Lonely Hearts Meet
Viewing comments for Chapter 30 "Part 3, Chapter 9"Anna and her son escape from a man-made Hell.
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Comment from Rama Rao
Another excellent chapter, as usual. The story is moving along well and holding my interest. I am sure it will be well received.
Just one sentence, "I'll speak with Mt. Keller with you."-this is not clear.
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2011
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Another excellent chapter, as usual. The story is moving along well and holding my interest. I am sure it will be well received.
Just one sentence, "I'll speak with Mt. Keller with you."-this is not clear.
Comment Written 05-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from barfy
Not all who write on this site are good writers... But they all believe they are... Sometimes, I want to shoot myself, when i choke and gag on the cluttered chaotic broken scribblings of imbeciles... But you... You're talented... I don't just read your words... I watch them... dance across the page...
Cheers
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2011
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Not all who write on this site are good writers... But they all believe they are... Sometimes, I want to shoot myself, when i choke and gag on the cluttered chaotic broken scribblings of imbeciles... But you... You're talented... I don't just read your words... I watch them... dance across the page...
Cheers
Comment Written 05-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2011
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Thank you for the kind review and the encouraging words.
Comment from Writingfundimension
Hi, barbara. Anna is becoming a stronger woman who knows her own mind. I think it's great that you don't have her jumping into bed with Troy given her emotional baggage. Something a lot of abused women tend to do. I very much enjoyed this additional chapter. Kind regards, Bev
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2011
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Hi, barbara. Anna is becoming a stronger woman who knows her own mind. I think it's great that you don't have her jumping into bed with Troy given her emotional baggage. Something a lot of abused women tend to do. I very much enjoyed this additional chapter. Kind regards, Bev
Comment Written 05-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2011
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I am trying to protray Troy as caring and wants what's best for Anna. Thank you for the kind review.
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Yes, that is how the character comes across to me, barbara. I wish every battered woman was lucky enough to have a Troy.
Comment from Connie P
Well, I'm really glad Troy cut his hand LOL!! I suspect he would have found a way to make her listen anyway. At least he's carrying band-aids in his wallet rather than condoms :)
Great chapter, I both look forward to and dread the trial.
Connie
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"I think we can talk them in to it, if we beg." She grinned. "But right **(you have a spacing issue here)
now, I think it's time for me to return to work." Anna stood.
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2011
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Well, I'm really glad Troy cut his hand LOL!! I suspect he would have found a way to make her listen anyway. At least he's carrying band-aids in his wallet rather than condoms :)
Great chapter, I both look forward to and dread the trial.
Connie
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"I think we can talk them in to it, if we beg." She grinned. "But right **(you have a spacing issue here)
now, I think it's time for me to return to work." Anna stood.
Comment Written 05-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2011
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I will check that spacing issue. Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
Another well written chapter. Glad things worked out between the young people.It would be so hard to walk into the courtroom and testify against someone who had been abusive to you. I feel for her~Debbie
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2011
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Another well written chapter. Glad things worked out between the young people.It would be so hard to walk into the courtroom and testify against someone who had been abusive to you. I feel for her~Debbie
Comment Written 05-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2011
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Thank you for your kind review and insight.
Comment from Hareem.S
I read the earlier chapter when anna saw him with nancy. Like it then and love this one too. Your characters are very vivid. I like how you mention in italics what they Anna is wondering to herself. She is scared, but I hope she gets over it. Very gripping story.
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2011
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I read the earlier chapter when anna saw him with nancy. Like it then and love this one too. Your characters are very vivid. I like how you mention in italics what they Anna is wondering to herself. She is scared, but I hope she gets over it. Very gripping story.
Comment Written 05-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2011
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Thank you for the kind review. Anna was an abused spouse. It will take her time grow.
Comment from Carolyn Hilliard
A good chapter. Fast, flowed well, and no SPAGS or typos. I don't why I do have the 6 star option; I should and it is deserved. Again, nice work.
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2011
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A good chapter. Fast, flowed well, and no SPAGS or typos. I don't why I do have the 6 star option; I should and it is deserved. Again, nice work.
Comment Written 05-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2011
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Thank you for the virtual six stars. It's probably because you have given me two within the past 30 days. I appreciate the kind review.
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I had no idea we were limited on how many 6 stars we could give a writer. humph!!!
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yep, one writer only 2 in a 30 day period.
Comment from dmjones
Hi Barbara, As usual this is excellent. I'm glad Anna and Troy are now back together in a sense. I like how the story is going and I didn't see any spag.
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2011
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Hi Barbara, As usual this is excellent. I'm glad Anna and Troy are now back together in a sense. I like how the story is going and I didn't see any spag.
Comment Written 05-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from amada
I like this phrase the most ""Must have been Troy. Don't get too excited. He's in a committed relationship with a tall blonde." It denotes the level of friendship and at the same time an hint of regret that Troy, the hunk, is in a commited relationship. Great study of characters.
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2011
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I like this phrase the most ""Must have been Troy. Don't get too excited. He's in a committed relationship with a tall blonde." It denotes the level of friendship and at the same time an hint of regret that Troy, the hunk, is in a commited relationship. Great study of characters.
Comment Written 05-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2011
Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Cheryl Daphine
I think I dread that court date as much as her,or nearly. I'm so glad Troy made her understand. After someone has been done as she has they are easily hurt. Very good chapter and look forward to the next.
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2011
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I think I dread that court date as much as her,or nearly. I'm so glad Troy made her understand. After someone has been done as she has they are easily hurt. Very good chapter and look forward to the next.
Comment Written 05-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2011
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Thank you for your kind review and insight.
