Lonely Hearts Meet
Viewing comments for Chapter 30 "Part 3, Chapter 9"Anna and her son escape from a man-made Hell.
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Comment from MS Writer
It seems Anna will soon be rid of her abusive husband. I hope so at least. It is incredible how pervasive spousal abuse is. Your statistics are surprising. You have made the story interesting and informative. Hope you are well.
Michele
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2011
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It seems Anna will soon be rid of her abusive husband. I hope so at least. It is incredible how pervasive spousal abuse is. Your statistics are surprising. You have made the story interesting and informative. Hope you are well.
Michele
Comment Written 04-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2011
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Thank you for the kind review and encouraging words.
Comment from N.K. Wagner
There's something going on with the blood-thing. Strangers, yes. But someone you know well enough to consider dating should know if there's a risk. Is there? Well done, Barbara. :) Nancy
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2011
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There's something going on with the blood-thing. Strangers, yes. But someone you know well enough to consider dating should know if there's a risk. Is there? Well done, Barbara. :) Nancy
Comment Written 04-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2011
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We'll wait and see. You are the first person to pick up on that. Remember a few posts back, I hinted Troy has some issues. Thank you for the kind review.
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I do indeed remember, Barbara. :) Nancy
Comment from Gungalo
Though I have missed quite a bit, the story goes pm/ it is amazing to see what has happened and how far she has come. Awesome work!
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2011
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Though I have missed quite a bit, the story goes pm/ it is amazing to see what has happened and how far she has come. Awesome work!
Comment Written 04-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2011
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Thank you for the kind review. I have been wondering about you. Are you doing all right?
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Yes I'm fine. Hard to get back into this when so much remains undone. Thanks for caring!!
Comment from Adri7enne
Good, Barb. I didn't spot any spag. The only thing I question is her friend saying Troy was "the sexiest man she'd ever laid eyes on." Why not let her be specific about what it was about him that gave her that impression? Like, "He has the most wicked blue eyes I've ever seen! Sexy guy!"
I enjoyed their meeting in the park. A good read, Barb.
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2011
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Good, Barb. I didn't spot any spag. The only thing I question is her friend saying Troy was "the sexiest man she'd ever laid eyes on." Why not let her be specific about what it was about him that gave her that impression? Like, "He has the most wicked blue eyes I've ever seen! Sexy guy!"
I enjoyed their meeting in the park. A good read, Barb.
Comment Written 04-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2011
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Thank you for the kind review. That may come later. Things were moving too quickly at the office to go into much detail. Phone ringing and boss wanting to see Anna.
Comment from Karen Payton Holt
Another well paced and well written chapter.
I enjoy the way the relationship between Anna and Troy is blossoming. I am rooting for them.
The trial is imminent and I feel for Anna, she is so brave in this, and I do hope things do not turn out badly.
I really enjoyed this chapter.
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2011
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Another well paced and well written chapter.
I enjoy the way the relationship between Anna and Troy is blossoming. I am rooting for them.
The trial is imminent and I feel for Anna, she is so brave in this, and I do hope things do not turn out badly.
I really enjoyed this chapter.
Comment Written 04-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Shirley McLain
Wonderful chapter as always. You keep it realistic, moving and give it just the right amout of drama to keep me wanting more. I'm glad she excepted Troy's explanation. Great job.
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2011
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Wonderful chapter as always. You keep it realistic, moving and give it just the right amout of drama to keep me wanting more. I'm glad she excepted Troy's explanation. Great job.
Comment Written 04-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2011
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Thank you for the kind review and continued support.
Comment from Nanette Mary
Hullo Barbara ....
This is an interesting chapter in your book and is generally well written. There is one expression which is probably American and that is your reference to
'speaking with ...' whereas we would say 'speaking to ...'
Thank you for sharing this with us. The first Court appearance should be well worth reading about.
Love from ... Nanette Mary.
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2011
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Hullo Barbara ....
This is an interesting chapter in your book and is generally well written. There is one expression which is probably American and that is your reference to
'speaking with ...' whereas we would say 'speaking to ...'
Thank you for sharing this with us. The first Court appearance should be well worth reading about.
Love from ... Nanette Mary.
Comment Written 04-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2011
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We normally say speaking with, because we are having a conversation WITH somebody. If you speak to somebody you really are expecting them to reply. It's a one way conversation. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from c_lucas
Some people had creative imaginations. Anna saw Troy with his secretary and wrote her own scenario. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words.
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2011
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Some people had creative imaginations. Anna saw Troy with his secretary and wrote her own scenario. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words.
Comment Written 04-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
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UYou're welcome, Barbara. Charlie
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
What a time the poor woman
is going through... all the
worry and then confusion...
wanting to be friends with
Troy but knowing she dare not.
How you're juggling a full-time teaching job, home and family, and still finding time to write, is amazing. I applaud you.
I have a six to give you, which is for all your
chapters that I've so enjoyed...
Its good be back - it's
under a shade tree. ?
under the shade of a tree.
He, then, threw it in the trash can. - commas not needed
Most enjoyable.
Margaret
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2011
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What a time the poor woman
is going through... all the
worry and then confusion...
wanting to be friends with
Troy but knowing she dare not.
How you're juggling a full-time teaching job, home and family, and still finding time to write, is amazing. I applaud you.
I have a six to give you, which is for all your
chapters that I've so enjoyed...
Its good be back - it's
under a shade tree. ?
under the shade of a tree.
He, then, threw it in the trash can. - commas not needed
Most enjoyable.
Margaret
Comment Written 04-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2011
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I had it's and my spell check through a fit. I will put it back and take care of the other issues.
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my spell check suggests some weird things... can't understand it... M
Comment from Van
Great story.
Nice readability.
The characters are interesting.
Content: Excellent
Flow/delivery: Very smooth and capturing...I particularly liked the way you introduced her place of work. You used the receptionists response to a phone call, very nice.
Mechanics: Sound
Anna [shook head] and continued :- shook head/shook her head
Three blocks to lunch?:- it's your setting (obviously) but three blocks would take me all lunch to get there and back with no time to eat. It wasn't an issue for me as I read, only a point of pause. I said to myself, 'wow, she must have a helluva lunch break.' Just wanted you to know.
talk them in to it:- there are different schools of thought on 'talk them in to' verses 'talk them into' ...just wanted to point it out for your scrutiny
"I [though] you said he was off-limits:- though/thought
Very intriguing story.
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2011
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Great story.
Nice readability.
The characters are interesting.
Content: Excellent
Flow/delivery: Very smooth and capturing...I particularly liked the way you introduced her place of work. You used the receptionists response to a phone call, very nice.
Mechanics: Sound
Anna [shook head] and continued :- shook head/shook her head
Three blocks to lunch?:- it's your setting (obviously) but three blocks would take me all lunch to get there and back with no time to eat. It wasn't an issue for me as I read, only a point of pause. I said to myself, 'wow, she must have a helluva lunch break.' Just wanted you to know.
talk them in to it:- there are different schools of thought on 'talk them in to' verses 'talk them into' ...just wanted to point it out for your scrutiny
"I [though] you said he was off-limits:- though/thought
Very intriguing story.
Comment Written 04-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2011
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No matter how many times I read over it, I still miss the little things. I read it as though those words or letters are there. I changed it so she's walking two blocks. Thank you for the kind review.
