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Lonely Hearts Meet

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Anna and her son escape from a man-made Hell.

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Comment from alexisleech
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This is a very interesting topic and sadly, one that is becoming more common place. The words flows well, as do the conversations without too much to steer you away from the main subject. A court room scene is always interesting and I look forward to reading it. Just one question. Should it be walked down the hall, not walled down the hall?

 Comment Written 16-Oct-2011


reply by the author on 16-Oct-2011
    I will fix that typo. I appreciate the eagle eye.
Comment from Roberta Joan Jensen
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Some people can really make the lives of others a living hell. When will Mrs. Rodgers ever stop!

The new judge will have read the file and be fully cognizant of everything that's happened to this point.


"This isn't a social call[,] is it?"

She stood and walled[walked] down the hall.

Roberta

 Comment Written 16-Oct-2011


reply by the author on 16-Oct-2011
    I will correct the errors, thank you for catching them.
Comment from purrfect tale
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I thought this ended fast until I read your notes that this is the conclusion of the previous one. You're still moving along well and have my interest peeked over the in-laws plots. Only two comments and both are typos.

and walled down the hall. - typo

"Either can I. - typo

 Comment Written 16-Oct-2011


reply by the author on 16-Oct-2011
    I will make those corrections. Thank you for catching them.
Comment from jadapenn
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Hi very interesting chapter. This reminds me of Fred Collingwoods story of the courtcases surrounding his character. Seems these types of things go from bad to worse. Now how come the other party is calling the detective as witness. Is he working for both sides.
luv jada

She stood and wal(l([k]ed down

 Comment Written 16-Oct-2011


reply by the author on 16-Oct-2011
    We shall see what Everett has to say. Thank you for your kind review.
reply by jadapenn on 16-Oct-2011
    You're keeping me in suspense now! lol.
Comment from N.K. Wagner
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Barbara, I suspect we're in for more trouble. Everett hasn't found evidence yet. Most states won't even grant grandparents visitation rights. How do they have standing to bring this suit? I'd have thought it would be a DSS matter, since the father's not involved. :) Nancy

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 Comment Written 16-Oct-2011


reply by the author on 16-Oct-2011
    Well, the grandparents can get custody if both parents are unfit. Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from c_lucas
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You did an excellent job preparing for the court fight. Very good end hook. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for an easy read.

 Comment Written 16-Oct-2011


reply by the author on 16-Oct-2011
    Thank you for your kind review and support.
reply by c_lucas on 16-Oct-2011
    You're welcome, Barbara. Keep up the good fight. My monies are on you. Charlie