Comment from pasinger

Excellent

Welcome to the site. hope you will stay.

The count in the Haiku is correct 5-7-5
The statement made is clear.

A Haiku normally refers to a statement about physical nature, the Senryu form relates to human nature.

Best wishes for the contest.

 Comment Written 16-Aug-2011

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reply by the author on 21-Aug-2011

Thanks :) That was my first time doing that kind of poem.

Comment from WilliamDeen

Excellent

Cute little poem about your friend. He is pretty and has curves guys like... is he into the guys? If so, kudos to him. If not, still tell him to take it as a compliment!

 Comment Written 16-Aug-2011

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reply by the author on 21-Aug-2011

I can see that he's into them but he never admits :p

Comment from Justin Chopin

Exceptional

Zoinks that was defintely a shocker. A very funny shocker but I honestly think that most of your dude friends should see a shrink if they are that turned on by this guy. Great job with the poetry and the twist that the guys weren't aroused by a kind of Megan Fox type of curvy woman but actually by some man who is probably overweight is hiliarious . Very creative Zaf can't wait to read more.

 Comment Written 16-Aug-2011

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reply by the author on 21-Aug-2011

Thanks! Glad you liked it. That was my first 5-7-5 poem.

reply by Justin Chopin on 21-Aug-2011

you're welcome.