Dear Lexi
Viewing comments for Chapter 51 "At the Park""Let the little children come unto me." ~ Jesus
16 total reviews
Comment from adewpearl
Great alliteration and rhyme throughout your poem
just read your author's notes - unattended children in situations like that get my goat too.
So glad Lexi had a blast - the exuberant tone of your poem conveys that wonderfully :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2011
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Great alliteration and rhyme throughout your poem
just read your author's notes - unattended children in situations like that get my goat too.
So glad Lexi had a blast - the exuberant tone of your poem conveys that wonderfully :-) Brooke
Comment Written 24-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2011
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thanks, Brooke -- that's the advantage of having pen and paper in the moment, isn't it? love, jan
Comment from ulster3
Hello, jan.
It is a delight to see another Lexi poem. Yes, I've seen the unwatched children at the chick-fil around here. This poem is magical. Is this called monorhyme?
Warmly, Rebecca
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2011
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Hello, jan.
It is a delight to see another Lexi poem. Yes, I've seen the unwatched children at the chick-fil around here. This poem is magical. Is this called monorhyme?
Warmly, Rebecca
Comment Written 21-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2011
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I have no clue what it's called, Rebecca -- it's just what was rolling around in my head as I watched Lexi play. love, jan
Comment from c_lucas
The park is for the young and old alike. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for an easy read. Good job.
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2011
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The park is for the young and old alike. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for an easy read. Good job.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2011
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yes, I'm going to start taking her there more often -- love, jan
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You're welcome, Jan. Charlie
Comment from heyjude
Jan, I'm tired just reading it. How did kids have so
much energy. I like all the action in this poem.
I know you enjoyed every minute of being with Miss Lexi.
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2011
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Jan, I'm tired just reading it. How did kids have so
much energy. I like all the action in this poem.
I know you enjoyed every minute of being with Miss Lexi.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2011
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yes, jude, Miss Lexi wears me out on a regular basis -- LOL! love, jan
Comment from ExperiencingLiphe
I remember playing in those when I was little. My dad used to have to follow me when I was really little which I'm sure looked really funny but I had fun and that's all that mattered.
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2011
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I remember playing in those when I was little. My dad used to have to follow me when I was really little which I'm sure looked really funny but I had fun and that's all that mattered.
Comment Written 20-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2011
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LOL -- had to keep you straight, did he? love, jan
Comment from WilliamDeen
Adorable fun poem. Children always have such a great time. They have no worries and just go out and play! Your poem has wonderful rhythm and the rhyme is good too.
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2011
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Adorable fun poem. Children always have such a great time. They have no worries and just go out and play! Your poem has wonderful rhythm and the rhyme is good too.
Comment Written 20-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2011
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thanks, WilliamDeen -- love, jan
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I have no clue why parents don't suppervise children. I enjoyed your poem. If it wasn't so hot here, I would go to park and watch children having fun.
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2011
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I have no clue why parents don't suppervise children. I enjoyed your poem. If it wasn't so hot here, I would go to park and watch children having fun.
Comment Written 20-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2011
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thanks, barbara -- love, jan
Comment from mumsyone
This is a great little poem and picture from Lexi's point of view. Isn't it a shame that we can't enjoy being where we want to be because others ruin it?
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2011
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This is a great little poem and picture from Lexi's point of view. Isn't it a shame that we can't enjoy being where we want to be because others ruin it?
Comment Written 20-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2011
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Absolutely, mumsyone. Thanks for reviewing. love, jan
Comment from peggles
Was this you
Or your grandchildren
Running and shrieking
I often have a go on the swings at the park
I enjoyed reading your poem
Well done
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2011
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Was this you
Or your grandchildren
Running and shrieking
I often have a go on the swings at the park
I enjoyed reading your poem
Well done
Comment Written 20-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2011
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It was my granddaughter, Lexi, doing all the running and shrieking -- I take the pictures and write -- LOL! love, jan
Comment from writerwish
this poem and picture are perfect and reflects Lexi's POv. Children romping around must have gave her such pleasure. She must have been fun to watch.
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2011
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this poem and picture are perfect and reflects Lexi's POv. Children romping around must have gave her such pleasure. She must have been fun to watch.
Comment Written 20-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2011
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she is always fun to watch, writerwish -- love, jan
