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Idyll Poem8 total reviews
Comment from elliejean
The ghost may not have said anything about your straight air but it sounds like you had a good talk anyway. I like the place you choose for this affair. This was a good piece of work.
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2011
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The ghost may not have said anything about your straight air but it sounds like you had a good talk anyway. I like the place you choose for this affair. This was a good piece of work.
Comment Written 20-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2011
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Thank you : )
Comment from elspeth glenn
You have some incredible images in this poem - rich, colourful images. You clearly have an intellect and a fanciful heart. What I missed in this poem was a sense of cohesion. I would encourage you to sit with this and make of it the masterpiece I think it could be!
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2011
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You have some incredible images in this poem - rich, colourful images. You clearly have an intellect and a fanciful heart. What I missed in this poem was a sense of cohesion. I would encourage you to sit with this and make of it the masterpiece I think it could be!
Comment Written 18-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2011
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Thank you : )
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Thank you : )
Comment from Robin Priebe
The poem is surreal, seems disjointed, very descriptive, authors notes were excellent, and provided a feast of imaginative situations.
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2011
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The poem is surreal, seems disjointed, very descriptive, authors notes were excellent, and provided a feast of imaginative situations.
Comment Written 17-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2011
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It was my first Idyll Poem. I followed the directions. Maybe it's suppose to be surreal. Thank you.
Comment from yndemand
I liked the end where the beam of light took the ghostly friend with out a care. It was easy to read flowed along nicely. You should title your work that I feel makes it yours totally,the picture accented your poem nicely
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2011
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I liked the end where the beam of light took the ghostly friend with out a care. It was easy to read flowed along nicely. You should title your work that I feel makes it yours totally,the picture accented your poem nicely
Comment Written 17-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2011
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you're nice. thank you.
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you're nice. thank you.
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
This has some really good descriptive lines,
but is more about Kahlil Gibran's
and unless one knows who the person
is, it is difficult to relate to.
perhaps you could mention his identity in your author notes.
Good luck with the contest,
Margaret
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2011
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This has some really good descriptive lines,
but is more about Kahlil Gibran's
and unless one knows who the person
is, it is difficult to relate to.
perhaps you could mention his identity in your author notes.
Good luck with the contest,
Margaret
Comment Written 11-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2011
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Idyll Poems are about meeting an revived dead people (heroes) in a country scene. I chose Kahlil Gibran. He was a poet that changed lives with his words. And most poets always write about curly haired women. They're wild and fun. I must be the opposite, but I like him because of his poetry. So I chose him for my Idyll Poem.
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I've never heard of him. I must look him up on the web, as he sounds interesting. Thank you. M
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I see he is indeed famous. Fancy, I hadn't heard of him. You have me curious now... I must read some of his work. M
Comment from whizpurr ^-^
Hello Writer,
In your wonderful IDYLL poem you describe so many beautiful realistic scenes in an interesting rambling way... your poem seems to bounce from one place to another in the same way a dream does. Your descriptions well voiced and many of them are quite beautiful.
Best wishes to you in the contest. Warm regards, W ^-^
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2011
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Hello Writer,
In your wonderful IDYLL poem you describe so many beautiful realistic scenes in an interesting rambling way... your poem seems to bounce from one place to another in the same way a dream does. Your descriptions well voiced and many of them are quite beautiful.
Best wishes to you in the contest. Warm regards, W ^-^
Comment Written 26-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2011
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I like the poetic style, but it's hard. The style is totally high maintenance. You're quite nice. Thank you. :)
Comment from James Tipton
"Strength" in the next to the last line is mispelled.
I think this interesting poem begins a bit too low. Perhaps it might begin with "In the distance,the leaves," and them move into the picnic with you. That picnic idea is really cool and I would like to see you expand on that part.
Jim
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2011
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"Strength" in the next to the last line is mispelled.
I think this interesting poem begins a bit too low. Perhaps it might begin with "In the distance,the leaves," and them move into the picnic with you. That picnic idea is really cool and I would like to see you expand on that part.
Jim
Comment Written 23-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2011
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You're nice. Thank you.
Comment from morganalefay
Your imagery was well done, but what was the poem about? Using the context clues, I gathered that it was about a girl who went on a picnic, but I'm not 100 percent sure. Try to be a little more clear next time.
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2011
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Your imagery was well done, but what was the poem about? Using the context clues, I gathered that it was about a girl who went on a picnic, but I'm not 100 percent sure. Try to be a little more clear next time.
Comment Written 23-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2011
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Idyll Poetry... is about interactions with people that have pasted, heroes per say, in a countryside setting. So in the poem, I met Kahlil Gibran. His spirit rose and we had lunch in a mellow meadow. The details are in the contest details.
Thank you.
