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The Wind

It's about the speaker sending sighs to the wind.

7 total reviews 
Comment from Piggies Grandma
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I enjoyed reading your poem e-EL. It was cleverly written and very well thought out. It would be great if the wind actually could take all our pain away.

 Comment Written 26-Aug-2011


reply by the author on 09-Sep-2011
    thanks...
Comment from adewpearl
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Your poem is in good 5/7/5 syllable count and structure.
I like your sensory appeal to touch and sound
I also like the alliteration of take my tears and the evocative mood you create. Brooke

 Comment Written 26-Aug-2011


reply by the author on 09-Sep-2011
    thanks a lot!
Comment from linsbm
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Your poem has meet the syllabic requirement of haiku poem of 5-7-5. You personify the wind to dispense with your heart trouble and drive away and it makes sense. Well done.

 Comment Written 26-Aug-2011


reply by the author on 26-Aug-2011
    thanks...
Comment from WilliamDeen
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So the wind can take away all the pain and tears. Then send the wind my way, when you are through. I have pain also! Your poem reads smoothly.

 Comment Written 26-Aug-2011


reply by the author on 26-Aug-2011
    thanks...i believe that all of us have problems...don't worry, the wind will come on your way...
Comment from Dutchie
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This 5-7-5 poem is written well and has a good flow and correct syllable counting. Pleasant thought this talk to the wind. Would be nice if he took all sorrow and pain with him. Well done. Fia

 Comment Written 26-Aug-2011


reply by the author on 26-Aug-2011
    thanks for your comment!
Comment from ernesto escarro
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The Wind

The messenger has come deforming hairs
the wind is invited
to blow and send the message
that someone is crying.

 Comment Written 25-Aug-2011


reply by the author on 25-Aug-2011
    Thanks...you're post is really good too...
reply by ernesto escarro on 25-Aug-2011
    Welcome. God bless.
Comment from TSPoet
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Its good to see how some can take
the fewest of lines and have
such a strong impact

This is very good,
you have my heart with this

thank you for sharing

 Comment Written 25-Aug-2011


reply by the author on 25-Aug-2011
    Thank you very much. I'm a beginner but your words had encouraged me, so thanks a lot!
reply by TSPoet on 25-Aug-2011
    I would for sure continue your
    words with the ink of your heart
    that flows...well done
    .
    Maybe if you like feel free to
    read I write