If I were but a rose...
Where we want to be in any kingdom.14 total reviews
Comment from Jean Lutz
Roses left for dying sometimes bloom again when tended by the right gardener. May the right one come along to cultivate you to live again.
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2011
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Roses left for dying sometimes bloom again when tended by the right gardener. May the right one come along to cultivate you to live again.
Comment Written 05-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2011
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I like this review, but my situation being what it is, I will need an invitation to join that life as a cutting. Can't do the courthip thing again. That you very much. Mike
Comment from IndianaIrish
I agree that roses are beautiful, Mike, but I think I'd rather have a garden of beautiful weeds...clover, Thistle, jimson,goldenrod, and Queen Anne's lace... as they are to me just as beautiful. So be a weed...and let your unique beauty get out there. Your poem is very well written and moving, Mike.
Smiles,
Indy :>)
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2011
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I agree that roses are beautiful, Mike, but I think I'd rather have a garden of beautiful weeds...clover, Thistle, jimson,goldenrod, and Queen Anne's lace... as they are to me just as beautiful. So be a weed...and let your unique beauty get out there. Your poem is very well written and moving, Mike.
Smiles,
Indy :>)
Comment Written 05-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2011
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I would almost say, that way you simply walk through the garden and point your finger. I enjoyed this review and thank you very much, as I miss my walks through fields. Around here it is either woods, lawns or houses. Mike
Comment from chita
I love your artwork and you have a good flow with your poem and rhyme well-a good use of metaphors and you are descriptive and write with emotion-true there is nothing like a rose to many but they have to blossom and they begin as a plain green flower to bloom-I love where you write(But I fear I am nothing more than a weed-to be plundered and ravished as prey) a powerful statement which I know for a fact that I feel sometimes the same way-but we must continue to brush ourselves off and keep up the good fight--a well penned write--superb job.
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2011
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I love your artwork and you have a good flow with your poem and rhyme well-a good use of metaphors and you are descriptive and write with emotion-true there is nothing like a rose to many but they have to blossom and they begin as a plain green flower to bloom-I love where you write(But I fear I am nothing more than a weed-to be plundered and ravished as prey) a powerful statement which I know for a fact that I feel sometimes the same way-but we must continue to brush ourselves off and keep up the good fight--a well penned write--superb job.
Comment Written 05-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2011
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Wow! I really appreciate this review and thank you for it, as well the compliments. Mike
Comment from jgirlie152
Mike, this is a lovely poem. It isn't often a man will open up to feelings and beauty as you have in this poem comparing the rose and the weed. I congratulate you on a most beautifully written work of art.
Joan
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2011
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Mike, this is a lovely poem. It isn't often a man will open up to feelings and beauty as you have in this poem comparing the rose and the weed. I congratulate you on a most beautifully written work of art.
Joan
Comment Written 04-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2011
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I do so with the thought of people who touched my life and regrettable felt they couldn't contribute further. I guess someone had to stand up, and I always feel under God's gun. Being pro love or anti terrorism it is the same, mostly silence but those I speak for quietly let me know that I express what they are afraid to. I thank you so much for your compliments and this lovely review. Mike
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Mike,
This is such a melancholy poem and one I enjoyed reading more than once.You have penned lyrical rhyme that pulls the lines down the page with ease. One question..What does the word "soweth" mean. Hate to be so dumb if it really a word but the two dictionaries I consulted didn't have it. However, it in no way takes away the beauty of this soulful poem. Well done, chey
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2011
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Hi Mike,
This is such a melancholy poem and one I enjoyed reading more than once.You have penned lyrical rhyme that pulls the lines down the page with ease. One question..What does the word "soweth" mean. Hate to be so dumb if it really a word but the two dictionaries I consulted didn't have it. However, it in no way takes away the beauty of this soulful poem. Well done, chey
Comment Written 04-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2011
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Dictionary's are a pain in the but because it needs to be an unabridged one and mine is burried by my writings and reasearch. I did punch it into the search engine and it does show, but it seems the last to use it are King James people., but the definition works. At least I fixed the one error our fellow members pointed out before you came upon it. LOL
It was soulful and I really appreciate you picking up on it. I also got the Darryl Read seal of approval on this. He isn't a member hear, but idenpendant beat poet and British Ex pat hanging low, but well in Siam these days.
I find it ironic that something I wanted to pen for a long time about love, came from the mood money has made me. But there too is an ironic relationship.
