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Anna and her son escape from a man-made Hell.

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Comment from NaughtieScribe
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If I don't get any sleep tonight it will be all your fault. First you give me a false setup and deny me the first kiss. Then you throw in a twist and have the kidnapping be a setup for custody. Didn't see that coming - good work. Now you have us back in court with a trumped up neglect case. I should hate you, but I'm too addicted.

 Comment Written 02-Aug-2012


reply by the author on 04-Aug-2012
    Thank you.
Comment from Readywriter52
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Bobby and his mother haven't stopped trying to get custody of Michael. Even though they might have been behind the kidnapping, they will use the failed kidnapping as proof that Anna is a bad mother. I hope that Everett Page can find out who was behind the attempted kidnapping.

 Comment Written 26-Oct-2011


reply by the author on 27-Oct-2011
    Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from CALLAHANMR
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Hi Barbara:)
I somehow missed this post. As usual, it is well-written and seems quite authentic. It is surprising that Mrs. Rodgers thinks she can challenge Michael's custody based on the skimpy allegation that Anna cannot keep him safe. What reasonable person would expect an abduction from a good school.

Now Anna has to defend her custody rights all over agaain in front of a new judge and Everett has been called as the first witness.

This seems more like another way to intimidate Anna. How can her forer in-laws possibly win?

Love and Irish hugs,

Roger

 Comment Written 23-Oct-2011


reply by the author on 24-Oct-2011
    Thank you for your kind review. I am glad you went back and read.
Comment from teacherdub
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Now what is this new attorney up to??? Nice cliffhanger effect at the end of the chapter. Tension is still intact as the bonding continues between Troy, Anna, and in some ways with Everett. Trusting again is hard for the abused, and Anna needs to bond with the "good" ones to overcome the bad one she had. Great job. td

 Comment Written 21-Oct-2011


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    Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from fairy77
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Excellent you should really teach a class.Your relationships
are the most interesting and the suspense!Losing custody.There are so many divorces it's heartbreaking.Well done!Beth fairy77.

 Comment Written 19-Oct-2011


reply by the author on 20-Oct-2011
    Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from majorlee
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very well written!! It captured my attention right from the beginning. there were no grammatical errors that I noticed. Great Job!!
Major Lee

 Comment Written 19-Oct-2011


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Comment from judiverse
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Great work, Barbara. Anna remains a strong character with all the in-laws and her ex-husband have put her through. The dialogue and the way you handled the courtroom scene were very believable. Anna is fortunate to have support and help in looking after her son. Absorbing reading. judiverse.

 Comment Written 19-Oct-2011


reply by the author on 19-Oct-2011
    Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from ScarletClearwater
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I've followed a little bit of this book and it seems I'm always in the courtroom. I'll have to read some more chapters to catch the in between time, huh? I like the story but it feels a bit rushed. I'd like to see more of the story instead of being told. What was the atmoshpere in the courtroom? Was it cold, stuffy? Things like that. Great topic and nice flow.

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 Comment Written 19-Oct-2011


reply by the author on 19-Oct-2011
    I find your review very interesting. I have never been told before that I am telling the story instead of showing it. Usually I am told the opposite that I need to tell more. I don't like reading useless descritptions so I don't write it. I think my readers are intelligent people and want to imagine for themselves. I have had an editor tell me if it doesn't move the story along, kick it out. I have only had three courtroom scene. Thank you for the review.
Comment from Piggies Grandma
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This is another well written chapter, Barbara. I enjoyed reading it very much. It is cleverly written and very well thought out. I look forward to the next chapter.

 Comment Written 19-Oct-2011


reply by the author on 19-Oct-2011
    Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from rudion
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Excellent chapter in an ongoing great story. Your message, as mentioned before, is an excellent one and brings to light the horror of domestic abuse. How sad so many women are trapped or victimized by bullying men. Great job.
Rudion

 Comment Written 19-Oct-2011


reply by the author on 19-Oct-2011
    Thank you for the kind review.