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Lonely Hearts Meet

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Anna and her son escape from a man-made Hell.

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Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
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Just as it sounded like things were getting better, now it seems they are much scarier and far more dangerous. Does such an angry man follow a no-contact order. I feel frighted for Anna and Michael~DEbbie

 Comment Written 25-Sep-2011


reply by the author on 25-Sep-2011
    Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from jadapenn
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Oh, no. The devil is loose to start his tricks. The judge should have locked him away. I guess this can't be done in every case. I loved the progress of the story. You bring out the feelings of angst well.
Well written. luv jada

 Comment Written 25-Sep-2011


reply by the author on 25-Sep-2011
    Bobby is in jail for three months. I don't think you have met his mother, yet. I think you were gone with I introduced her. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Connie P
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Anna's right. Bobby won't be stopped by the courts. He'll do whatever he can to either ruin her life or kill her. Although it wasn't a mistake to divorce him, he would have killed her eventually.
I'll be waiting for the next chapter.
Note:
*dark woodened desk. - dark wooden desk
Connie

 Comment Written 25-Sep-2011


reply by the author on 25-Sep-2011
    Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from tango494
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I have missed some of the story and will do my best to go back and catch up but this was very well written. As I have told you before I love how well you write dialogues and your narration is amazingly good. Another Awesome job!!!!!

 Comment Written 25-Sep-2011


reply by the author on 25-Sep-2011
    Thank you for the review and the encouraging words.
Comment from mumsyone
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"I see you turned this room into a nursery."
I believe this was already brought out in a previous chapter. Just a suggestion, but it might work better for Anna to say something like, "I love the way you've turned this room into a nursery" (instead of making it sound like it's the first she knew about it). Good chapter, Barbara.

 Comment Written 25-Sep-2011


reply by the author on 25-Sep-2011
    It is the first she knew about it. Betty bought a swing and a high chair before, but not a crib. I appreciate your review.
reply by mumsyone on 25-Sep-2011
    It was the nursery in question, not the crib, but that's okay.
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2011
    nope, didn't mentiion a nursery before.
Comment from Maureen's Pen
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WOW! Nicely done. Your characters have shown the right amount of emotion and near the end I was a little worried to.
Well written and great flow. Your imagery even with the characters really creates the evil and danger within the character Bobby.
Enjoyed reading this and where you are at in this story.
Thanks for sharing.
Maureen

 Comment Written 25-Sep-2011


reply by the author on 25-Sep-2011
    Thank you for the kind review and continued support.
Comment from Gungalo
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The law has no teeth to enforce it is decisions. Millions of women face this every day and most fail. It's a crime in and of itself. So sad.

 Comment Written 25-Sep-2011


reply by the author on 25-Sep-2011
    I agree. Thank you for your kind review.
reply by Gungalo on 25-Sep-2011
    No problem, girl!!
Comment from robina1978
Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level

Had not been able to give you a six star yet. This is for your whole book so far.
It is so good that you attract as much attention for this subject as possible.
Also I think it is great you mention the help line. And the tips in your foot note.
This chapter held my attention once more all the way.
Characters and dialogues so realistic- as if you have been there yourself.

 Comment Written 25-Sep-2011


reply by the author on 25-Sep-2011
    I have had one reviewer mention they have used the hot-line. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from c_lucas
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It looks life Anna came out ahead of the game. Bobby still remains a threat. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for an easy read.

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 Comment Written 25-Sep-2011


reply by the author on 25-Sep-2011
    Thank you for your kind review and support.
reply by c_lucas on 25-Sep-2011
    You're welcome, Barbara. Charlie