Lonely Hearts Meet
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Comment from Rama Rao
The story is progressing well and Anna's character as a strong willed woman is developing nicely. Many women may be wondering, "Why are all the good guys taken?" It's a nice aside remark.
This post too made excellent reading.
Is it eight month old or months old?
Go on with life or get on with life?
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The story is progressing well and Anna's character as a strong willed woman is developing nicely. Many women may be wondering, "Why are all the good guys taken?" It's a nice aside remark.
This post too made excellent reading.
Is it eight month old or months old?
Go on with life or get on with life?
Comment Written 28-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2011
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Thank you for your kind review. Good questions about the infants age. I will check it out.
Comment from AprilShower
Hi, Barbara. Anna seems very emotional. Flying out of the store the way she did seemed strange. Was there some reason for her to think he was serious about her? By her thoughts, "Now, I know why he always tells his dad staying away from me won't be a problem." This doesn't seem to indicate they were serious about each other, especially if this all she can come up with as part of their relationship.
Maybe Anna is rebounding from her horrible relationship with her husband.
April
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Hi, Barbara. Anna seems very emotional. Flying out of the store the way she did seemed strange. Was there some reason for her to think he was serious about her? By her thoughts, "Now, I know why he always tells his dad staying away from me won't be a problem." This doesn't seem to indicate they were serious about each other, especially if this all she can come up with as part of their relationship.
Maybe Anna is rebounding from her horrible relationship with her husband.
April
Comment Written 28-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
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You're welcome, Barbara.
Comment from Belinda
Hi, Barbara. So now Anna is getting jealous and Troy has no opportunity to explain... Another ingredient for a romance, the ups and downs of a relationship...:) As always, this chapter flows fluently and attractively.
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Hi, Barbara. So now Anna is getting jealous and Troy has no opportunity to explain... Another ingredient for a romance, the ups and downs of a relationship...:) As always, this chapter flows fluently and attractively.
Comment Written 28-Aug-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Dave M
Barbara,
So Anna got jealous, and Troy found out about that. Interesting! Actually, this would be a standard sort of story if it weren't for the legal issues, but they complicate things quite a bit.
I thoroughly enjoyed this read and have one suggestion:
"Anna made two trips but carried them inside." This sentence seems a bit awkward. I'd just say, "Anna carried the groceries inside."
Dave
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Barbara,
So Anna got jealous, and Troy found out about that. Interesting! Actually, this would be a standard sort of story if it weren't for the legal issues, but they complicate things quite a bit.
I thoroughly enjoyed this read and have one suggestion:
"Anna made two trips but carried them inside." This sentence seems a bit awkward. I'd just say, "Anna carried the groceries inside."
Dave
Comment Written 28-Aug-2011
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Thank you for your kind review and kind support. I will correct that.
Comment from Michelle S
This is a very good chapter. I have been on vacation and missed the last couple of posts. I will need to go back and get caught up. Well done.
Michelle
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This is a very good chapter. I have been on vacation and missed the last couple of posts. I will need to go back and get caught up. Well done.
Michelle
Comment Written 28-Aug-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from RebelRose
I think Ann was a little hard on Troy. She could have at least let him explain. She gave Bobby chances than she's giving Troy. I guess that's why sh's not so trusting now, but I still think she could have heard him out.
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I think Ann was a little hard on Troy. She could have at least let him explain. She gave Bobby chances than she's giving Troy. I guess that's why sh's not so trusting now, but I still think she could have heard him out.
Comment Written 28-Aug-2011
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Thank you for the kind review. I think Anna is trying too hard to be strong.
Comment from rudion
Incredible. Just wonderful. Poignant and powerful. The message here is so urgent and needs to be told, of course. You tell it in a fictional and very compelling manner. The chapter is enticing and succeeds in causing the reader to want more. So well-done.
Rudion
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Incredible. Just wonderful. Poignant and powerful. The message here is so urgent and needs to be told, of course. You tell it in a fictional and very compelling manner. The chapter is enticing and succeeds in causing the reader to want more. So well-done.
Rudion
Comment Written 28-Aug-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Cumbrianlass
Oh, dear. Too bad that she misunderstood the situation, although I can quite understand how that might happen.I could feel her distress and emotion, and Troy's concern. Good chapter, Barbara. Look forward to the next. :)
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Oh, dear. Too bad that she misunderstood the situation, although I can quite understand how that might happen.I could feel her distress and emotion, and Troy's concern. Good chapter, Barbara. Look forward to the next. :)
Comment Written 28-Aug-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from writerwish
This is so realistic of how Anna would respond. And Troy. Only one mistake found. This was excellent. Can't wait to read more. I love the helpful stats you write at the end. I am planning to write some in my last chapter, which will be my last three chapters here.
Question:'take home to mother type.' or take home to mother type'. I wonder this because I've tried to look it up. I know full quotes always go last.
Troy,( )impeded by an employee (just space missing)
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This is so realistic of how Anna would respond. And Troy. Only one mistake found. This was excellent. Can't wait to read more. I love the helpful stats you write at the end. I am planning to write some in my last chapter, which will be my last three chapters here.
Question:'take home to mother type.' or take home to mother type'. I wonder this because I've tried to look it up. I know full quotes always go last.
Troy,( )impeded by an employee (just space missing)
Comment Written 28-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2011
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Good point about the take home to mother. I will check that out. I appreciate your kind review. I have inserted the space.
Comment from mumsyone
Now I'm curious to find out why Troy and his secretary were buying groceries together--maybe for an office party? I know, I'll just have to wait.
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Now I'm curious to find out why Troy and his secretary were buying groceries together--maybe for an office party? I know, I'll just have to wait.
Comment Written 28-Aug-2011
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Yes, you will just have to wait. I'm sorry. I appreciate your kind review.
