Lonely Hearts Meet
Viewing comments for Chapter 32 "Part two, Chapter 10"Anna and her son escape from a man-made Hell.
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Comment from Shirley McLain
I didn't think this was long at all and I enjoyed reading it. I think Bobby is a complete jerk along with his mother. I anxious to hear the judges ruling. Great job.
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2011
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I didn't think this was long at all and I enjoyed reading it. I think Bobby is a complete jerk along with his mother. I anxious to hear the judges ruling. Great job.
Comment Written 18-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2011
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Thank your for your kind review.
Comment from ScarletClearwater
I was much more impressed here than with the last chapter. The flow is good. The tension and diologue is believable. Seems you've done your homework. Great job.
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2011
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I was much more impressed here than with the last chapter. The flow is good. The tension and diologue is believable. Seems you've done your homework. Great job.
Comment Written 18-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2011
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Thank your for your kind review.
Comment from Gungalo
This man needs to learn a lesson just the way he taught his wife and anyone else who got in his way. Who ever heard of such a thing as hanging a cat because it walked across your truck. Sigh, sometimes I wonder where folks like him were when they were passing out brains,eh?
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2011
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This man needs to learn a lesson just the way he taught his wife and anyone else who got in his way. Who ever heard of such a thing as hanging a cat because it walked across your truck. Sigh, sometimes I wonder where folks like him were when they were passing out brains,eh?
Comment Written 18-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2011
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Thank your for your kind review.
Comment from Rama Rao
No, this is not long. In fact, the tempo would have been lost if you had cut it short. The court scene was well put up. This minute Entry Ruling is something new and interesting. The story moved forward briskly and had me riveted.
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2011
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No, this is not long. In fact, the tempo would have been lost if you had cut it short. The court scene was well put up. This minute Entry Ruling is something new and interesting. The story moved forward briskly and had me riveted.
Comment Written 18-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2011
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Thank your for your kind review.
Comment from Michelle S
This is an excellent chapter. This guy is certainly a piece of work and could use a little discipline himself. Looking forward to the next chapter.
Michelle
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2011
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This is an excellent chapter. This guy is certainly a piece of work and could use a little discipline himself. Looking forward to the next chapter.
Michelle
Comment Written 18-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Dave M
Barbara,
We'll see what the judge's verdict is, but it sounds like Bobby really stuck his foot into it. I wonder when his mother is going to do something stupid.
I enjoyed this read and couldn't find anything to criticize, not in the text and not in your author notes. I would've given you six stars, but the site won't let me.
Dave
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2011
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Barbara,
We'll see what the judge's verdict is, but it sounds like Bobby really stuck his foot into it. I wonder when his mother is going to do something stupid.
I enjoyed this read and couldn't find anything to criticize, not in the text and not in your author notes. I would've given you six stars, but the site won't let me.
Dave
Comment Written 18-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2011
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Thank you for your kind review and support. I appreciate both.
Comment from axelbeariter
" Paul sounded concerned. I wonder what's going on. He said he'll come by and get us."/Remove the quotation marks. This internal dialogue is already designated as such by the italics.----"The judge would send his decision in a Minute Entry to one of the lawyers, usually the petitioner, which would be me. I would write up the decree and the supporting documents, send them to Eric for his approval, then to the judge. Once the judge signs and files it, he sends confirmed copies to each lawyer. Everything becomes final once the papers are final.
"Now I understand. Mrs. Rodgers could argue that you wrote the decree in my favor. She can't argue with Judge Kirk."/Including the explanation of Minute Entry to the reader was a stroke of genius. Few non-lawyers have a clue about how that works.----This is one of your best chapters.
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2011
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" Paul sounded concerned. I wonder what's going on. He said he'll come by and get us."/Remove the quotation marks. This internal dialogue is already designated as such by the italics.----"The judge would send his decision in a Minute Entry to one of the lawyers, usually the petitioner, which would be me. I would write up the decree and the supporting documents, send them to Eric for his approval, then to the judge. Once the judge signs and files it, he sends confirmed copies to each lawyer. Everything becomes final once the papers are final.
"Now I understand. Mrs. Rodgers could argue that you wrote the decree in my favor. She can't argue with Judge Kirk."/Including the explanation of Minute Entry to the reader was a stroke of genius. Few non-lawyers have a clue about how that works.----This is one of your best chapters.
Comment Written 18-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2011
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Thank you for the kind review and encouraging words.
Comment from Belinda
Hi, Barbara. This is great. You've described a court scene without going too far. Just right for the readers. I think the judge and everyone present understands what Bobby means as 'disciplining' Anna.
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2011
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Hi, Barbara. This is great. You've described a court scene without going too far. Just right for the readers. I think the judge and everyone present understands what Bobby means as 'disciplining' Anna.
Comment Written 18-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from amada
Great continuation to the chapter. Greeat show of different characters. Abusers and cruelty for unsheltered women is a heart breaking theme. Very well done here.
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2011
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Great continuation to the chapter. Greeat show of different characters. Abusers and cruelty for unsheltered women is a heart breaking theme. Very well done here.
Comment Written 18-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Deorre Leonard
Wow! That Ms Rodgers is something else. I like this chapter the flow is great. It held my interest from begining to the end.Another great chapter.Deorre
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2011
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Wow! That Ms Rodgers is something else. I like this chapter the flow is great. It held my interest from begining to the end.Another great chapter.Deorre
Comment Written 18-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
