The dragon Mareng
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15 total reviews
Comment from lynnkah
I love fun stories that allow one to visualize the images in their own mind and this one has me craking up. almost as much as flying wolves going to school LOL. I have got to read this to my grandkids they will love it.
lynnkah
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2011
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I love fun stories that allow one to visualize the images in their own mind and this one has me craking up. almost as much as flying wolves going to school LOL. I have got to read this to my grandkids they will love it.
lynnkah
Comment Written 02-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2011
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Thanks so much for your kind review. Blessings, Ine.
Comment from Charlene0513
To Robina1978,
This story deals with two topics. You discreetly mentioned to Mareng about the school and home that they'll need.
But you are narrating it as though it was a script. Is there a reason for that.
Also,do not understand: After a "fortnight," they
Could you please explain.
Charlene
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2011
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To Robina1978,
This story deals with two topics. You discreetly mentioned to Mareng about the school and home that they'll need.
But you are narrating it as though it was a script. Is there a reason for that.
Also,do not understand: After a "fortnight," they
Could you please explain.
Charlene
Comment Written 28-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2011
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Thanks so much for your review. Take care, Ine. Next chapter is about school. Try to keep them short for children's sake.
Comment from misscookie
I love this story very much for it is so on point
It's what we human are going through in our everyday life.
There is amessage with inj this story.
Thank you very much for sharing.
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2011
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I love this story very much for it is so on point
It's what we human are going through in our everyday life.
There is amessage with inj this story.
Thank you very much for sharing.
Comment Written 28-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2011
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Thanks so much for your kind review. Blessings and take care, Ine
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Your very welcome.
Comment from Jean Lutz
Seems as if the dragon parents are very reality minded. I wonder what age you are writing this for? Also I was wondering about the setting. The one child restriction seems to be one concerned with population control.
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2011
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Seems as if the dragon parents are very reality minded. I wonder what age you are writing this for? Also I was wondering about the setting. The one child restriction seems to be one concerned with population control.
Comment Written 27-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2011
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Thanks so much for your review. Blessings and take care, Ine
Comment from Cassie Needham
This really feels like science fiction, Dragons living as people do, and having the same problems and concerns, school, realestate, birthcontrol, school, and even school uniforms. This is a facinating, almost documentary drama on the lives of dragons if they were people. It still has that old lengend feel to it too, as if this all happended long ago. This would make a great little children's story if you left the part out about the birth control. The part about the birthcontrol gives the story an adult feel, but not a bad thing if you are only writing for adults or teens. Great job!
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2011
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This really feels like science fiction, Dragons living as people do, and having the same problems and concerns, school, realestate, birthcontrol, school, and even school uniforms. This is a facinating, almost documentary drama on the lives of dragons if they were people. It still has that old lengend feel to it too, as if this all happended long ago. This would make a great little children's story if you left the part out about the birth control. The part about the birthcontrol gives the story an adult feel, but not a bad thing if you are only writing for adults or teens. Great job!
Comment Written 27-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2011
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Thanks so much for your review. Blessings and take care, Ine
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Your welcome!
Comment from Chris Tee
This is an absolutely divine story you have here and you kept me captivated throughout the read old sport
Well done with the structure and content.
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2011
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This is an absolutely divine story you have here and you kept me captivated throughout the read old sport
Well done with the structure and content.
Comment Written 26-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2011
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Thanks so much for your review. Much appreciated. Have a nice day/evening, Ine
Comment from Carolyn 12
I enjoyed reading part 2. Mareng is a character, I like the way he sounds like a kid. New permanet home sounds great-love the picture. Thanks for sharing. Look forward to seeing how school went.
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2011
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I enjoyed reading part 2. Mareng is a character, I like the way he sounds like a kid. New permanet home sounds great-love the picture. Thanks for sharing. Look forward to seeing how school went.
Comment Written 26-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2011
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Thanks so much for your review. Much appreciated. Have a nice day/evening, Ine
Comment from Dutchie
Hi Ine, Great story with a lot of fantasy. The story is a lesson of life and very entertaining.It contains the practical problems of life and the decisions we have to take.
But told in a nice and pleasant way. Children will love it, and so do I. Liefs Fia
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2011
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Hi Ine, Great story with a lot of fantasy. The story is a lesson of life and very entertaining.It contains the practical problems of life and the decisions we have to take.
But told in a nice and pleasant way. Children will love it, and so do I. Liefs Fia
Comment Written 26-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2011
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Thanks so much for your review. Much appreciated. Have a nice day/evening, Ine
Comment from rheabug
I like this story line. It shows great imagination with previous thought to what this is all about. Good Job! Blessings, Linda
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2011
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I like this story line. It shows great imagination with previous thought to what this is all about. Good Job! Blessings, Linda
Comment Written 25-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2011
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Thanks so much for your review. Much appreciated. Have a nice day/evening, Ine
Comment from rchitwood
Very good and I enjoyed reading about little Mareng's going to school.Your story has good imagination and is very well written I still think it would make a nice children's story.I would recommend this to others.Blessings Rita
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2011
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Very good and I enjoyed reading about little Mareng's going to school.Your story has good imagination and is very well written I still think it would make a nice children's story.I would recommend this to others.Blessings Rita
Comment Written 25-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2011
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Thanks so much for your review. Much appreciated. Have a nice day/evening, Ine
