The Stone Birds
Anniversary of my accident26 total reviews
Comment from Lovinia
A great accolade to your spirit and strength of character. The title perhaps a reference to 'stone the crows', or 'buzzards' will not have your flesh because you have fought death and won. Or perhaps the chatter (like of birds) of self pity which you refuse to hear.
I applaud so much of what you say in this poem, yet do not ask for pity. I honestly don't know if I would have this courage and endurance.
Your poem is outstanding, you have considerable talent.
The rhyme, rhythm and flow is excellent. Your presentation in vibrant red supporting the white embellishes the passion of your poem and highlights your courage, strength of character and zeal for life. Well done.
I particularly like the last couplet, "The pain and suffering so long ago Lives within me, conquered by love." You certainly 'own' your disability.
Warm Regards - :) Lovinia xoxo
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2011
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A great accolade to your spirit and strength of character. The title perhaps a reference to 'stone the crows', or 'buzzards' will not have your flesh because you have fought death and won. Or perhaps the chatter (like of birds) of self pity which you refuse to hear.
I applaud so much of what you say in this poem, yet do not ask for pity. I honestly don't know if I would have this courage and endurance.
Your poem is outstanding, you have considerable talent.
The rhyme, rhythm and flow is excellent. Your presentation in vibrant red supporting the white embellishes the passion of your poem and highlights your courage, strength of character and zeal for life. Well done.
I particularly like the last couplet, "The pain and suffering so long ago Lives within me, conquered by love." You certainly 'own' your disability.
Warm Regards - :) Lovinia xoxo
Comment Written 11-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2011
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Lovinia, You have bowled me over with your beautiful review. Thank you so very much. Blessings, Kay.
Comment from Mastery
Hi, Aussie. Congratulations on a wonderfully written poem. I cannot imagine what you have gone through, both mentally and physically since your accident. Your passion in this poem is deserving of six stars, but alas...I Have none left. Great poem! Bravo! I will be watching for more of your work! Bob (Mastery)
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2011
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Hi, Aussie. Congratulations on a wonderfully written poem. I cannot imagine what you have gone through, both mentally and physically since your accident. Your passion in this poem is deserving of six stars, but alas...I Have none left. Great poem! Bravo! I will be watching for more of your work! Bob (Mastery)
Comment Written 30-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2011
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Hello Bob, Thanks so very much for reviewing, glad you liked the poem. Blessings, Kay.
Comment from Piggies Grandma
I really enjoyed reading your poem Aussie. It is very cleverly written and very well thought out. You have a great outlook on life ;0)
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2011
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I really enjoyed reading your poem Aussie. It is very cleverly written and very well thought out. You have a great outlook on life ;0)
Comment Written 28-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2011
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PG, thanks so much for reading and glad you liked it. Cheers, Kay.
Comment from RebelRose
I think the concept of this poem is a nice encouragement to anyone with a disability. I have never heard the term 'stone birds' but I think I'get' it. Well done.
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2011
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I think the concept of this poem is a nice encouragement to anyone with a disability. I have never heard the term 'stone birds' but I think I'get' it. Well done.
Comment Written 28-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2011
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Patty, Thanks so much for reading; stone birds represent depression, pain and death. They have flown away for another year. Blessings, Kay.
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I figured it was something like that. I hope they stay gone, never to return.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
My heart goes out to you. I would like to see those stone birds fly away. Your poem flowed smoothly causing ease of reading. The rhyming scheme is very good.
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2011
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My heart goes out to you. I would like to see those stone birds fly away. Your poem flowed smoothly causing ease of reading. The rhyming scheme is very good.
Comment Written 27-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2011
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Hello Barbara, Thanks for reading, every year the birds land - today they have flown away. Blessings, Kay.
Comment from fairytalesgirl
this is actually beautiful loss is so hard yet each of us has to endure our fair share you could see all of your feelings and i think it really shows all of the stages of grievance- wow! your more than talented at poems
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2011
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this is actually beautiful loss is so hard yet each of us has to endure our fair share you could see all of your feelings and i think it really shows all of the stages of grievance- wow! your more than talented at poems
Comment Written 27-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2011
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Hello fairytalesgirl, Thank you for reading; I have learnt how to live with my disability and I think I am a better person for the suffering is behind me. Blessings, Kay.
Comment from mumsyone
I'm not familiar with stone birds; an Australian bird, I'm assuming. I'm glad you have overcome your accident and can spend time writing and enjoying FanStory.
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2011
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I'm not familiar with stone birds; an Australian bird, I'm assuming. I'm glad you have overcome your accident and can spend time writing and enjoying FanStory.
Comment Written 27-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2011
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Hello mumsyone, You made me smile my friend; stone birds do not exist, it is a saying regarding pain and depression. They are likened to tombstones. Thank you for reading. Blessings, Kay.
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No wonder you laughed! I've never heard the expression before! Learn something new every day. Now I know!
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Hey, We both had a giggle. Two points to us, nil to depressing stone birds. LOL K.
Comment from MariJo
I like what you conveyed in your poem with feeling & emotion. It flows very well but your rhyme scheme is inconsistent. You have handled the subject with courage & it shows in your verse.
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2011
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I like what you conveyed in your poem with feeling & emotion. It flows very well but your rhyme scheme is inconsistent. You have handled the subject with courage & it shows in your verse.
Comment Written 27-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2011
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MariJo, Thanks for reading and glad you understood my feelings. Blessings, Kay.
Comment from poetbear
Motivating and gutsy.
I like your spirit and soul.
The metaphor and imagery are great. Reads and flows well.
Makes sense and gets the mesage across well.
A good read.
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2011
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Motivating and gutsy.
I like your spirit and soul.
The metaphor and imagery are great. Reads and flows well.
Makes sense and gets the mesage across well.
A good read.
Comment Written 27-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2011
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Hello poetbear, Thank you for reading and understanding. Glad you liked the poem and message. Blessings, Kay.
Comment from stanishmichelle
Although it's a sad period for you, your words expressed that you are strong and haven't lost your sense of humour or become withdrawn as some persons are likely to do. You writing reflects your good natured character, especially the fourth and last stanzas. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2011
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Although it's a sad period for you, your words expressed that you are strong and haven't lost your sense of humour or become withdrawn as some persons are likely to do. You writing reflects your good natured character, especially the fourth and last stanzas. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 27-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2011
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stanishmichelle, Thanks a lot for your kind review and glad you understood the message; some people walk in the rain, others just get wet. Blessings, Kay.
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Thanks too, and all the best. Michelle
