen's Pen
Oh boy this was an amazing chapter...read it through before I was even in reviewing mode. Wow! Great job and you really caught the uproar in the court house that usually happens in these types of cases... Flowed well, characters had great depth in this one and the raging frustrations was well played out.
Excellent work my friend, I loved it and was riveted to the story and where you took the characters.....and another cliff hanger.....can't wait for the next part.
Thanks for sharing, this was amazing.
Maureen
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2011
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Oh boy this was an amazing chapter...read it through before I was even in reviewing mode. Wow! Great job and you really caught the uproar in the court house that usually happens in these types of cases... Flowed well, characters had great depth in this one and the raging frustrations was well played out.
Excellent work my friend, I loved it and was riveted to the story and where you took the characters.....and another cliff hanger.....can't wait for the next part.
Thanks for sharing, this was amazing.
Maureen
Comment Written 23-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2011
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Thank you for the kind review and continued support.
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
My, that's a turn up for the books...
I thought you handled this court case quite
professionally, which holds the reader's
interest throughout.
She smiled and (then)glared at Anna - here you might consider adding "then" as it sounds as if she both smiled and glared at Anna
Most impressive, Barbara... deserving of a six.
Margaret
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2011
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My, that's a turn up for the books...
I thought you handled this court case quite
professionally, which holds the reader's
interest throughout.
She smiled and (then)glared at Anna - here you might consider adding "then" as it sounds as if she both smiled and glared at Anna
Most impressive, Barbara... deserving of a six.
Margaret
Comment Written 23-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2011
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Thank you for your kind review and support. Coming from you is extra special.
Comment from Malerie
This is an intriguing novel; this is my first reading of it so I do not know all the background. Even so, I believe this chapter gives me enough background to follow at this point. You left me eager to read the next chapter. I'm wondering what will happen to Ms. Rogers and her child and the relationship between Ms. Rogers and her attorney's son Troy. Thanks for sharing I look forward to reading more.
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2011
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This is an intriguing novel; this is my first reading of it so I do not know all the background. Even so, I believe this chapter gives me enough background to follow at this point. You left me eager to read the next chapter. I'm wondering what will happen to Ms. Rogers and her child and the relationship between Ms. Rogers and her attorney's son Troy. Thanks for sharing I look forward to reading more.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