I enjoyed you reviewing this and thank you for doing so, as well the compliments. Mike
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You are wlcome, Mike. I knew it had to be a word your you would not have used it! Good job getting a seal of approval...chey
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As Elmer Fudd always stated, "Be wery careful." I have used created words, providing they mimic the meaning that I wanted to impart. In fact with comments to the word, Thorniness," I had considered trying my hand at writing a poem with nothing but made up words. Bet ya that takes a year!
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Maybe more than a year!
Comment from Art Aliz
MikeK2,
Greetings from a grumpy old potato head. I know just how you feel. I'd give my dusty and diseased potato skin to be anything else but a mouldy potato.
"If I were but a rose," is densely packed with description and imagery, so much so that it needs to be read a few times to be understood fully.
Now to the criticism:-
....thorniness?
Is that a word?
I like the phrase, "forgotten in attic's hush."
You have written some fine phrases and once they are unpacked and understood, it works as a whole.
-Grumpylumpy is in his cellar still.
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2011
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MikeK2,
Greetings from a grumpy old potato head. I know just how you feel. I'd give my dusty and diseased potato skin to be anything else but a mouldy potato.
"If I were but a rose," is densely packed with description and imagery, so much so that it needs to be read a few times to be understood fully.
Now to the criticism:-
....thorniness?
Is that a word?
I like the phrase, "forgotten in attic's hush."
You have written some fine phrases and once they are unpacked and understood, it works as a whole.
-Grumpylumpy is in his cellar still.
Comment Written 04-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2011
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You went for the criticism, now for the excuse. I penned this on the fly at work, and whether word or not, had thorniness in another line. I posted this at 1:30am and messed up. In this instance, I meant thornless and changed it immediately. I thank you for this review and enjoyed it.
I like that phrase as it was I do love cut flowers, but they have only two ends and make for a good double entendre.
Again thanks, Mike
Comment from zehrairfan
It is a well written beautiful poetry .I enjoy reading a nice imagination which makes me think for sometime .and It is one of them.
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2011
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It is a well written beautiful poetry .I enjoy reading a nice imagination which makes me think for sometime .and It is one of them.
Comment Written 04-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2011
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I enjoyed this review and their is not better compliment. i thank you for both. Mike
Comment from Grumpylumpy
MikeK2,
Greetings from a grumpy old potato head. I know just how you feel. I'd give my dusty and diseased potato skin to be anything else but a mouldy potato.
"If I were but a rose," is densely packed with description and imagery, so much so that it needs to be read a few times to be understood fully.
Now to the criticism:-
....thorniness?
Is that a word?
I like the phrase, "forgotten in attic's hush."
You have written some fine phrases and once they are unpacked and understood, it works as a whole.
-Grumpylumpy is in his cellar still.
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reply by the author on 04-Oct-2011
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MikeK2,
Greetings from a grumpy old potato head. I know just how you feel. I'd give my dusty and diseased potato skin to be anything else but a mouldy potato.
"If I were but a rose," is densely packed with description and imagery, so much so that it needs to be read a few times to be understood fully.
Now to the criticism:-
....thorniness?
Is that a word?
I like the phrase, "forgotten in attic's hush."
You have written some fine phrases and once they are unpacked and understood, it works as a whole.
-Grumpylumpy is in his cellar still.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 04-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2011
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I'm always in the dog house, call it nature's callin. I meant thornless in this case and fixed it. I thank you for your compliments and this review. Mike
Comment from karaokequeen35
I thought the poem was very well written and displayed the emotions that the writer was feeling and I enjoyed reading the poem. I could feel how the poem was describing someone with low self worth and I thought that was sad but heart felt words.
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2011
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I thought the poem was very well written and displayed the emotions that the writer was feeling and I enjoyed reading the poem. I could feel how the poem was describing someone with low self worth and I thought that was sad but heart felt words.
Comment Written 04-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2011
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For such a long time, I have had such thoughts about love, yet it was thinking about money that made me feel the same and inspired this poem. While it has its sadness, I am hoping the honesty, desire and conviction shows through. Thank you for the compliments and this review. Sorry sometimes you can't turn of the poetry. Mike
Comment from peggles
This was an interesting verse
So much more to it than at first read
There is a deep moving message hidden beneath these lovely words
it is always a pleasure to read your work
Once again you have impressed me
I enjoyed reading this
It flows well and the rhyming was spot on
well done
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2011
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This was an interesting verse
So much more to it than at first read
There is a deep moving message hidden beneath these lovely words
it is always a pleasure to read your work
Once again you have impressed me
I enjoyed reading this
It flows well and the rhyming was spot on
well done
Comment Written 04-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2011
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I thank you very much for this review and you heart warming compliments. Mike
