What to give life...
A senru that you can modify for your own thoughts.9 total reviews
Comment from Piggies Grandma
I enjoyed reading your poem Mike. It is cleverly written and well thought out. We have to first respect ourselves before we can respect others.
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2011
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I enjoyed reading your poem Mike. It is cleverly written and well thought out. We have to first respect ourselves before we can respect others.
Comment Written 14-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2011
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Wow! This deserves a review nonimation because it is so true and also a balance over those that don't respect you and try to get you not to gain respect in yourself. What you state is so true and I love your review, because to be honest, it was by the balls, kneejerk and spur of the moment. Sometimes in the calamity of life, one find their calmist moments. I thank you very much for making my day with out very big weapons required. Mike
Comment from Jean Lutz
... remember the One who died for me.
Hey Mike, you gave us the opportunity to write the ending of this senryu on human nature. Your words touched me in the area of my Christian faith. The irony is we could spend a life trying to please others and forget about the One who gave us His all.
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2011
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... remember the One who died for me.
Hey Mike, you gave us the opportunity to write the ending of this senryu on human nature. Your words touched me in the area of my Christian faith. The irony is we could spend a life trying to please others and forget about the One who gave us His all.
Comment Written 12-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2011
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These days, people feel put out enough they feel the American Dream was a joke and would just like to do a bit better. Even in my situation, I feel turned upside down and shaken for the money my labors were supposed to provide me, but other took and continue to take before I gain any type of control. The notion of the American Dream and what it stands for does rub be the wrong way somethings, yet...
I heard things like what coworkers told me; such as [crap] in one hand and wish in the other, which weighs more. Or my grandfather who came from Germany, "What you think your ebtitled to the American Dream, it doesn't exist so consider yourself if you simply find the chance to live it."
God's a funny thing to me as I regret that I don't go to chruch as I seem to get very little out of it, except judging looks, but there isn't a day that goes by that I don't think of Him a lot. In fact when a Muslim told me how great Islam is, you get to pray five times a day to God, I replied, "What if I need to pray more?"
I really loved this and thank you for the compliments and this gem of a review. Mike
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Your remark to the Muslim is a classic one, Mike. As for getting to know God, I can't think of a better place than reading His word. Most of what is preached has been filter through the eyes of understanding of the preacher or is a result of THEIR personal experience.
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I agree and I have known some wonderful pastors and priests. Yet all to often there is a shut up and attend feeling. I will eventually find a church but for now, I enjoy reading and experiencing. Have a great day!
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You have a great day too. I think you and I are mostly on the same page be it government or God.
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You have a great day too. I think you and I are mostly on the same page be it government or God.
Comment from Janie King
Wow...an interesting field to work in but it sounds like it can be tainted by attitudes that are not Christ-like. Stepping on others, or belittling others is never okay...it really spotlights the abused and makes all to understand who they really are and how cruel their heart is. This is a good poem with many possible endings. God bless.
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2011
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Wow...an interesting field to work in but it sounds like it can be tainted by attitudes that are not Christ-like. Stepping on others, or belittling others is never okay...it really spotlights the abused and makes all to understand who they really are and how cruel their heart is. This is a good poem with many possible endings. God bless.
Comment Written 11-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2011
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There is nothing more Christ-like then being their assistant producer. Yet I feel there needs to be an element of Christianity entering in, as it isn't all about them. I thank you very much for your compliments and this review. Mike
Comment from Tonulak
I'm and have been a working musician for many years. i know dealing with the various types in the entertainment business can be tedious, if not agravating. My only comment here is the line, "you want if you don't" I guess I might see the word "want" as a possible choice, but it seems to want to say "won't" here. That was an interesting tale in your notes.
Ted
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2011
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I'm and have been a working musician for many years. i know dealing with the various types in the entertainment business can be tedious, if not agravating. My only comment here is the line, "you want if you don't" I guess I might see the word "want" as a possible choice, but it seems to want to say "won't" here. That was an interesting tale in your notes.
