Men and Their Machines
Sedoka contest; my first attempt17 total reviews
Comment from rchitwood
This is so like men on a Saturday morning such hard workers.Your poem has good creative images and smooth line flow.Your photo compliments your poem well.Blessings Rita
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2011
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This is so like men on a Saturday morning such hard workers.Your poem has good creative images and smooth line flow.Your photo compliments your poem well.Blessings Rita
Comment Written 20-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2011
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Thank you for your kind review and stars. I am glad you liked my poem.
Comment from Betty517
This is a very funny sedoka! I want to thank you for the laugh. My husband does the same thing drives over to the neighbors and chats! Good luck.
Betty
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2011
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This is a very funny sedoka! I want to thank you for the laugh. My husband does the same thing drives over to the neighbors and chats! Good luck.
Betty
Comment Written 20-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2011
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You are welcome, glad my poem made you laugh. I laughted when I happened to catch the guys on their lawn mowers chatting. :o)Thank you for your review and stars.
Comment from Charlene0513
A poem that depicts the recreation needs of a man opposed to the important feats of the day.
With good form /proper syllables.
Charlene
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2011
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A poem that depicts the recreation needs of a man opposed to the important feats of the day.
With good form /proper syllables.
Charlene
Comment Written 20-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2011
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Thank you for your review. I am glad you liked it.
Comment from gazzagodbod
perfect picture for the piece and what a piece superb my friend must be a favourite for the contest thanks my friend gazza
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2011
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perfect picture for the piece and what a piece superb my friend must be a favourite for the contest thanks my friend gazza
Comment Written 20-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2011
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Thanks gazza for your kind review and stars. So far, I'm not batting too good when it comes to the contest. :o) It would be nice to win a few ever now and then. :o)
Comment from adewpearl
Your poem is in excellent syllable count and structure for the sedoka form.
I love the complementary pairing of photo and poem
and the alliteration of men and machines/morning/managed/mowing
I also love the humor of your observations :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2011
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Your poem is in excellent syllable count and structure for the sedoka form.
I love the complementary pairing of photo and poem
and the alliteration of men and machines/morning/managed/mowing
I also love the humor of your observations :-) Brooke
Comment Written 20-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2011
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Thank you for your kind review and stars. I am very pleased that you liked my poem.
Comment from yndemand
the rules of the sedoka were followed as the should and the obsevation on how world affairs are managed were quite true to what I have see. Good Job
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2011
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the rules of the sedoka were followed as the should and the obsevation on how world affairs are managed were quite true to what I have see. Good Job
Comment Written 20-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi justijo,
I have never tried to write a Sedoka poem but you have done an admiral job with this one...especaily for your first try. I love the humor and the excellent word choices....well done, blessings, chey
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2011
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Hi justijo,
I have never tried to write a Sedoka poem but you have done an admiral job with this one...especaily for your first try. I love the humor and the excellent word choices....well done, blessings, chey
Comment Written 20-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2011
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Thank yo Chey for the stars and nice review.
This type of poem was fun to write. I'm sure I'll be doing more of them.
Comment from The Stranger
A sedoka consists of two unrhymed three-line stanzas, each with a syllable count of 5 - 7 - 7.
the photo is the star herre, just how funny is that!!
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2011
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A sedoka consists of two unrhymed three-line stanzas, each with a syllable count of 5 - 7 - 7.
the photo is the star herre, just how funny is that!!
Comment Written 19-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2011
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Glad you liked my photo. I saw them out in the front yard and just had to get the picture.
Comment from Belinda
This is cute. How you observe them, take the picture, have a bright idea, write this humorous sedoka, and enter the contest. You are so creative! Good luck.
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2011
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This is cute. How you observe them, take the picture, have a bright idea, write this humorous sedoka, and enter the contest. You are so creative! Good luck.
Comment Written 19-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2011
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Thanks Belinda for your kind review. Yes, when I saw them out in the yard...I just had to get the picture. The poem came to me on the way home in my car yesterday. My husband loved it. :o)
Comment from MizKat
This is great. It looks like they're having fun, 'chewing the fat'. Maybe they'll get a good tan out of it too. LOL Kat
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2011
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This is great. It looks like they're having fun, 'chewing the fat'. Maybe they'll get a good tan out of it too. LOL Kat
Comment Written 19-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2011
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Thanks Kat for your review and stars. Yes, they are old buds and do enjoy themselves. I just had to get the picture. :o) The poem came to me while driving home yesterday.
