Ode to the Windmill
Ode Haiku?8 total reviews
Comment from Jean Lutz
Both words and art work in harmony to bring a message. With water in such short supply the windmill may have to work even harder. Best to you with the entry.
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2011
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Both words and art work in harmony to bring a message. With water in such short supply the windmill may have to work even harder. Best to you with the entry.
Comment Written 01-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2011
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Thank you for your kind review. Yes, Texas is having a drought at present and the worse summer that I can remember.
Comment from whizpurr ^-^
Hello writer,
I enjoyed your interesting ode haiku to a windmill. Good subject choice and the pic you chose is great. Best wishes to you in the contest.
Warm regards,
W ^-^
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2011
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Hello writer,
I enjoyed your interesting ode haiku to a windmill. Good subject choice and the pic you chose is great. Best wishes to you in the contest.
Warm regards,
W ^-^
Comment Written 01-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2011
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Thank you for your kind review of my work. I'm glad you liked my picture. Besides reading and writing my next favorite thing to do is photography. Of course, just an amateur at all of the above but that does not stop me. :o)
Comment from purrfect tale
Perfect image of a windmill, the picture is great also. Technically, all the correct syllable counts on all the correct lines.
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2011
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Perfect image of a windmill, the picture is great also. Technically, all the correct syllable counts on all the correct lines.
Comment Written 30-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2011
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Thank you for your kind review of my work. I'm glad you liked my picture. Besides reading and writing my next favorite thing to do is photography. Of course, just an amateur at all of the above but that does not stop me. :o)
Comment from ExperiencingLiphe
You have just "attempted" this but you pulled it off. I love it. When I read this I immediately thought of something my parents had that made noise in the wind and then it hit me, that's a wind chime. Haha. Great job
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2011
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You have just "attempted" this but you pulled it off. I love it. When I read this I immediately thought of something my parents had that made noise in the wind and then it hit me, that's a wind chime. Haha. Great job
Comment Written 30-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2011
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Thank you for your kind review of my work. I love wind chimes. :o)
Comment from judiverse
Good subject matter, and the 5/7/5 format is perfect. "Let the strong wind blow" is nice. The one suggestion I would make is that you use several words (articles and prepositions like up, from, the) When you have only 17 syllables to work with, you might want to use stronger nouns or verbs instead. Best wishes. judiverse
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2011
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Good subject matter, and the 5/7/5 format is perfect. "Let the strong wind blow" is nice. The one suggestion I would make is that you use several words (articles and prepositions like up, from, the) When you have only 17 syllables to work with, you might want to use stronger nouns or verbs instead. Best wishes. judiverse
Comment Written 30-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2011
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Thanks for your kind review. I thought that the topic windmills might be too "boring" but gave it a shot anyway. :o)
Comment from missy98writer
your poem is very well written. Your words paint a vivid picture in the reader head. You did a great job using alliteration in this haiku. I enjoyed the lines: "West Texas windmill Water drawn up from the ground Let the strong wind blow." your haiku is in great form and syllable count of 5/7/5. In seventeen syllables you've create a picture of nature in the readers head. Effective satori line. You poem is an excellent entry in the Ode Haiku (oxymornic creation) writing prompt. Good luck in the contest with this lovely haiku about windmills- it reminds me of the song Windmills of My Mind. I'd recommend this poem to other reviewers. Have a nice day.
Missy.
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2011
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your poem is very well written. Your words paint a vivid picture in the reader head. You did a great job using alliteration in this haiku. I enjoyed the lines: "West Texas windmill Water drawn up from the ground Let the strong wind blow." your haiku is in great form and syllable count of 5/7/5. In seventeen syllables you've create a picture of nature in the readers head. Effective satori line. You poem is an excellent entry in the Ode Haiku (oxymornic creation) writing prompt. Good luck in the contest with this lovely haiku about windmills- it reminds me of the song Windmills of My Mind. I'd recommend this poem to other reviewers. Have a nice day.
Missy.
Comment Written 30-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2011
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Thanks for your kind review. I thought that the topic windmills might be too "boring" but gave it a shot anyway. :o)
Comment from livelylinda
Author,
I looked up the definition of "ode" - a lyrical poem with enthusiastic emotion. Close enough. You have described what it is used for and taken a picture to show us. Perfect meter and good words in this piece. Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest.
livelylinda
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2011
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Author,
I looked up the definition of "ode" - a lyrical poem with enthusiastic emotion. Close enough. You have described what it is used for and taken a picture to show us. Perfect meter and good words in this piece. Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest.
livelylinda
Comment Written 30-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2011
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Thanks for your kind review. I thought that the topic windmills might be too "boring" but gave it a shot anyway. :o)
Comment from LateBloomer
hello author,
oh yes, very good haiku - great sentiment. i particularly liked the following:
Let the strong wind blow
(and turn that wheel)
good format and syllable count. good luck in the contest.
regards, LateBloomer
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2011
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hello author,
oh yes, very good haiku - great sentiment. i particularly liked the following:
Let the strong wind blow
(and turn that wheel)
good format and syllable count. good luck in the contest.
regards, LateBloomer
Comment Written 30-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2011
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Thanks for your kind review. I thought that the topic windmills might be too "boring" but gave it a go anyway. :o)
