Lonely Hearts Meet
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Comment from judiverse
Really terrific job, barbara. The reliving of what happened in the house as they went back to get Anna's belongings is realistic. I can imagine the unpleasant memories that brought back. Anna is lucky to have her support group!. The entrance of that harpies, Mrs. Rodgers, was great at the end of the chapter. Mothers always want to believe the best of their sons, even when they're rotten, don't they? Great chapter, and I've read previous. judiverse
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Really terrific job, barbara. The reliving of what happened in the house as they went back to get Anna's belongings is realistic. I can imagine the unpleasant memories that brought back. Anna is lucky to have her support group!. The entrance of that harpies, Mrs. Rodgers, was great at the end of the chapter. Mothers always want to believe the best of their sons, even when they're rotten, don't they? Great chapter, and I've read previous. judiverse
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Thank you for your kind review and insight.
Comment from eliz100
This was a good read from beginning, as usual. It looks like Bobby did not fall far from the parental tree. I do not like Mrs.. Rodgers
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This was a good read from beginning, as usual. It looks like Bobby did not fall far from the parental tree. I do not like Mrs.. Rodgers
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I didn't want anybody to like the old witch. I appreciate your kind review.
Comment from dportwood
barbara.wilkey,
You have chosen a subject to which many can relate. Your description, dialogue, and narrative reinforce the devastation of domestic abuse.
I noticed these as I read. You may wish to edit:
His ear [infections] has healed."
(should be [infection])
The apartment complex has a [laundry mat].
(should be [laundromat])
He walked [in kitchen], stopped, and knelt, running his hand
(should be [into the kitchen])
She pointed [to dent] in the washer
(should be [to a dent])
He ran his hands [long] the dents in the wall.
(should be [along])
Duane
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barbara.wilkey,
You have chosen a subject to which many can relate. Your description, dialogue, and narrative reinforce the devastation of domestic abuse.
I noticed these as I read. You may wish to edit:
His ear [infections] has healed."
(should be [infection])
The apartment complex has a [laundry mat].
(should be [laundromat])
He walked [in kitchen], stopped, and knelt, running his hand
(should be [into the kitchen])
She pointed [to dent] in the washer
(should be [to a dent])
He ran his hands [long] the dents in the wall.
(should be [along])
Duane
Comment Written 10-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2011
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His ear [infections] has healed." (I wondered about that, but in a previous post I established Michael had an infection in both ears. I did change the has to have. The other corrections I made. Thank you for catching them. I appreciate it.
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Barbara,
I am glad you had such fun on your vacation. It is so much fun to spoil our grandchildren since we are not responsible for their outcome! I hope Anna never has to go into that house again. The memory of Bobby's beatings almost did her in. I can't believe Bobby's mother! She must be deaf and dumb not to have noticed how he treated Anna and Michael. I am afraid she is going to cause even more trouble. This is a great chapter and I read every word. Well done....blessings, chey
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Hi Barbara,
I am glad you had such fun on your vacation. It is so much fun to spoil our grandchildren since we are not responsible for their outcome! I hope Anna never has to go into that house again. The memory of Bobby's beatings almost did her in. I can't believe Bobby's mother! She must be deaf and dumb not to have noticed how he treated Anna and Michael. I am afraid she is going to cause even more trouble. This is a great chapter and I read every word. Well done....blessings, chey
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I think the mother was in denial. I appreciate your kind review.
Comment from bookworm224
What a sad tale. It was very well written and it is good of you to write about this subject because there are countless women who have been in your character's position or worse.
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What a sad tale. It was very well written and it is good of you to write about this subject because there are countless women who have been in your character's position or worse.
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Thank you for your kind review and insight.
Comment from peggles
I loved the dialogue and thought it was realistic
It is excellent in the revealing of thoughts and emotions. Good characters and a great storyline. I enjoyed it feels just a big screen is showing the action in front of my eyes. Very well written
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I loved the dialogue and thought it was realistic
It is excellent in the revealing of thoughts and emotions. Good characters and a great storyline. I enjoyed it feels just a big screen is showing the action in front of my eyes. Very well written
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Comment Written 10-Aug-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from c_lucas
I have been following this story line and am familiar with your health problems issues. You are doing a terrific job with the book and your recovery. You've earned the sixer.
We better follow them before she continues to rob Bobby.(rob Bobby blind.)
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I have been following this story line and am familiar with your health problems issues. You are doing a terrific job with the book and your recovery. You've earned the sixer.
We better follow them before she continues to rob Bobby.(rob Bobby blind.)
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I wondered about robbing Bobby blind, but was afraid it was a northern saying. If a southern gentlemen such as yourself knows the saying then I will change it. Thank you for your review and support.
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You're welcome, Barbara. Charlie
