A Miracle
Incredible journeys of hummingbirds33 total reviews
Comment from Daylok
You write a very nice image here of life for this graceful bird!! A lovely story about survival. Well done!! The picture is a good one as well!! ~Daylok
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You write a very nice image here of life for this graceful bird!! A lovely story about survival. Well done!! The picture is a good one as well!! ~Daylok
Comment Written 28-Sep-2011
Comment from HPicasso
Beautiful little tale for me.. What a lovely scene you have written here I love your description of this bird..This little bird call "SUN-BIRD" graceful inform and active in motion, su-birds flit from flower to flower, feeding on small insects which are attracted by the nectar and on the nectar itself, but this is usually done while perched and ralely on the wing as is the habit of humming-birds.
You have a nice writing style.. Very good.
Congratulation!
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Beautiful little tale for me.. What a lovely scene you have written here I love your description of this bird..This little bird call "SUN-BIRD" graceful inform and active in motion, su-birds flit from flower to flower, feeding on small insects which are attracted by the nectar and on the nectar itself, but this is usually done while perched and ralely on the wing as is the habit of humming-birds.
You have a nice writing style.. Very good.
Congratulation!
Comment Written 28-Sep-2011
Comment from forestport12
The struggle of life. I think you wanted to paint an interesting picture in words of the elegant and delicate balance for life turning into at times the viscous struggle to survive. Nice touch.
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The struggle of life. I think you wanted to paint an interesting picture in words of the elegant and delicate balance for life turning into at times the viscous struggle to survive. Nice touch.
Comment Written 28-Sep-2011
Comment from N.K. Wagner
They'll be back. I used to live in Fayetteville, NC where hummingbirds are everywhere. One would come to the feeder outside my kitchen window several times a day. And I'd receive an avian tongue-lashing if the feeder wasn't filled to her satisfaction. :) Susan, I think I'd move the last sentence of the first paragraph, making it the first sentence of the second. Well described. :) Nancy
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2011
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They'll be back. I used to live in Fayetteville, NC where hummingbirds are everywhere. One would come to the feeder outside my kitchen window several times a day. And I'd receive an avian tongue-lashing if the feeder wasn't filled to her satisfaction. :) Susan, I think I'd move the last sentence of the first paragraph, making it the first sentence of the second. Well described. :) Nancy
Comment Written 28-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2011
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HI Nancy...you were so right...I moved the sentence...it was way out of place! ") I think when I typed it, I copied it wrong. I write on paper, then go to the computer? NO excuse tho. Thank you for the encouragement and wonderful help too! ")) Susan
Comment from Laurie Clayton
This is a wonderful account of
how our feathered friends may prepare
themselves physically and mentally
for the long journey of migration.
Good description of the hereditary
navigation systems.
just one small thought for you to consider,
[She had almost waited too long,]consider using a semi-colon here as I feel this and the following
form two complete yet related sentances. Just a thought and only a suggestion.
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2011
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This is a wonderful account of
how our feathered friends may prepare
themselves physically and mentally
for the long journey of migration.
Good description of the hereditary
navigation systems.
just one small thought for you to consider,
[She had almost waited too long,]consider using a semi-colon here as I feel this and the following
form two complete yet related sentances. Just a thought and only a suggestion.
Comment Written 28-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2011
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HI Laurie! I will check the sentence tomorrow...just finishing up for now, need a nap. IF I am allowed to do so in my OWN bed...I am always so happy if you like my stuff! ") I saw a little female today...I hope she's on her way out of here...God love her. And all the little creatures. And you too Laurie. xoxo...susan
Comment from misscookie
What a beauitful story
You kept me smiling all through the story.
i Love how yourstory move from the first line to the last I also found ut very refreshing. it like human going southwen thesnow comes.
Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2011
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What a beauitful story
You kept me smiling all through the story.
i Love how yourstory move from the first line to the last I also found ut very refreshing. it like human going southwen thesnow comes.
Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 28-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2011
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Hi Cookie! Ahh, to know you smiled...what a pleasure my friend. Thank YOU! I wish I could go somewhere warm all winter! LOL! OH well. Too many binding ties here...maybe someday. ")) Stay warm? It's getting cool! Susan
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You're very welcome.
Comment from robina1978
Lovely short story about these nice bird, with a nice picture to complement.
Did not know they migrated down south, but most do.
You described well how they might get started and good for you they do come back again.
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2011
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Lovely short story about these nice bird, with a nice picture to complement.
Did not know they migrated down south, but most do.
You described well how they might get started and good for you they do come back again.
Comment Written 28-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2011
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HI Ine! Thank you! It's going to be a long winter...I did see a little female today...I was so surprised...she will be gone tho. It's getting cold already...I took the sugar water down weeks ago...so they will leave for the South American Continent. I just LOVE them...I wish you had them around...in southern Indiana they were THICK as flies. In northern Indiana they are sparse. I despise northern Indiana...flat, windy, cold. Oh well. Sorry for the rant. HUGS and it's nice to hear from you! Susan
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Yes there is people in our flat that I think go to Spain for the winter. Here there is a long and cold winter predicted. We will just wait and see.
Comment from Espresso momma
I wish I could fly away ten thousand miles when the weather changed to cold. Don't you? nice poem. They are pretty little things..
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2011
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I wish I could fly away ten thousand miles when the weather changed to cold. Don't you? nice poem. They are pretty little things..
Comment Written 28-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2011
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HI Roberta! YES! Let's go! I WISH! It's neat when people can go south until April. That's how it SHOULD be. HA! But I would just stay. I like being home. "home"...lol! Thanks again! xoxo, susan
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, susan, a great job writing this story about the hummingbird and the information i didn't know about them. hummingbirds are so beautiful to watch and they are the only bird that can fly backwards
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2011
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this is very well written, susan, a great job writing this story about the hummingbird and the information i didn't know about them. hummingbirds are so beautiful to watch and they are the only bird that can fly backwards
Comment Written 28-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2011
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HI Sweetie...I was hoping you would like this! If you can, watch that program Nature? I hope they re-run the episode about hummers...gee, I miss them, but just today, I saw a little female and she was flitting around the begonias...hence this story. I hope she makes is to the warm. ") They are one of God's best creations. ") S.
Comment from jfmorgan
Goodjob, Realist101. You have a nice writing style. Very good. I just have a couple editing notes that may help to tightened some of your sentences. These are just opinions and you may not share them. In the sentence: "she shook herself, at first lightly, then with real determination." Why not tighten it a bit with: (she shook herself lightly at first, then with real determination.)? Also, in the sentence: She preened her wings, until finally, they were dry enough to use. Why not just simply:(She preened her wings until they were dry enough to use.)? Anyway, just my opinion. Good job overall.
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2011
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Goodjob, Realist101. You have a nice writing style. Very good. I just have a couple editing notes that may help to tightened some of your sentences. These are just opinions and you may not share them. In the sentence: "she shook herself, at first lightly, then with real determination." Why not tighten it a bit with: (she shook herself lightly at first, then with real determination.)? Also, in the sentence: She preened her wings, until finally, they were dry enough to use. Why not just simply:(She preened her wings until they were dry enough to use.)? Anyway, just my opinion. Good job overall.
Comment Written 28-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2011
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HI ! Yes, these are good suggestions! I will work on it tomorrow when I am not as tired...I am so far back in thank you's and reading it's not funny! Hugs for this really nice review! Susan
