The Blue Lights Of Rensselaer
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Comment from Kathryn Varuzza
Hi Susan,
Cool story.
Interesting.
Good dialogue.
Great descriptions.
Interesting legend.
I enjoyed it.
Cool ending too.
Good luck in the contest.
Hugs,
Katie
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2011
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Hi Susan,
Cool story.
Interesting.
Good dialogue.
Great descriptions.
Interesting legend.
I enjoyed it.
Cool ending too.
Good luck in the contest.
Hugs,
Katie
Comment Written 16-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2011
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Thank you Katie...I have closed or will, my account and if you have any of my work saved, could you forward it to me? I didn't think to save any of my work. Years worth, probably just gone. Hugs, susan
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Hi Susan,
Ouch. I didn't save any of it. Email me on yahoo if you get this.
Hugs,
Katie
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Hi Katie! ") IT's okay! I asked Tom to restore my portfolio and he did. I still can't get a prose chest to work tho. I have to use a poetry chest for stories. I hate it. Anyway, I did lose some work that I hadn't finished. I'm just toooo tired. ") Take care my friend! HUG! Susan
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Good. Good luck with everything.
Hugs,
katie
Comment from Tomoso
Yes, a spooky story about scary lights. I liked the way this story developed and flowed. I love your sentence "And the blue lights laughed."
Well done and good luck in contest
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2011
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Yes, a spooky story about scary lights. I liked the way this story developed and flowed. I love your sentence "And the blue lights laughed."
Well done and good luck in contest
Comment Written 16-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2011
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Hi again, thank you Tom...I am really happy you liked this effort I almost married a "Tommy" from Ireland back in 1973. Sometimes...well. My best to you. ") Susan
Comment from peggles
This is well written with a smooth flow of words
Such a vivid imagination you have
Your descriptive and expressive words
Make it an easy read
Good luck in your contest
Good choice in photo
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2011
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This is well written with a smooth flow of words
Such a vivid imagination you have
Your descriptive and expressive words
Make it an easy read
Good luck in your contest
Good choice in photo
Comment Written 16-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2011
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Thank you Pegs...what a great review. I really appreciate your kind enthusiasm .... I really do. ")) suse
Comment from Green_Jello
I love ghost stories, and what I love most about them is when someone is telling one they say what happened but then tell you about what people still say nowadays is still going on just to give you that extra scare. Wonderful piece, and I too have stories like this to share, great job.
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2011
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I love ghost stories, and what I love most about them is when someone is telling one they say what happened but then tell you about what people still say nowadays is still going on just to give you that extra scare. Wonderful piece, and I too have stories like this to share, great job.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2011
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HI Jellie! Honest, these lights are real...Google ? If you want, "Moody Lights" Or just type in the title...and you can read the articles about them? I live just south of that town and have seen them myself, long ago. I need to go again soon! THank you for reading this and for this kind review too! Susan
Comment from barfy
mmm Wow... a talented writer here... Your words painted pictures in my mind, of a close encounters, kind... Yeah, great work... Cheers
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2011
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mmm Wow... a talented writer here... Your words painted pictures in my mind, of a close encounters, kind... Yeah, great work... Cheers
Comment Written 15-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2011
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Hey Barfy...thank you! I checked your work and enjoyed the films! ") I am really impressed. I appreciate your enthusiastic words, you have helped me keep my chin up this night. Thanks again!
Comment from PinkMoon77
I think it's good but, I do not the overall purpose of this story...maybe you could explain what the lights are or expalin more in the beginning. It would help the readers understand the overall purpose of this story. I do not see one.
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reply by the author on 16-Aug-2011
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I think it's good but, I do not the overall purpose of this story...maybe you could explain what the lights are or expalin more in the beginning. It would help the readers understand the overall purpose of this story. I do not see one.
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Comment Written 15-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2011
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Thank you, Welcome and I wish you luck.
Comment from amahra
It was nice to take something real and turn it into a supernatural writing. I think that's what most supernatural stories are anything: based on some truth. Nice writing.
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2011
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It was nice to take something real and turn it into a supernatural writing. I think that's what most supernatural stories are anything: based on some truth. Nice writing.
Comment Written 15-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2011
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Hi Ama...thank you very much...your kind words are very inspiring and this review is very much appreciated! xoxo, susan
Comment from J. P. Egry
Oooooo, I love stuff like this! A great spooky story, well-told! Your first paragraph consists of what good/great stories are made of--pulling the reader right into the middle of the action with dialogue, character development, and scene setting. At first I thought you were in Rensselaer NY and I was going to go up (an hour from here) to see the lights. Too bad.
This is great fiction, based on fact, which always makes it more realistic. I think I saw a couple of little grammatical things, but when you re-read it you'll find them. Polish it up and sent it to an appropriate market--there are several magazines geared to this type of story.
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2011
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Oooooo, I love stuff like this! A great spooky story, well-told! Your first paragraph consists of what good/great stories are made of--pulling the reader right into the middle of the action with dialogue, character development, and scene setting. At first I thought you were in Rensselaer NY and I was going to go up (an hour from here) to see the lights. Too bad.
This is great fiction, based on fact, which always makes it more realistic. I think I saw a couple of little grammatical things, but when you re-read it you'll find them. Polish it up and sent it to an appropriate market--there are several magazines geared to this type of story.
Comment Written 15-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2011
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HI J.P.! Hugs and a thousand thank you's for this really upbeat and helpful review. I wish you could see these! I will read this again and see...some other reviews have said the same basic thing. I do appreciate this! Sincerely, suse
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you're so welcome----loved the story!
Comment from kiwisteveh
Your supernatural story - seemingly based on a real phenomenon - is strong and the writing accurate. Dialogue is used to give it a good beginning. There are just a few tiny details that could do with polishing.
This sentence needs to be broken up: And over in the dark of night, the blue lights played, dim for now, they watched, waited, and danced in excitement at the coming of the game ...
'out through the near-by woods' is clumsy.
'long into the wee hours' suggests a length of time passing, but here it seems you want a moment of time (when they are taken)
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2011
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Your supernatural story - seemingly based on a real phenomenon - is strong and the writing accurate. Dialogue is used to give it a good beginning. There are just a few tiny details that could do with polishing.
This sentence needs to be broken up: And over in the dark of night, the blue lights played, dim for now, they watched, waited, and danced in excitement at the coming of the game ...
'out through the near-by woods' is clumsy.
'long into the wee hours' suggests a length of time passing, but here it seems you want a moment of time (when they are taken)
Comment Written 15-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2011
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HI Kiwi, I am going to jot these ideas down and work on this. Your input is invaluable and I really do appreciate this help! Thank you for it and taking time to review for me!
Comment from c_lucas
Curiousity has been the down fall of many. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for an easy read. Good luck in your contest.
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2011
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Curiousity has been the down fall of many. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for an easy read. Good luck in your contest.
Comment Written 15-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2011
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HI Charlie! Thank you! I was so excited the time I saw these...still no one knows what they are...very intelesting! ") I am trying to sound like the old Comandant on Hogan's Heroes!")) Susan
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You're welcome, Susan. Charlie
