Paranormal Adventures
Viewing comments for Chapter 11 "Speak of the Devil"Case Studies of Hauntings
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Comment from Shirley McLain
Excellent chapter and you had me reading to the last word and then wanting more. I did not find one problem. If I had a six I would give it to you. Shirley
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2015
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Excellent chapter and you had me reading to the last word and then wanting more. I did not find one problem. If I had a six I would give it to you. Shirley
Comment Written 16-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2015
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Hi, Shirley. Thank you for so faithfully reading my chapters! I appreciate your encouragement and, what I consider, a very generous rating. Your wish for a six is very sweet.
:) Bev
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Your descriptions and emotions are very strong in this post. I got goose bumps. that's some good writing. I'm sorry I missed this the first time around, but glad I have it now.
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2015
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Your descriptions and emotions are very strong in this post. I got goose bumps. that's some good writing. I'm sorry I missed this the first time around, but glad I have it now.
Comment Written 16-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2015
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You're most kind, Barbara. Thank you for the very generous review and for your encouragement. :) Bev
Comment from Loren (7)
Hi Bev. Nice re-make of this chapter. Moves along swiftly with vivid descriptions and the actions of your characters are believable in that they seems to a act like I probably would in similar circumstances (though I doubt I'd ever try). I like the way you are fleshing out your characters, too. Mia, in particular seems to be a "take charge, kind of person. Loren
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2015
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Hi Bev. Nice re-make of this chapter. Moves along swiftly with vivid descriptions and the actions of your characters are believable in that they seems to a act like I probably would in similar circumstances (though I doubt I'd ever try). I like the way you are fleshing out your characters, too. Mia, in particular seems to be a "take charge, kind of person. Loren
Comment Written 16-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2015
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Thanks so much, Loren. I appreciate your insights and encouragement. Yes, Mia is taking charge for now. But every member will eventually show why they make such a good team. I appreciate your support and generosity.
:) Bev
Comment from JaseDR85
Very, very nicely written. Great visuals. Literally. You can feel the panic in the characters and envision their reactions without you even needing to show them. You have a firm grip on showing vs telling, no need to harp on that. Your dialog is snappy and back and forth. It's awesome. I love how the characters are alive as well with action between, so they are not cardboard cutouts having a panic attack. Very nicely done. Keep up the great work!
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2015
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Very, very nicely written. Great visuals. Literally. You can feel the panic in the characters and envision their reactions without you even needing to show them. You have a firm grip on showing vs telling, no need to harp on that. Your dialog is snappy and back and forth. It's awesome. I love how the characters are alive as well with action between, so they are not cardboard cutouts having a panic attack. Very nicely done. Keep up the great work!
Comment Written 16-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2015
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Hi, Jase. Thanks for the really grand review! I appreciate all the encouraging words and the time you took to read this chapter. Nice to hear from you!
:) Bev
Comment from Cindy Warren
These are some nasty demons. Hope I never meet one. Great character development here. I feel like I'm getting to know them. I'm still catching up on the story. Might take a few days.
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2014
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These are some nasty demons. Hope I never meet one. Great character development here. I feel like I'm getting to know them. I'm still catching up on the story. Might take a few days.
Comment Written 03-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2014
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Cindy, thank you so much for all your insights into the chapters. I am going to pay special attention to all of them as I complete my edits of each ongoing chapter. I believe you were the one who suggested I change the name? Anyway, I've changed it to Mid-Atlantic Paranormal Team to avoid any confusion with the television show. Appreciate it! :) Bev
Comment from Joy Graham
"the disembodied voices caromed off the walls of the entranceway" - I have not heard of "caromed" before. I will have to look it up. I love finding new words :)
On to the next chapter.
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2012
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"the disembodied voices caromed off the walls of the entranceway" - I have not heard of "caromed" before. I will have to look it up. I love finding new words :)
On to the next chapter.
Comment Written 25-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2012
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I love finding new words, too. I think the word was used in proper context LOL. Thanks, buddy. Xxx Bev
Comment from IndianaIrish
Wow, Bev! So much action and tension in this chapter...and I loved it! Thrilling ending that makes me hope I don't have to wait too long to read what happens.
