Lonely Hearts Meet
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Comment from healfromwithin
Good work on this chapter. The legalese within this context of family divorce court is believable and clear. The dialogue seems "looser" and less formal. I didn't find any major errors to point out. Well done.
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2011
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Good work on this chapter. The legalese within this context of family divorce court is believable and clear. The dialogue seems "looser" and less formal. I didn't find any major errors to point out. Well done.
Comment Written 26-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from *erin*
Ugh, Bobby is such a jerk. The fact that he doesn't believe that he is in the wrong is really scary. I really hope Anna is able to stay from him. Great chapter. No mistakes that I could find. Well written as always.
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2011
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Ugh, Bobby is such a jerk. The fact that he doesn't believe that he is in the wrong is really scary. I really hope Anna is able to stay from him. Great chapter. No mistakes that I could find. Well written as always.
Comment Written 25-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from jaeladarling
Oooh, and it ends with a cliffhanger! I'm glad I stumbled into this story. Just this portion is a good read. And I appreciate your efforts to bring about domestic violence awareness. Great work!
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2011
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Oooh, and it ends with a cliffhanger! I'm glad I stumbled into this story. Just this portion is a good read. And I appreciate your efforts to bring about domestic violence awareness. Great work!
Comment Written 25-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from AprilShower
This fellow is simply horrible, and he doesn't even realize it. He actually thinks he's okay. This is the way it is in real life. Some people can't ever be reached. Good story, Barbara.
April
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2011
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This fellow is simply horrible, and he doesn't even realize it. He actually thinks he's okay. This is the way it is in real life. Some people can't ever be reached. Good story, Barbara.
April
Comment Written 25-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
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You're welcome, Barbara.
Comment from Rdfrdmom2
barbara:
Anna's reaction to winning her court case may seem
strange to some but it is absolutely right on target.
I gave this a six because, once again, you have
captured the real reason most abused partners never
leave the situation--they are more afraid of being
away from the partner than being with them. It is a
helluva way to live.
thanks for sharing
love,
jan
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2011
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barbara:
Anna's reaction to winning her court case may seem
strange to some but it is absolutely right on target.
I gave this a six because, once again, you have
captured the real reason most abused partners never
leave the situation--they are more afraid of being
away from the partner than being with them. It is a
helluva way to live.
thanks for sharing
love,
jan
Comment Written 25-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Rama Rao
Excellent.
The story moved forward briskly and held my interest. I am now waiting to read how Anna progresses in her life. What new tricks will Bobby try?
A few minor points.
1. Michael fell asleep- instead of went to sleep as he is just a kid.
2.You're spoiling (him rotten)
3. the marriage is absolved- annulled?
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2011
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Excellent.
The story moved forward briskly and held my interest. I am now waiting to read how Anna progresses in her life. What new tricks will Bobby try?
A few minor points.
1. Michael fell asleep- instead of went to sleep as he is just a kid.
2.You're spoiling (him rotten)
3. the marriage is absolved- annulled?
Comment Written 25-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2011
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Thank you for the kind review. I will look intos those areas.
Comment from The Stranger
this story continues to be so brilliant, both in the story of Anna's continual battle to be free of her violent former partner, amd also in the awareness that it provokes in domestic violence cases
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2011
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this story continues to be so brilliant, both in the story of Anna's continual battle to be free of her violent former partner, amd also in the awareness that it provokes in domestic violence cases
Comment Written 25-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Readywriter52
Bobby is a real jerk who treats his wife and child as subjects rather than family. I think Anna has a lot to worry about. Bobby will try to kill her or kidnap Michael.. He's a dangerous man.
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2011
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Bobby is a real jerk who treats his wife and child as subjects rather than family. I think Anna has a lot to worry about. Bobby will try to kill her or kidnap Michael.. He's a dangerous man.
Comment Written 25-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from missy98writer
Barbara,
Your latest chapter is splendidly written. Your imagery is great and you descriptive writing and dialogue are excellent. I liked what Betty stated about Bobby: ""On the stand Bobby showed every symptom of an abuser, male supremacy, no accountability for his actions, and cruelty to animals. He didn't come across as caring for his son or apologetic for his actions. The judge should rule in our favor." How distressing that Bobbie threatened her. I fear for Anna now. I fear only a bullet or him going in jail for life will stop him. You characterization of a creepy louse of a spouse is chilling to me. I loved this chapter and I'd recommend it to other reviewers. You are a top notch writer, my friend. I hope you're doing fine a school, Teacher. Have a nice evening and a marvelous Monday. Love you.
Melissa!
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2011
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Barbara,
Your latest chapter is splendidly written. Your imagery is great and you descriptive writing and dialogue are excellent. I liked what Betty stated about Bobby: ""On the stand Bobby showed every symptom of an abuser, male supremacy, no accountability for his actions, and cruelty to animals. He didn't come across as caring for his son or apologetic for his actions. The judge should rule in our favor." How distressing that Bobbie threatened her. I fear for Anna now. I fear only a bullet or him going in jail for life will stop him. You characterization of a creepy louse of a spouse is chilling to me. I loved this chapter and I'd recommend it to other reviewers. You are a top notch writer, my friend. I hope you're doing fine a school, Teacher. Have a nice evening and a marvelous Monday. Love you.
Melissa!
Comment Written 25-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, barbara, a great job writing this part of your book, the judge's ruling and bobby's reaction seemed spot on what would actually happen...
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2011
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this is very well written, barbara, a great job writing this part of your book, the judge's ruling and bobby's reaction seemed spot on what would actually happen...
Comment Written 25-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
