The Stone Birds
Anniversary of my accident26 total reviews
Comment from Maureen's Pen
This was a good poem. I understand how the anniversary of loss can strike. Yet I am glad to see though the stone birds may not fly, neither do they chain you down.
Thanks for sharing.
Maureen
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2011
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This was a good poem. I understand how the anniversary of loss can strike. Yet I am glad to see though the stone birds may not fly, neither do they chain you down.
Thanks for sharing.
Maureen
Comment Written 26-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2011
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Hello Maureen, Thanks so much for reading and understanding. I am a free spirit that can laugh at myself. Bless you, Kay.
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Me too my friend:)
Hugs
Maureen
Comment from rchitwood
Very good and it has good strong emotional images,Your structure is very good and nice line flow.Very creative and believable.Blessings Rite
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2011
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Very good and it has good strong emotional images,Your structure is very good and nice line flow.Very creative and believable.Blessings Rite
Comment Written 26-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2011
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Rite, Thank you for reading and understand my loss. I like to think I can inspire other disabled folks. Blessings, Kay.
Comment from chita
Your author notes are superb-you have a good flow with your poem and write a compelling story within your poem-I am sorry about your accident but you have found another way of enjoying life by writing poetry--I love where you write(The pain and suffering so long ago-Lives within me, conquered by love) a well penned write-great job.
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2011
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Your author notes are superb-you have a good flow with your poem and write a compelling story within your poem-I am sorry about your accident but you have found another way of enjoying life by writing poetry--I love where you write(The pain and suffering so long ago-Lives within me, conquered by love) a well penned write-great job.
Comment Written 26-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2011
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Hello friend Chita, Thanks so much for reading and glad you understood my need to let out my frustration on the anniversary of! Bless you, Kay.
Comment from Janie King
This is well-written and expresses your feelings of the grief that was caused by the accident but also shares your determiniation to go on with life and do all that can be done. Great job. God bless.
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reply by the author on 27-Jul-2011
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This is well-written and expresses your feelings of the grief that was caused by the accident but also shares your determiniation to go on with life and do all that can be done. Great job. God bless.
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Comment Written 26-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2011
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Good Morning Janie, Thank you so much for reading and understanding. It is only through communication that we learn to help one another. Bless you, Kay.
Comment from l.raven
Hi Kay, Love your poem,and the way you told the story.Has a nice rhythm and rhyme to it.Maybe God puts the Stone Birds there Kay to cheer you up on a such a sad day.No matter.I'm glad your here on this site with us. Linda
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reply by the author on 27-Jul-2011
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Hi Kay, Love your poem,and the way you told the story.Has a nice rhythm and rhyme to it.Maybe God puts the Stone Birds there Kay to cheer you up on a such a sad day.No matter.I'm glad your here on this site with us. Linda
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Comment Written 26-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2011
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Good Morning Linda, Thanks so much for reading; stone birds represent mourning, depression, death. Not nice fictional birds - they are gone today. Bless you, Kay.
Comment from adewpearl
No pity, my dear friend :-)
Strong use of rhyming couplets and I absolutely LOVE the image of stone birds.
Good alliteration in Losing a leg is likened to losing a child
Anger and frustration abounds - abound
and then change the next line to make no sound.
I love the upbeat turn where you declare you are alive with words.
This is excellent, Kay. :-) B rooke
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2011
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No pity, my dear friend :-)
Strong use of rhyming couplets and I absolutely LOVE the image of stone birds.
Good alliteration in Losing a leg is likened to losing a child
Anger and frustration abounds - abound
and then change the next line to make no sound.
I love the upbeat turn where you declare you are alive with words.
This is excellent, Kay. :-) B rooke
Comment Written 26-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2011
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Thank you darling girl; the birds are getting restless now! Love to you friend so far away. K. XX