Indy :>)
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2011
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Wow, Bev! So much action and tension in this chapter...and I loved it! Thrilling ending that makes me hope I don't have to wait too long to read what happens.
Indy :>)
Comment Written 18-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2011
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Hi, Karyn. Thanks so much for reading my chapter. I will try to get another one posted real soon LOL. I really appreciate your interest and generous support, my friend. Kind regards, Bev
Comment from closetpoetjester
An action packed little chapter Bevver and the gnarly dog at the end left the reader hanging in suspense for the fucking gun to go off or the dog to latch squarely onto Norris' throat. Plenty of things happening all at once and things are starting to heat up at the mansion. Mia seems to be the only calm one left with any sort of control of the situation. Thank God she knows what she is doing.
Well written. Great dialogue between characters and your continuing plot is starting to get very interesting.
Cheers and I look forward to next instalment...please post soon! LOL I am rooting for the canine at this point...I think that would make an interesting angle...or perhaps he could attack for a bit and THEN they fucking shoot him! See? Everyones happy then! Hahahaha Great job anyhow.
Closet xoxo
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2011
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An action packed little chapter Bevver and the gnarly dog at the end left the reader hanging in suspense for the fucking gun to go off or the dog to latch squarely onto Norris' throat. Plenty of things happening all at once and things are starting to heat up at the mansion. Mia seems to be the only calm one left with any sort of control of the situation. Thank God she knows what she is doing.
Well written. Great dialogue between characters and your continuing plot is starting to get very interesting.
Cheers and I look forward to next instalment...please post soon! LOL I am rooting for the canine at this point...I think that would make an interesting angle...or perhaps he could attack for a bit and THEN they fucking shoot him! See? Everyones happy then! Hahahaha Great job anyhow.
Closet xoxo
Comment Written 17-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2011
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Well, Mia is the only one that Knows that she Knows what she's doing, if that makes sense. Others have abilities they will discover 'under fire' but I'm not saying who. Thanks so much for your continuing interest, buddy. I appreciate the great review and insights. You rock! Bev
Comment from Bellringer
Bev, Your chapter was packed with tension, action, eerie sights and sounds. Mia's power sure come to the fore in this one--it's a wonder she didn't collapse from exhaustion! Great cliff-hanger ending, too. Blessings, Hector
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2011
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Bev, Your chapter was packed with tension, action, eerie sights and sounds. Mia's power sure come to the fore in this one--it's a wonder she didn't collapse from exhaustion! Great cliff-hanger ending, too. Blessings, Hector
Comment Written 17-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2011
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Thanks, Hector. I really appreciate you reading my chapter. It's always great to hear from you and be the receptient of your generous support! Warm regards, Bev
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My pleasure, Bev. Blessings, Hector
Comment from Mastery
Hi, Bev. Although I've not followed your story as well as I should, and I apologize, I can see your writing very well in this chapter.
You are an excellent writer. Your voice is strong..You use great imagery and strong verbs throughout. Bravo!
"A startled cry from Emma broke through the fog that wrapped itself around Mia's thoughts." Good!
"She gagged on the smell with each breath." (Perhaps you should use a name here instead of the pronoun "she" as new readers, or even those following thee story closely need to be refreshed by the use of her name in the opening paragraph, I believe.
Great job, overall, Bev. Bob
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2011
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Hi, Bev. Although I've not followed your story as well as I should, and I apologize, I can see your writing very well in this chapter.
You are an excellent writer. Your voice is strong..You use great imagery and strong verbs throughout. Bravo!
"A startled cry from Emma broke through the fog that wrapped itself around Mia's thoughts." Good!
"She gagged on the smell with each breath." (Perhaps you should use a name here instead of the pronoun "she" as new readers, or even those following thee story closely need to be refreshed by the use of her name in the opening paragraph, I believe.
Great job, overall, Bev. Bob
Comment Written 16-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2011
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Hi, Bob. Thank you so very much for your really generous review and rating. And I think your suggestion is good, too. I am honored by your interest and awesome support for my writing. Warm regards, Bev
