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Lonely Hearts Meet

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Anna and her son escape from a man-made Hell.

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Comment from Piggies Grandma
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This is a very cleverly written chapter Barbara and I enjoyed reading it very much. I'm glad things are looking up for Anna and her little boy.

 Comment Written 06-Aug-2011


reply by the author on 07-Aug-2011
    Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from denhagan
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This was an interesting Part Two of Chapter 8 to read about where Anna and Paul go to check her new apartment, and then head over to the former place she used to live with her abusive husband Bobby. She decides she needs to go through the experience of removing her things in order to put her former life behind her.

 Comment Written 06-Aug-2011


reply by the author on 07-Aug-2011
    Thank you for your kind review.
reply by denhagan on 09-Aug-2011
    You're welcome, Dennis
Comment from axelbeariter
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The down payment was made and the lease agreement signed. With the new key, Anna unlocked her apartment./re-write in active voice: Anna made the down payment and signed the lease agreement. She unlocked her apartment with the new key.----Your vacational computer works just fine. Good setup chapter.

 Comment Written 06-Aug-2011


reply by the author on 07-Aug-2011
    I made the changes. Thank you for catching them. I appreciate the kind review.
Comment from Gungalo
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Man I have missed a lot eh? This was well told and shows it can be done. You gone a long way to showing us the right way to do it! Bravo!!

 Comment Written 06-Aug-2011


reply by the author on 06-Aug-2011
    Thank you for your kind review and encouraging words.
reply by Gungalo on 06-Aug-2011
    Smiling at you!!
Comment from Rama Rao
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I have returned to this site after a long hiatus as my wife's condition is improving. I am glad to read your post, which is excellent, as usual. Since I helicoptered into this chapter, I didn't get the drift, but I am going to the back chapters now.
You are the queen of romance novels in this site, and this chapter also confirms my opinion.
With best wishes,
I have returned to this site after a long hiatus as my wife's condition is improving. I am glad to read your post, which is excellent, as usual. Since I helicoptered into this chapter, I didn't get the drift, but I am going to the back chapters now.
You are the queen of romance novels in this site, and this chapter also confirms my opinion.
With best wishes,
Ramarao.

 Comment Written 06-Aug-2011


reply by the author on 06-Aug-2011
    Your wife has been in my prayers. I am glad she is getting better. I'm glad you are back. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Dave M
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Barbara,

This is an excellent bridge chapter, although a bit short. But maybe shorter is better for Fanstory. I get the feeling the next chapter is going to be more crucial, and I'm sure it'll be hard on Anna. Couldn't find anything to criticize.

Dave

 Comment Written 06-Aug-2011


reply by the author on 06-Aug-2011
    Thank you for your kind review. Yes, Anna struggles in the next chapter. This one is short because the two together would have been too long and I couldn't see splitting the longer one.
Comment from missy98writer
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Barbara,
chapter twenty-five of your book Lonely Hearts Meet is smartly written with excellent descriptive writing and natural dialogue. Amazing art work you used. I'm glad Anna has support in her life from Paul, Margaret and Troy. They aid her in getting her new apartment. Anna assures him her and Michael will be fine and safe there. Why do I have a feeling the other shoe is going to fall with her abusive soon to be ex-jerk of a husband. I like what Anna told Paul: "I lived in a dangerous vicious circle." Your chapter was short and sweet. Your doing a terrific job on this book, my friend. Keep cool on your vacation. I await with baited breath for your next chapter. Have a wonderful weekend and have some fun on vacation. Love ya.
Melissa.

 Comment Written 06-Aug-2011


reply by the author on 06-Aug-2011
    Thank you Melissa, for your kind review.
Comment from pickthorn
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Another interesting chapter as Anna continues trying to get her life back together and return to work and live in her new apartment with the baby knowing that she can count on Paul and Troy to help her over find happiness in her new enviroment. A great story well told.

 Comment Written 06-Aug-2011


reply by the author on 06-Aug-2011
    Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from stanishmichelle
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Everything is falling into place nicely for Anna. I can't wait to meet Bobby and his lawyer. That should be interesting. Anna should not be ashamed to talk to Mr. Keller. He's nice and she has done nothing wrong, other than marrying a monster. It's not her fault she didn't know he was one. Good idea giving Paul the spare key. Great story as usual. Continue to enjoy your vacation.

 Comment Written 06-Aug-2011


reply by the author on 06-Aug-2011
    Thank you for your kind review. We will need Bobby's laywer next.
reply by stanishmichelle on 06-Aug-2011
    Good to know.
Comment from Janie King
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Very well-written chapter.It's the beginning of a new way of life, the opening of a new door and the closing of a bad experience..still somewhat apprehensive about what this dude is going to do after he's released. Great job. PS When you have aminute toss up a prayer for me. I spent yesterday in the hospital getting IV antibiotics. Somehow I have ended up with cellulitis in both ankles, swollen, hot and painful. God bless. Hope your vacation was superb.

 Comment Written 06-Aug-2011


reply by the author on 06-Aug-2011
    Prayers are lifted up. Thank you for your kind review and support.