Gold Medalist
Short story16 total reviews
Comment from Denise S
I think thee is a lot more you could do with this , it was just about an ice skater and all she did on the ice , this made it a little dull I think
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reply by the author on 01-Oct-2011
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I think thee is a lot more you could do with this , it was just about an ice skater and all she did on the ice , this made it a little dull I think
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Comment Written 30-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2011
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Yes, I am sure I could have down more, but this day I wanted to see how close I could get to explaining the performance. I could certainly expand on it latr. Right now, i was interested to see how this part would turn out. Thanks!Debbie
Comment from WilliamDeen
her coaches waiting arms./// her coaches' waiting arms.
GREAT story! It was written well. I could envision the girl ice skating and doing her twirls!
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2011
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her coaches waiting arms./// her coaches' waiting arms.
GREAT story! It was written well. I could envision the girl ice skating and doing her twirls!
Comment Written 30-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2011
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Thanks for correcting my error. I like to have my writing perfect at least in terms of spelling and grammer. Glad you enjoyed the story. I had written one several years ago and feel this is a much better piece!!!! DEbbie
Comment from mumsyone
Great detailed description of Dorothy Hamil's skating event. I remember how good she was in the Olympics several years ago. My granddaughter skates, so I could feel your emotion as you watched Dorothy on the ice.
My only suggestion would be to divide your story into paragraphs and separate the paragraphs with a blank space.
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2011
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Great detailed description of Dorothy Hamil's skating event. I remember how good she was in the Olympics several years ago. My granddaughter skates, so I could feel your emotion as you watched Dorothy on the ice.
My only suggestion would be to divide your story into paragraphs and separate the paragraphs with a blank space.
Comment Written 29-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2011
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I thought of that to, but wasn't sure where to make the breaks. I'll work with it some and try. Thank you so much for your kind review and comments!!! Debbie
Comment from Hareem.S
The performance seems awesome. You have so vividly penned it, the reader can almost see the beauty of it. Its short and very descriptive. A nice, unique read.
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2011
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The performance seems awesome. You have so vividly penned it, the reader can almost see the beauty of it. Its short and very descriptive. A nice, unique read.
Comment Written 29-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2011
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Thank you so much for your kind review and comments!!! Debbie
Comment from Barbara Scheepers
Beautifully written - I felt that I was watching the skater performing, and could feel the adrenalin pumping, and the anticipation of a lifetime. The flow was excellent, and I look forward to more!
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reply by the author on 01-Oct-2011
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Beautifully written - I felt that I was watching the skater performing, and could feel the adrenalin pumping, and the anticipation of a lifetime. The flow was excellent, and I look forward to more!
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Comment Written 29-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2011
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Thank you so much for your kind review and comments!!! Debbie
Comment from oNray
Good story, direction and presentation. Kept me interested, feeling part of the situation. Did she get it? Have to come back next year?
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2011
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Good story, direction and presentation. Kept me interested, feeling part of the situation. Did she get it? Have to come back next year?
Comment Written 29-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2011
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I think she probably did!!! I tried writing that as an ending, but it seemed better to leave it too one's imagination.Thank you so much for your kind review and comments!!! Debbie
