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Lonely Hearts Meet

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Anna and her son escape from a man-made Hell.

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Comment from pickthorn
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You sure know how to build up the suspense. I wonder how Everett Page will testify. Anna is fortunate to have such competent people on her side in this custody battle. Very well written.

 Comment Written 17-Oct-2011


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    Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Gert sherwood
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Hi Barb
I know one thing for sure; I would be a total wreck about this time
I say, good thing you have done so well is that Anna has her friends to help support and help keep her somewhat calm.

So you cleverly did it once again
Leave us in suspense.

Excllent writing

Gert

 Comment Written 17-Oct-2011


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    Thank you for the kind review.
reply by Gert sherwood on 17-Oct-2011
    You are welcome
    Gert
Comment from Cheryl Daphine
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I can feel the nervousness. It would make my palms sweaty. She has come this far,I believe she will come out ahead in the end.Very heart thumping,and well written chapter.

 Comment Written 17-Oct-2011


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    Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
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What a place to stop-now we have to wait a week to find out what happened. Well written and this part full of suspense. Looking forward to next week's chapter!!!! Debbie

 Comment Written 17-Oct-2011


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    Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Connie P
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A twist I didn't expect. How much more can Anna take? I don't see how an attempted abduction from a daycare could be considered neglect, but in this day and time anything that can be twisted, will be twisted.
Great job on this, Barbara. I've joined the ranks of the employed again, as of Saturday, so I may be a little sporadic for awhile.
Connie

 Comment Written 17-Oct-2011


reply by the author on 17-Oct-2011
    I understand. I struggle to get pumps to post because of work. My prayers are with you.
Comment from Cheryl Baker
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I was looking forward to reading this new chapter to your story. I'm intrigued by the story of Anna and now she has to worry about her in-laws petitioning for custody of Michael. You kept us wanting more by just starting on the court case and a new judge. I look forward to reading your next instalment.

 Comment Written 17-Oct-2011


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    Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from robina1978
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Anna really does not get peace at all.
Sounds a good move to go and see asocial worker.
Another judge to face.
It sounds that Everett was just back in time to be able to testify; wonder what he might have found out.
Well written as always.
Held my attention all the way. Characters and dialogues realistic.

 Comment Written 17-Oct-2011


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    Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Rama Rao
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Excellent chapter. Can't wait to read what happened in the court. Your story is always engrossing.
huge help, bit I don't need it- deserve it?

 Comment Written 16-Oct-2011


reply by the author on 17-Oct-2011
    Thank you for the kind review. I will check that area out.
Comment from axelbeariter
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Anna silenced when the waiter came for their order./That's an awkward sentence. Use another form of silenced to say she stopped talking, if that's what you meant.----but I wish Everett would hurry and find something."/Nice early hook.----"I would like to call Everett Page as my first witness. Your honor, I'd like to treat him as a hostile witness because of his current employment."/This one assures you that the reader will be back for your next chapter.----Well done.





 Comment Written 16-Oct-2011


reply by the author on 17-Oct-2011
    I changed that sentence. Thank you for the suggestion. I appreciate the help.
Comment from Shirley McLain
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Great chapter once again and as always I look forward to see what is going to happen in the next one. Your characters are wonderful.

 Comment Written 16-Oct-2011


reply by the author on 16-Oct-2011
    Thank you for the kind review.