Lonely Hearts Meet
Viewing comments for Chapter 27 "Part four, Chapter 8"Anna and her son escape from a man-made Hell.
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Comment from rheabug
This is the another good presentation for this offering. I enjoyed the reading of this piece. An enormous message for the abused.
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This is the another good presentation for this offering. I enjoyed the reading of this piece. An enormous message for the abused.
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Mary Ann MCPhedran
A good w rite and interesting chapter. The story and the subject were well displayed. I enjoyed reading your story
Thanks for sharing with me. Mary
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A good w rite and interesting chapter. The story and the subject were well displayed. I enjoyed reading your story
Thanks for sharing with me. Mary
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Thank you for the kind reviw.
Comment from kiwisteveh
Good luck with your new school year - I know just how that can slow you down!
Another interesting development in this chapter. I had to stop and think a couple of times about the characters here - it got a little crowded...
One small thing, right at the end:
Legally she can't do a thing about her.
He's talking to Anna, so the 'her' doesn't make sense...
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2011
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Good luck with your new school year - I know just how that can slow you down!
Another interesting development in this chapter. I had to stop and think a couple of times about the characters here - it got a little crowded...
One small thing, right at the end:
Legally she can't do a thing about her.
He's talking to Anna, so the 'her' doesn't make sense...
Comment Written 14-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2011
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Thank you for catching that. I made some changes.
Comment from Gideon Roth
Hello Barbara. I have been away from my computer for a while and trying to get caught up on some reading and reviews today. I was happy to see that you had made a couple of submissions recently. This chapter was very well done and had some great dialogue in it. The stats that you gave at the end were sobering and tragic as well. Looking forward to reading your next submission...Tim
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Hello Barbara. I have been away from my computer for a while and trying to get caught up on some reading and reviews today. I was happy to see that you had made a couple of submissions recently. This chapter was very well done and had some great dialogue in it. The stats that you gave at the end were sobering and tragic as well. Looking forward to reading your next submission...Tim
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Carolyn Hilliard
Another lovely addition to the story. One spot needs you to look at it. .
He winked Troy. [S.B. He winked at Troy.]
It's part of the last line.
With so much concentration on Anna, I'm wondering about Troy. You have indicated he has a problem too. I got the feeling his parents were killed when he was a child. Am I right?
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Another lovely addition to the story. One spot needs you to look at it. .
He winked Troy. [S.B. He winked at Troy.]
It's part of the last line.
With so much concentration on Anna, I'm wondering about Troy. You have indicated he has a problem too. I got the feeling his parents were killed when he was a child. Am I right?
Comment Written 14-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2011
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In the first chapter I established that Troy's father was killed in a car accident and his mother was murdered in front of him by his stepfather, that's why the Sorensons raised him. Troy does have a secret. I will be revealed at a later date. Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Barbara,
Things seem to be progressing for Anna and she is so lucky to have Troy and Paul in her life. She is a bit stubborn when it comes to them helping her so much...but what else can she do? Mrs.Rodgers is going to cause a lot of trouble, I fear. Not to mention what Bobby will do if he gets out of jail. I hope you have had a restful vacation and are eager to back to teaching. Your wrote this chapter well (no surprise there) Well done...blessings, chey
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Hi Barbara,
Things seem to be progressing for Anna and she is so lucky to have Troy and Paul in her life. She is a bit stubborn when it comes to them helping her so much...but what else can she do? Mrs.Rodgers is going to cause a lot of trouble, I fear. Not to mention what Bobby will do if he gets out of jail. I hope you have had a restful vacation and are eager to back to teaching. Your wrote this chapter well (no surprise there) Well done...blessings, chey
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Thank you for your well wishes and the kind review.
Comment from Shirley McLain
Another one of your excellent chapters. As always I enjoyed reading your story and I am looking forward to reading the next chapter.
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Another one of your excellent chapters. As always I enjoyed reading your story and I am looking forward to reading the next chapter.
Comment Written 14-Aug-2011
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Thank you for the kind review and support.
Comment from Rdfrdmom2
barbara:
Another excellent chapter. One of the most important things you have noted is in your author's notes: "Women who leave their batterers are at 75% greater risk of severe injury or death than those who stay." That's the very reason so many women stay.
The other problem is the one of people like Mrs. Rodgers, Anna's mother-in-law, who has obviously enabled her bully and criminal son since he was a teenager. It makes for a horrible situation for whomever is unfortunate enough to marry their "dear little boys".
Thanks for sharing
love,
jan
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barbara:
Another excellent chapter. One of the most important things you have noted is in your author's notes: "Women who leave their batterers are at 75% greater risk of severe injury or death than those who stay." That's the very reason so many women stay.
The other problem is the one of people like Mrs. Rodgers, Anna's mother-in-law, who has obviously enabled her bully and criminal son since he was a teenager. It makes for a horrible situation for whomever is unfortunate enough to marry their "dear little boys".
Thanks for sharing
love,
jan
Comment Written 14-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2011
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Thank you very much for the kind review and your insight.
Comment from stanishmichelle
Bobby had a nerve to sell Ann's car, but what a backfire that was. The new owner's timing to collect the car was perfect. Bobby's mother is a shrewish hag. Co-counsel for Bobby - she sure acted like one. Her husband must be badly henpecked to stay with her. The story becomes more intriguing each time I read.
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Bobby had a nerve to sell Ann's car, but what a backfire that was. The new owner's timing to collect the car was perfect. Bobby's mother is a shrewish hag. Co-counsel for Bobby - she sure acted like one. Her husband must be badly henpecked to stay with her. The story becomes more intriguing each time I read.
Comment Written 14-Aug-2011
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Thank you for your kind review and insight.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, barbara, i enjoyed reading this chapter for your book and can see the way you are going to carry the mother in law's character and her husband seems to be wavering between making everybody happy.
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this is very well written, barbara, i enjoyed reading this chapter for your book and can see the way you are going to carry the mother in law's character and her husband seems to be wavering between making everybody happy.
Comment Written 14-Aug-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
