Lonely Hearts Meet
Viewing comments for Chapter 34 "Part one, Chapter 11"Anna and her son escape from a man-made Hell.
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Comment from livingwords
This continues along at a good pace with good voices and a consistent message, personalizing the issue through your characters in a uncomplicated setting. Keep it going!! Dan :))
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2011
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This continues along at a good pace with good voices and a consistent message, personalizing the issue through your characters in a uncomplicated setting. Keep it going!! Dan :))
Comment Written 04-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Art Aliz
Hi barbara,
This is of course a very topical subject that needs sensitive handling. You are doing great with it.
I like to read such stories, like yours when they offer the kind of reader who may have experienced obuse, some real solutions and practical answers. Glad that you are writing this.
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2011
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Hi barbara,
This is of course a very topical subject that needs sensitive handling. You are doing great with it.
I like to read such stories, like yours when they offer the kind of reader who may have experienced obuse, some real solutions and practical answers. Glad that you are writing this.
Comment Written 04-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from misscookie
Fuirst I'm sory I didn't read chapter Ten I was so behind on others reviews plus going to the doctors by time I got back to the list you were gone. then It totally sliped my mind. until I was readinding the next chapter.
So I had to read both chapters to be up to date, Good job.
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2011
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Fuirst I'm sory I didn't read chapter Ten I was so behind on others reviews plus going to the doctors by time I got back to the list you were gone. then It totally sliped my mind. until I was readinding the next chapter.
So I had to read both chapters to be up to date, Good job.
Comment Written 04-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
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My pleasure.
Comment from Piggies Grandma
I enjoyed reading this poem very much, barbara. It is cleverly written and very well thought out. I'm glad the mother-in-law didn't get the boy.
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I enjoyed reading this poem very much, barbara. It is cleverly written and very well thought out. I'm glad the mother-in-law didn't get the boy.
Comment Written 04-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from dbmccarter
Just read these last two chapters and they are both great. I just knew they wouldn't go calmly into the night. Can't wait for the next part.
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Just read these last two chapters and they are both great. I just knew they wouldn't go calmly into the night. Can't wait for the next part.
Comment Written 04-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from forestport12
Excellent start, bu tan exceptional beginning. I'm a little surprised i don't see you name on chapter book nomination list more often. The way you constructed the final scene and the rippling anxiety of the mother, could be a lesson in dialogue used to strengthen character identification etc..
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Excellent start, bu tan exceptional beginning. I'm a little surprised i don't see you name on chapter book nomination list more often. The way you constructed the final scene and the rippling anxiety of the mother, could be a lesson in dialogue used to strengthen character identification etc..
Comment Written 03-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2011
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Thank you for the kind review. I am under the impresseion the powers that be don't like my work.
Comment from emmaysavage
This is excellent writing. I have not been following this story regularly, but was able to step back into it very easily. Your characters are strong and your writing cohesive. Keep it up.
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2011
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This is excellent writing. I have not been following this story regularly, but was able to step back into it very easily. Your characters are strong and your writing cohesive. Keep it up.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2011
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Thank you for the kind review,
Comment from teacherdub
Great attention getter, and it fulfilled what I anticipated. Getting custody was just the beginning of the next round for Anna. Good flow, excellent buildup, strong mix of good/bad. Keep the intensity and the message it delivers will be a beacon to those with abuse members in their family. Deborah
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2011
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Great attention getter, and it fulfilled what I anticipated. Getting custody was just the beginning of the next round for Anna. Good flow, excellent buildup, strong mix of good/bad. Keep the intensity and the message it delivers will be a beacon to those with abuse members in their family. Deborah
Comment Written 03-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2011
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Thank you for the kind review and encouraging words.
Comment from amada
Anna' s troubles seem far away from trouble. Yes, in laws sometimes are difficult to get along with, less understand. You keep the suspense very well.
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2011
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Anna' s troubles seem far away from trouble. Yes, in laws sometimes are difficult to get along with, less understand. You keep the suspense very well.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from MS Writer
Great action and well written so that it is easy to read. It offers good action and we can't help but like the main characters. What a mother-in-law! I had never considered the extending family in an abuse case. Very believable story.
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2011
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Great action and well written so that it is easy to read. It offers good action and we can't help but like the main characters. What a mother-in-law! I had never considered the extending family in an abuse case. Very believable story.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
