Lonely Hearts Meet
Viewing comments for Chapter 30 "Part 3, Chapter 9"Anna and her son escape from a man-made Hell.
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Comment from rchitwood
Very well written and again it is a pleasure to read your story.Very creative has good dialogue and characters.I would recommend it to others.Blessings Rita
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2011
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Very well written and again it is a pleasure to read your story.Very creative has good dialogue and characters.I would recommend it to others.Blessings Rita
Comment Written 06-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2011
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Thank you for kind review.
Comment from Kashif Ali Abbas
A very well written one, the style is peculiar of yours, the description is working gud, and the end was smashing. This could become a must read, i think.
well done
regards
K
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2011
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A very well written one, the style is peculiar of yours, the description is working gud, and the end was smashing. This could become a must read, i think.
well done
regards
K
Comment Written 06-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from stanishmichelle
I like the warm reception Anna got at work. The workload will distract her from her problems. Pity she's avoiding Troy by taking lunch with her. Anna was too hasty to jump to conclusions when she saw Troy with the blonde. It proves her jealousy stems from loving him. I can't wait to attend the trial. Bobby's reign of terror will be made public. Good for him. The story has good pace and continues to keep my interest with its excellent writing.
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2011
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I like the warm reception Anna got at work. The workload will distract her from her problems. Pity she's avoiding Troy by taking lunch with her. Anna was too hasty to jump to conclusions when she saw Troy with the blonde. It proves her jealousy stems from loving him. I can't wait to attend the trial. Bobby's reign of terror will be made public. Good for him. The story has good pace and continues to keep my interest with its excellent writing.
Comment Written 06-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from missy98writer
Barbara,
I've read chapter thirty twice and it's fabulosly written. I'm glad Troy presisted with Anna and she felt bad for being jealous. I wonder what's going to happen with her abusive exes court case comming up. If his bitch of a mother has anything to do with it she'll be a thorn in her side. Your descriptive writing and dialogue both are excellent. I look forward to next weekend to read chapter thirty-one. You are so damned talented, my friend. I'm off to read the last three chapters of Margaret's book Mandersons. I'm so behind. Have a great weekday at school, teacher lady.
Melissa.
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2011
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Barbara,
I've read chapter thirty twice and it's fabulosly written. I'm glad Troy presisted with Anna and she felt bad for being jealous. I wonder what's going to happen with her abusive exes court case comming up. If his bitch of a mother has anything to do with it she'll be a thorn in her side. Your descriptive writing and dialogue both are excellent. I look forward to next weekend to read chapter thirty-one. You are so damned talented, my friend. I'm off to read the last three chapters of Margaret's book Mandersons. I'm so behind. Have a great weekday at school, teacher lady.
Melissa.
Comment Written 06-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2011
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Thank you for the kind review, my dear friend.
Comment from Dom G Robles
I find this story very interesting and informative. Abused woman, spouses, children as well wives who are victims of attacks, by no less than their own husbands, boyfriends and molesters. This case, in particular, talks of a husband
she can't endure any longer and therefore had to file a divorce. Citing statistics she says there are about 31% victims of abuse by husbands or boyfriends or live-in partners during 2001. I suppose the story is well qwritten.
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2011
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I find this story very interesting and informative. Abused woman, spouses, children as well wives who are victims of attacks, by no less than their own husbands, boyfriends and molesters. This case, in particular, talks of a husband
she can't endure any longer and therefore had to file a divorce. Citing statistics she says there are about 31% victims of abuse by husbands or boyfriends or live-in partners during 2001. I suppose the story is well qwritten.
Comment Written 06-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
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Welcome. Dom
Comment from rheabug
This is another great chapter in your ongoing book. Hoping that Bobby doesn't get out of jail anytime soon as she is just now getting out and about. Thank you for sharing!
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2011
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This is another great chapter in your ongoing book. Hoping that Bobby doesn't get out of jail anytime soon as she is just now getting out and about. Thank you for sharing!
Comment Written 05-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Katchoo_Ledeux
I'm curious about this Paul character and the whole blood scene. I'm guessing he's HIV positive or has AIDS?
Glad your raising awareness and providing help lines for victims of abuse. Often times the victims are too afraid to call though. I suggest finding out if these hotlines are confidential and then stating so, so people know they can call and get advice or whatever they need, and not have to worry about officials showing up at their home the next day while the abuser is around... 'cause then the victims would be in more danger. Just a thought.
Here's a few small nits:
An(d) off-limits hunk.
"It is. How about yours?" - why would her tetanus shot matter?
"You don't have much time." - suggest changing 'you' to 'we' or 'I' when in this context.
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2011
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I'm curious about this Paul character and the whole blood scene. I'm guessing he's HIV positive or has AIDS?
Glad your raising awareness and providing help lines for victims of abuse. Often times the victims are too afraid to call though. I suggest finding out if these hotlines are confidential and then stating so, so people know they can call and get advice or whatever they need, and not have to worry about officials showing up at their home the next day while the abuser is around... 'cause then the victims would be in more danger. Just a thought.
Here's a few small nits:
An(d) off-limits hunk.
"It is. How about yours?" - why would her tetanus shot matter?
"You don't have much time." - suggest changing 'you' to 'we' or 'I' when in this context.
Comment Written 05-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2011
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Thank you for the kind review. I will get on those nits.
Comment from Queenise
Barbara, I love this chapter and enjoyed the entire back to work and the lunch scene. It was so short, though. Before I could really get into it the chapter had ended. Blessings. Queenise
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2011
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Barbara, I love this chapter and enjoyed the entire back to work and the lunch scene. It was so short, though. Before I could really get into it the chapter had ended. Blessings. Queenise
Comment Written 05-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
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You're welcome. Queenise
Comment from Rdfrdmom2
barbara:
This is another excellent chapter. It's going to be
difficult for Anna to be at the trial of her abusive
husband, particularly if his lawyer finds a way to get
him off. She'll do better, however, now that she knows
Troy has not been leading her on.
Thanks for sharing
Hope school is going well for you
love,
jan
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2011
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barbara:
This is another excellent chapter. It's going to be
difficult for Anna to be at the trial of her abusive
husband, particularly if his lawyer finds a way to get
him off. She'll do better, however, now that she knows
Troy has not been leading her on.
Thanks for sharing
Hope school is going well for you
love,
jan
Comment Written 05-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Helen Tan
At least Troy got a chance to clarify the situation but it's still a tricky path they're taking, getting "involved" when the divorce is still not settled. It's hard for them to contain their emotions.
She grinned. "But right
There's a big space after this. You might want to look at this formatting problem.
at noon tomorrow. The trial doesn't begin until 1:00.
Since this is dialogue, suggest - The trial doesn't begin until one.
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2011
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At least Troy got a chance to clarify the situation but it's still a tricky path they're taking, getting "involved" when the divorce is still not settled. It's hard for them to contain their emotions.
She grinned. "But right
There's a big space after this. You might want to look at this formatting problem.
at noon tomorrow. The trial doesn't begin until 1:00.
Since this is dialogue, suggest - The trial doesn't begin until one.
Comment Written 05-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
