Lonely Hearts Meet
Viewing comments for Chapter 36 "Part three, Chapter 11"Anna and her son escape from a man-made Hell.
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Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Barbara,
Oh dear, I hope Anna has had to go to court again and her I thought since the judge gave Anna full custody it was over. But then who can trust Bobby's family, especially his crazy mother. I wonder why the Roger's lawyer called Everett to the stand? I hope he has enough new information that will put an end to the custody battle. This is a fine chapter and I was glad to see it in my PM's today....well done...blessings,chey
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2011
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Hi Barbara,
Oh dear, I hope Anna has had to go to court again and her I thought since the judge gave Anna full custody it was over. But then who can trust Bobby's family, especially his crazy mother. I wonder why the Roger's lawyer called Everett to the stand? I hope he has enough new information that will put an end to the custody battle. This is a fine chapter and I was glad to see it in my PM's today....well done...blessings,chey
Comment Written 16-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, barbara, i didn't expect this to happen and now they call the private investigator as a witness. you had to tantalize me with that, didn't you? now i have to wait a week to find out what they ask him.
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2011
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this is very well written, barbara, i didn't expect this to happen and now they call the private investigator as a witness. you had to tantalize me with that, didn't you? now i have to wait a week to find out what they ask him.
Comment Written 16-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from adewpearl
That is cold - try to abduct the child and then use the abduction as an excuse to try steal custody from her - these people are clever and evil.
You have me on the edge of my seat :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2011
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That is cold - try to abduct the child and then use the abduction as an excuse to try steal custody from her - these people are clever and evil.
You have me on the edge of my seat :-) Brooke
Comment Written 16-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2011
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Thank you for your kind review. I am hoping I can pull it off.
Comment from The Stranger
and so the trial of life finally begins, Anna's entire future happpiness will be secured or left in tatters on the courtroom floor dependant upon the verdict
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2011
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and so the trial of life finally begins, Anna's entire future happpiness will be secured or left in tatters on the courtroom floor dependant upon the verdict
Comment Written 16-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
This poor young woman... all
she's going through... I can
relate to her exactly, having
been through similar...so
nerve-racking, although it
all worked in my favour.
Should I be worried?" - move this down a line.
Anna watched - you might consider.. She watched... since you've already mentioned her just before.
Margaret
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2011
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This poor young woman... all
she's going through... I can
relate to her exactly, having
been through similar...so
nerve-racking, although it
all worked in my favour.
Should I be worried?" - move this down a line.
Anna watched - you might consider.. She watched... since you've already mentioned her just before.
Margaret
Comment Written 16-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2011
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I will make those corrections. Thank you for your eagle eye.
Comment from missy98writer
Barbara,
I can't believe that freaking ex mother-in-law of hers having Michael abducted and when that failed she takes her to court. I hope the Judge sees through this ruse. Chapter-thirty six was swift, but wonderfully written with excellent descriptive writing, great dialogue and very good tension and excitement. I'm on pins and needles from this chapter. I hope you're doing fine, my friend. You need to go thorough my profile and hit my poems you've missed if you need to earn some money to post your next chapter. Please have a happy day, my dear. Your fan...Melissa.
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2011
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Barbara,
I can't believe that freaking ex mother-in-law of hers having Michael abducted and when that failed she takes her to court. I hope the Judge sees through this ruse. Chapter-thirty six was swift, but wonderfully written with excellent descriptive writing, great dialogue and very good tension and excitement. I'm on pins and needles from this chapter. I hope you're doing fine, my friend. You need to go thorough my profile and hit my poems you've missed if you need to earn some money to post your next chapter. Please have a happy day, my dear. Your fan...Melissa.
Comment Written 16-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2011
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Thank you for the kind review. I am working on writing and editing my next post.
Comment from Chris Tee
This is an excellent part of this book we have here my girl.
The story is developing into a real serious matter here my dear lady.
Well done with another splendid part here ma'am.
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2011
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This is an excellent part of this book we have here my girl.
The story is developing into a real serious matter here my dear lady.
Well done with another splendid part here ma'am.
Comment Written 16-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Maureen's Pen
Oh boy...this was a wonderful penned work. But boy was my heart pumping fast when I read that Everett was being called as a hostile witness.....
Wow. Great job on this section. Great emotion and great imagery surrounding your characters.
Well done. Still loving this story line. Didn't see anything sticking out that needed addressed.
Thanks for sharing,
Maureen
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2011
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Oh boy...this was a wonderful penned work. But boy was my heart pumping fast when I read that Everett was being called as a hostile witness.....
Wow. Great job on this section. Great emotion and great imagery surrounding your characters.
Well done. Still loving this story line. Didn't see anything sticking out that needed addressed.
Thanks for sharing,
Maureen
Comment Written 16-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2011
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Thank you for your kind review and support.
Comment from writerwish
It is still captivating. I was surprised to see the stats on the number of fathers who abduct. Is this because of power struggles? Surprised to see grandparents involved so much.
I think you wanted to say: Neither can I. Instead or either can I. When Paul is explaining that his wife and friend will baby-sit.
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2011
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It is still captivating. I was surprised to see the stats on the number of fathers who abduct. Is this because of power struggles? Surprised to see grandparents involved so much.
I think you wanted to say: Neither can I. Instead or either can I. When Paul is explaining that his wife and friend will baby-sit.
Comment Written 16-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2011
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You are correct. I will fix it. Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from livingwords
Good one. Ya left me hanging. What's up with calling Everett? I see an improvement in style with each chapter. Crisper, faster, clear. Great job. Dan :))
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2011
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Good one. Ya left me hanging. What's up with calling Everett? I see an improvement in style with each chapter. Crisper, faster, clear. Great job. Dan :))
Comment Written 16-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2011
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Thank you for your kind words. Coming from you makes it extra special.
