Summer Fades to Fall
Tanka18 total reviews
Comment from Spitfire
Wonderful job of creating an emotion--nostalgia for the loss of summer. Love the use of colors and the phrases: summer tiptoed out; Fall's rainy breeze wrapped.... The last line along with the picture sells the poem. Great work with assonance and alliteration.
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2011
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Wonderful job of creating an emotion--nostalgia for the loss of summer. Love the use of colors and the phrases: summer tiptoed out; Fall's rainy breeze wrapped.... The last line along with the picture sells the poem. Great work with assonance and alliteration.
Comment Written 13-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2011
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Thank you so much, this is a very detailed helpful review. I appreciate you taking the time to understand my poem:)
Comment from BigTomNY
This will be tough to beat in the contest and i wish you all the luck one can for success with it as such! A great job from an amazing author!
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2011
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This will be tough to beat in the contest and i wish you all the luck one can for success with it as such! A great job from an amazing author!
Comment Written 13-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2011
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Thank you, Tom. This is a rewarding review if I don't win:)
Comment from bowls
This is a really pleasant little poem that really does capture the essence of this time of year. Summer does leave in a subtle way. One minute it's there and then it's gone, so "tiptoe" is an excellent word choice. As for fall, well, it certainly does wrap you with that chill in the air, the cool breezes, the drizzle. You mention the hummingbird feeder left behind as a reminder of summer. That creates a beautiful picture and one many readers will identify with. Nicely done.
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2011
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This is a really pleasant little poem that really does capture the essence of this time of year. Summer does leave in a subtle way. One minute it's there and then it's gone, so "tiptoe" is an excellent word choice. As for fall, well, it certainly does wrap you with that chill in the air, the cool breezes, the drizzle. You mention the hummingbird feeder left behind as a reminder of summer. That creates a beautiful picture and one many readers will identify with. Nicely done.
Comment Written 13-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2011
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Thank you for such a helpful review about my poem--I just review that are friendly and helpful. Yes, the little birds were just there and now I don't see them even though we still have some pleasant days:)
Comment from purrfect tale
This poem really got to me. I could see/feel summer slipping away and being replaced by autumn. Loved the tip toe line. Technically perfect Tanka.
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2011
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This poem really got to me. I could see/feel summer slipping away and being replaced by autumn. Loved the tip toe line. Technically perfect Tanka.
Comment Written 13-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2011
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Thank you so much--maybe I weaved in meanings I wasn't aware of, like summer fading to fall--that's probably me, ha! This is a nice review. I'm glad you liked the "tiptoe."
Comment from OklahomaDreamer
Very nice...
Yep, when the hummers leave, summer is difinitely over.
Though hopefully winter will not be too bad this year.
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2011
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Very nice...
Yep, when the hummers leave, summer is difinitely over.
Though hopefully winter will not be too bad this year.
Comment Written 13-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2011
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Maybe it won't...I like this review that shows thoughtfulness toward my poem.
Comment from DALLAS01
I just finished mine. Think our last hurrah was last week. Now it's leaves and pine needles. I like your poem especially the last line. Kind of makes it final.
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2011
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I just finished mine. Think our last hurrah was last week. Now it's leaves and pine needles. I like your poem especially the last line. Kind of makes it final.
Comment Written 13-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2011
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Thank you so much, Dallas for the understanding review. I'm dreading getting to the yardwork--but that you've done yours encourages:)
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you're welcome. Gets colder a little faster here in Wv. Still have to treat my deck.
Comment from mumsyone
Nice tanka. We're all dreading the end of summer and the beginning of winter, yet it seems we're all still having some pretty nice weather. Good job here.
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reply by the author on 13-Oct-2011
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Nice tanka. We're all dreading the end of summer and the beginning of winter, yet it seems we're all still having some pretty nice weather. Good job here.
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Comment Written 13-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2011
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Yes, thank you, and I like this friendly and encouraging review:)
Comment from Serri
Nice Tanka ... nice ending to summer into fall. Love the imagery, flow, and the use of the line "rainy breeze wrapped 'round me". I can feel that.
Thank you for sharing this, I am fascinated with the "Tanka" just now learning of it, so am glad to read and review them! blessings, Serri
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reply by the author on 13-Oct-2011
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Nice Tanka ... nice ending to summer into fall. Love the imagery, flow, and the use of the line "rainy breeze wrapped 'round me". I can feel that.
Thank you for sharing this, I am fascinated with the "Tanka" just now learning of it, so am glad to read and review them! blessings, Serri
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Comment Written 13-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2011
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Thank you, Serri--I'm not real familiar with the Tanka either. But, read a little about it and looked at examples. I really like that you like that line..rainy breeze...I like it too:)
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Thank you for the nice reply...you have given me encouragement to try it!!!
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I'm so glad--you'll do good:)
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:)
