Steve's Poems for Kids
Viewing comments for Chapter 18 "Almost..."A collection of my children's poems
87 total reviews
Comment from Belinda
Hi, this is really fun. She is one adventurous little lady, quite a handful, right? Luckily none of yours (and mine) is that much! A delightful poem.
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2011
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Hi, this is really fun. She is one adventurous little lady, quite a handful, right? Luckily none of yours (and mine) is that much! A delightful poem.
Comment Written 30-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2011
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Ha! You've given something away there - you are the only one who assumed the culprit was a girl!
Thanks for the review.
Steve
Comment from Jake's Peer
Some really great laughs (and memories)...really enjoyed the revisit of childhood, where imagination was such a big playground. Had moments where your writing was reminiscent of AA Milne, one of my favourite authors since I was 6...thank you for that...
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2011
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Some really great laughs (and memories)...really enjoyed the revisit of childhood, where imagination was such a big playground. Had moments where your writing was reminiscent of AA Milne, one of my favourite authors since I was 6...thank you for that...
Comment Written 30-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2011
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Maybe you took his advice
I think I'll stay six now for ever and ever...
Thanks for the review.
Steve
Comment from seashellrees4
If I had six stars to award, I would award them. This was very funny! lol The picture you chose was great. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2011
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If I had six stars to award, I would award them. This was very funny! lol The picture you chose was great. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 30-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2011
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Thank you for your kind words and the virtual six.
Steve
Comment from livelylinda
Author,
How cute a tale you have written. I admire the uniqueness of this piece. A child's view of his world when he gets into trouble is much different than a parents' view. Good job here. Made me giggle all the way through.
livelylinda
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2011
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Author,
How cute a tale you have written. I admire the uniqueness of this piece. A child's view of his world when he gets into trouble is much different than a parents' view. Good job here. Made me giggle all the way through.
livelylinda
Comment Written 30-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2011
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Thanks, Linda - glad you enjoyed my terrible tot...
Steve
Comment from N.K. Wagner
This is absolutely wonderful! One of the best "through the eyes of a child" pieces I've ever read - not one ounce of embarrassment or remorse anywhere. The little guy's innocence is nearly overwhelming. Why don't I have any sixes when I really need them? :) Nancy
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2011
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This is absolutely wonderful! One of the best "through the eyes of a child" pieces I've ever read - not one ounce of embarrassment or remorse anywhere. The little guy's innocence is nearly overwhelming. Why don't I have any sixes when I really need them? :) Nancy
Comment Written 30-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2011
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Thanks, Nancy.
Second piece this week where I've scored through a little kid's view of the world - what does that tell you?
Steve
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Well, I know you're not a little kid (you spell too well), so I guess you're either very observant, or spend way too much time with rug rats. (As observed by the mother of three, grandmother of two.) :D Nancy
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You missed option 3 I am a child at heart and maybe option 4 I am very childish!
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Child-LIKE, Steve. :D Nancy
Comment from Betty517
This is a very funny and cute poem. I found this a very funny read. I love the ending it is so fitting. I want to wish you luck in the contest.
Betty
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2011
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This is a very funny and cute poem. I found this a very funny read. I love the ending it is so fitting. I want to wish you luck in the contest.
Betty
Comment Written 30-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2011
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Thanks, betty for the kind words and the best wishes - I sneaked into a tie for first place...
Steve
Comment from Yvon
A funny little poem that rings of things that could have been done. I enjoyed the story and how it flowed. I 'almost' never read it!
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2011
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A funny little poem that rings of things that could have been done. I enjoyed the story and how it flowed. I 'almost' never read it!
Comment Written 30-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2011
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Thank you for your kind words, Yvon. Glad you enjoyed.
Steve
Comment from Denise S
I dont think there was enough of what you should have done. It is too much of what you almost did. But your poem was quite nicely done.
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reply by the author on 01-Oct-2011
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I dont think there was enough of what you should have done. It is too much of what you almost did. But your poem was quite nicely done.
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Comment Written 30-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2011
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Thanks for the review, Denise.
I admit I twisted the prompt a little for humorous effect, but I don't think you have it right either. The prompt was The Life he Almost Lived so not about what he SHOULD have done...
Steve
Comment from WilliamDeen
Well this does sound A LOT Like my second child! My boy! He is a mess, still at
23. Your poem has good rhyme and cadence. But mostly it just makes me smile!
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2011
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Well this does sound A LOT Like my second child! My boy! He is a mess, still at
23. Your poem has good rhyme and cadence. But mostly it just makes me smile!
Comment Written 30-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2011
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You mean he still puts his underpants on inside out at 23!?
Thanks for the review and the smile
Steve
Comment from Malerie
This is so cute; I really enjoyed reading this piece and the artwork is really great. I can relate as I am sure many parents can to most of the "I almost" events. The "My underpants were inside-out, my shirt was back to front" is really funny at I remember when the toddler no longer wanted help getting dressed. This would make a great little illustrated book for children.
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2011
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This is so cute; I really enjoyed reading this piece and the artwork is really great. I can relate as I am sure many parents can to most of the "I almost" events. The "My underpants were inside-out, my shirt was back to front" is really funny at I remember when the toddler no longer wanted help getting dressed. This would make a great little illustrated book for children.
Comment Written 30-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2011
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Thank you, Mal
I seem to be on a hot streak writing from the POV of young kids... What does that tell you.
Steve