Ted
Comment Written 11-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2011
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I like it better with want, but meant won't, which makes trying a bit of a vicious circle. I thank you for the compliments and this review. Mike
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Mike,
This is an accomplished senryu and one I enjoyed. One has to earn respect and it is not earned easily. You don't get it unless you earn it. Just my humble opinion.I also enjoyed your author's notes. Well done, chey
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2011
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Hi Mike,
This is an accomplished senryu and one I enjoyed. One has to earn respect and it is not earned easily. You don't get it unless you earn it. Just my humble opinion.I also enjoyed your author's notes. Well done, chey
Comment Written 11-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2011
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Christ! I turned my head and when I looked around found myself in a firestorm of reviews. I need rest badly and in terms of respect, my Dad was very political and felt he got it when he was told, he pissed the democrats off yet the republicans who he supported feared him. That concept is more important now then ever. I would love to be respected, but that comes in dreaps and drabs. Instead of suckering up to people for respect, I think it is best to earn it by being both honest and yourself and contribute what is an important contribution. I present no thank you BS, I loved this review and your support! Mike
Poem's to me are the broadsword to cut though the politics of it all, and the notes are always to show the author's spirit and logic?
I sort of detonated my nuclear weapon as the news print media was dumb enought to aske what is more important to you, politics or sports. I sort of combined the two with my observations...
Being a teapartier, and not subscribing to one lick of what we now call the flea party movement, I suggested all interested parties (account holders) purchase one share of stock so the banks have to hold their shareholder's meetings in a stadium, and that way the CEO's words will have to be held accountable. Likewise, I suggested all people figure out what Government will and won't do and to what ends it is required for their needs and sucess in life. Yep, bet you businesses and governments hate me equally, but there is a necessity in that. I don't have much now, but one's words should be the most important.
On a lighter note, there is a new TV medium who is stimied at her Facebook response, and I used humor to convey that while the spirit world my be daunting and at times perplexing, Facebook may end up being much worse. I suggested that she relaxes and answer her questions in a timely manor, yet one that is suitable to her and reminded her, when they are answered, we will recieve automatic notice.
Much love Chey, Mike
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I always enjoy reading your thoughts as you are able to touch on any sugject. I laughed when I read "flea party" too funny. Hope you get some rest today...luv, chey
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I had to used that one as some genius thought that one up. The frustrations and sentiments are real though.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, mike, a great job writing this senryu about we have to respect others and hope we will be respected in turn. the last line should be won't if you don't unless you meant that we'll want it, in your notes it took me a couple of times to realize that you shorted assistant to ass.
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2011
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this is very well written, mike, a great job writing this senryu about we have to respect others and hope we will be respected in turn. the last line should be won't if you don't unless you meant that we'll want it, in your notes it took me a couple of times to realize that you shorted assistant to ass.
Comment Written 11-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2011
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Well that is how the actually refer to the assistant producer smf why I went that route. I did mess up and it was won't but it seems to foster a vicious circle in my mind.
Comment from rchitwood
Your poem is very good and I find it makes very good sense.Your authors notes are very good and help bring about the insight into your poem.Your photo compliments your poem well.Blessings Rita
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2011
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Your poem is very good and I find it makes very good sense.Your authors notes are very good and help bring about the insight into your poem.Your photo compliments your poem well.Blessings Rita
Comment Written 11-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2011
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I thank you very much for your compliments and review. Mike
Comment from LateBloomer
Hello MikeK.
Profound. Of note ...
But want if you don't...
(the results are in broken-hearted, used, and disrespected ... a hard formula to drink when
one has followed all the rules.)
To better days and sunny skies.
Regards, LateBloomer
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2011
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Hello MikeK.
Profound. Of note ...
But want if you don't...
(the results are in broken-hearted, used, and disrespected ... a hard formula to drink when
one has followed all the rules.)
To better days and sunny skies.
Regards, LateBloomer
Comment Written 11-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2011
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Call it a phopa, but I actually meant won't not want. That change even unsettle me that much more because it shows a certain vicious circle in that virtue. I thank you very much for the compliments and this review. Mike
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Hey, Mike, that little "typo" did give the poem a different twist. I shall always remember "my version" (lol). Smiles, LateBloomer
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Want is always in there. :)
Comment from The Stranger
this is a 5-7-5 poem that goes very deep in its meaning, it asks the question of how we gain respect and what changes to make should we fail in our task
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2011
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this is a 5-7-5 poem that goes very deep in its meaning, it asks the question of how we gain respect and what changes to make should we fail in our task
Comment Written 11-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2011
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Wow! With this review, I feel that I have guided myself and the readers very well. Though it sometimes doesn't seem so, the answers rest within us and our faith. Thank you very much, Mike
