kal aaj aur kal
journey of life!3 total reviews
Comment from MarquisdeMars
Great way of showing to get over the present situation and on to better places and times. You showed that life is a journey with peaks and valleys. Good Haiku
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2018
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Great way of showing to get over the present situation and on to better places and times. You showed that life is a journey with peaks and valleys. Good Haiku
Comment Written 20-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2018
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thank you.
Comment from OklahomaDreamer
Not really sure how this fits into the 5-7-5 format, as it has way more than 17 syllables
Each of your lines has 8 syllables, and I also don't quite understand the last line. It doesn't make sense to me.
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2018
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Not really sure how this fits into the 5-7-5 format, as it has way more than 17 syllables
Each of your lines has 8 syllables, and I also don't quite understand the last line. It doesn't make sense to me.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2018
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thank you for your comments. I will try to be better next time.
Comment from Hareem.S
I think never should be changed to "no one". Just a sugesstion. And if you change the title in english dont you think it would be better, many ppl dont understand urdu/hindi here. An attractive understandable title will not make them open the poem. Otherwise it is good.
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2018
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I think never should be changed to "no one". Just a sugesstion. And if you change the title in english dont you think it would be better, many ppl dont understand urdu/hindi here. An attractive understandable title will not make them open the poem. Otherwise it is good.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2018
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thank you
