Dragon in My Wagon
A kid has an endearing adventure with a dragon.29 total reviews
Comment from adewpearl
Congratulations on your contest win for this delightful poem.
Your lines flow well and you use abcb rhyming effectively.
Delightful description of the smiling, teeth-gleaming dragon, his nostrils spouting steam.
Nice touches of alliteration.
Love the ending :-) What a smile-inducing read :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2011
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Congratulations on your contest win for this delightful poem.
Your lines flow well and you use abcb rhyming effectively.
Delightful description of the smiling, teeth-gleaming dragon, his nostrils spouting steam.
Nice touches of alliteration.
Love the ending :-) What a smile-inducing read :-) Brooke
Comment Written 01-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2011
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thanks so much!
Comment from sasil
What a fun children's stoy--reminds me of the kids book about a boy who gets an alligator keychain from a relative--he bathes it and it grows, becomes alive and he has a marvelous adventure. Nice rhymes and "bouncy beat". You made me smile! Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2011
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What a fun children's stoy--reminds me of the kids book about a boy who gets an alligator keychain from a relative--he bathes it and it grows, becomes alive and he has a marvelous adventure. Nice rhymes and "bouncy beat". You made me smile! Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 09-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2011
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Many thanks to you for the encouragement. I would love to know the title of the book you mentioned.
Comment from barkingdog
I just love this.It reads along so well and with definite bouncy rhythm like a boy with a dragon in his wagon might have ... kind of a 'Travolta' strut.LOL
Befriending a strange kid(the dragon) was a nice thing to do. So this is about a nice kid and his day. That's an easy theme for a kid to get. The whole town rewarded the boy. It had so many things in it that kids relate to: a wagon, part, slide, monkey bars, high five, wantin' to be cool, wiener roast, children together in the wagon, pulling the wagon, ice cream, parents that don't believe in 'magic', make-believe.
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2011
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I just love this.It reads along so well and with definite bouncy rhythm like a boy with a dragon in his wagon might have ... kind of a 'Travolta' strut.LOL
Befriending a strange kid(the dragon) was a nice thing to do. So this is about a nice kid and his day. That's an easy theme for a kid to get. The whole town rewarded the boy. It had so many things in it that kids relate to: a wagon, part, slide, monkey bars, high five, wantin' to be cool, wiener roast, children together in the wagon, pulling the wagon, ice cream, parents that don't believe in 'magic', make-believe.
Comment Written 09-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2011
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You totally get the picture I was painting with words...Thanks for the nice review.
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You're welcome. I'm pulling for you. Whoops ... it just came out that way. LOL Can I borrow you dragon?
Comment from A.Igou
This is charming and delightful! Oh if we could only hold onto our imaginations as adults! You've spun a great poem, so light-hearted and fun!
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2011
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This is charming and delightful! Oh if we could only hold onto our imaginations as adults! You've spun a great poem, so light-hearted and fun!
Comment Written 09-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2011
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Thanks so much for the kind words.
Comment from robyn corum
What a wonderful, delightful tale. I'm sure that kids will love it (as well as adults). I know I did. You've done a great job with the writing prompt. Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2011
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What a wonderful, delightful tale. I'm sure that kids will love it (as well as adults). I know I did. You've done a great job with the writing prompt. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 09-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2011
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Thns you s muh for your encouragment
Comment from HighKu
This is just too much fun for one poem! You might consider making it into a children's book. Which I am sure many an adult will read as well! It carries a spark of magic which grows to fire the imagination! I really have no suggestions as it is a delight!. But perhaps someday consider sharing it as a book for children big and small? Great Work!
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2011
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This is just too much fun for one poem! You might consider making it into a children's book. Which I am sure many an adult will read as well! It carries a spark of magic which grows to fire the imagination! I really have no suggestions as it is a delight!. But perhaps someday consider sharing it as a book for children big and small? Great Work!
Comment Written 09-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2011
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Thanks for the encouragement
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ps: Best Wishes in the contest!
Comment from Judian James
I could see the illustrations as I read this rolicking romp that any kid would love to laugh along with ... A dragon in my wagon was the perfect line to get it all rolling!!
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2011
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I could see the illustrations as I read this rolicking romp that any kid would love to laugh along with ... A dragon in my wagon was the perfect line to get it all rolling!!
Comment Written 09-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2011
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Wow, I appreciate the review.
Comment from angel123
Your poem expresses your unique imagination and I enjoyed reading it. It held my attention and flowed well. Good luck in the contest!
Angel123
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2011
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Your poem expresses your unique imagination and I enjoyed reading it. It held my attention and flowed well. Good luck in the contest!
Angel123
Comment Written 09-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2011
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Thanks for the kind review.
Comment from jamma
This is cute and fun and would probably make a delightful children's book. I enjoyed it from start to finish and what truth you write about grownups. We have truly lost our sense of playfulness. Really good story
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2011
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This is cute and fun and would probably make a delightful children's book. I enjoyed it from start to finish and what truth you write about grownups. We have truly lost our sense of playfulness. Really good story
Comment Written 09-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2011
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Thanks for the kind words.
Comment from nancyjam
This is a charming poem that would
appeal to children as well.
Excellent meter and cute rhyming.
Great images and word choice.
an all around cute story.
good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2011
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This is a charming poem that would
appeal to children as well.
Excellent meter and cute rhyming.
Great images and word choice.
an all around cute story.
good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 08-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2011
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Thanks for the kind words and review.
