The Ballad of a Vision
Heaven as a Mountain Stream22 total reviews
Comment from TammyGail
Wow.. this was some poem here
It was well written you kept my att with this
Your imagery was perfect for this
It was a pleasure thanks for sharing
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2011
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Wow.. this was some poem here
It was well written you kept my att with this
Your imagery was perfect for this
It was a pleasure thanks for sharing
Comment Written 05-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2011
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Thanks for an excellent review.
Comment from cercie
What a lovely poem I expecially related to this verse
And when the Reaper comes to claim
My body as his own,
God's wonders I shall then acclaim
"And grace will take me home."
Thank you so much for sharing so that I might enjoy
cercie
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2011
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What a lovely poem I expecially related to this verse
And when the Reaper comes to claim
My body as his own,
God's wonders I shall then acclaim
"And grace will take me home."
Thank you so much for sharing so that I might enjoy
cercie
Comment Written 05-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2011
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Thanks for an excellent review.
Comment from ragerde
I love the faith journey this poem portrays. I was wondering if it came out of a near death experience. You are obviously a person of deep faith; however, your poetry does not reflect the narrow views of many "fundamentalist" Christians.
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2012
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I love the faith journey this poem portrays. I was wondering if it came out of a near death experience. You are obviously a person of deep faith; however, your poetry does not reflect the narrow views of many "fundamentalist" Christians.
Comment Written 05-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2012
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My view of Heaven is more of that of William Blake than that of the Puritans. I think that's why I can be at peace. Thanks for a great review.
Comment from words
I like your write on eternity's call.
I think we all long for that return to oneness.
I especially liked:And when the Reaper comes to claim
My body as his own,
God's wonders I shall then acclaim
"And grace will take me home."
Yes, grace will take us home.
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2012
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I like your write on eternity's call.
I think we all long for that return to oneness.
I especially liked:And when the Reaper comes to claim
My body as his own,
God's wonders I shall then acclaim
"And grace will take me home."
Yes, grace will take us home.
Comment Written 18-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2012
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Aren't those wonderful words? They give me such peace.
Comment from amada
Alvin, this poem touch me very much. I'm meditating in your words here "I long for ocean fog and spray--
No wish to tarry here, For it is not my place to stay;
Mortality is mere. " For all accounts I was supposed to die at birth, a sick premie. God had other plans for me, I remember it every day!
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2012
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Alvin, this poem touch me very much. I'm meditating in your words here "I long for ocean fog and spray--
No wish to tarry here, For it is not my place to stay;
Mortality is mere. " For all accounts I was supposed to die at birth, a sick premie. God had other plans for me, I remember it every day!
Comment Written 26-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2012
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Yes, I was a premie, too, so I understand. Thanks for a great review.
Comment from Jean Lutz
I believe your vision of heaven is somewhat like mine. Others may long for mansions and streets of gold. I just want to be with the Creator and creation as it was intended to be. Longing for the day when the lion and lamb lay side by side. Best wishes with this piece that displays faith so well.
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2012
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I believe your vision of heaven is somewhat like mine. Others may long for mansions and streets of gold. I just want to be with the Creator and creation as it was intended to be. Longing for the day when the lion and lamb lay side by side. Best wishes with this piece that displays faith so well.
Comment Written 26-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2012
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Yes, I think we have similar visions of Paradise.
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Thanks for the extraordinary review.
Comment from MyYiaYia
Awesome! And not just cause your my teacher, either. I am glad you did not stay, we need you hear to teach us how to make beautiful poetry. Deb :0)
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2012
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Awesome! And not just cause your my teacher, either. I am glad you did not stay, we need you hear to teach us how to make beautiful poetry. Deb :0)
Comment Written 26-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2012
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Thanks for your kind compliments and the extraordinary review.
Comment from Judian James
This is absolutely lovely Alvin. Most especially this verse: "The Lord then sends me on my way
Upon capricious seas
Where I keep human cares at bay
And trust Christ is my lee." beautifully rhymed and metered as well. I loved it.
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2012
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This is absolutely lovely Alvin. Most especially this verse: "The Lord then sends me on my way
Upon capricious seas
Where I keep human cares at bay
And trust Christ is my lee." beautifully rhymed and metered as well. I loved it.
Comment Written 25-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2012
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I reallly like this poem, too, and I am glad you do. Thanks for a great review.
Comment from teacherdub
Alvin, this is superbly thought out and penned. The majesty of heaven blended with the beauty He has blessed us with here speaks volumes to the love the Lord has for his children. The poem flows seamlessly, and no errors were found. {Been in East Texas the past five weeks. Just got back. Dial-up only in that area, so I've been absent from FS quite a while.} td
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2012
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Alvin, this is superbly thought out and penned. The majesty of heaven blended with the beauty He has blessed us with here speaks volumes to the love the Lord has for his children. The poem flows seamlessly, and no errors were found. {Been in East Texas the past five weeks. Just got back. Dial-up only in that area, so I've been absent from FS quite a while.} td
Comment Written 25-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2012
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Thanks for the extraordinary review. I am quite honored.
Comment from sgalletti
Hello dear friend and teach! I give you a "qualified" six on this lovely piece because I have learned that I can not upgrade from a five to a six and I know you will pay attention as you choose. Gorgeous meter...my very favorite (iambic alternating 8 and 6 syllables). Perfect for the content. Tripped up a bit on "to the" and was bothered a bit by "me/me/me." Otherwise...simply beautiful. Sue
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2012
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Hello dear friend and teach! I give you a "qualified" six on this lovely piece because I have learned that I can not upgrade from a five to a six and I know you will pay attention as you choose. Gorgeous meter...my very favorite (iambic alternating 8 and 6 syllables). Perfect for the content. Tripped up a bit on "to the" and was bothered a bit by "me/me/me." Otherwise...simply beautiful. Sue
Comment Written 24-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2012
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I would have been happy with a five. I see the problems of which you speak. I do like ballad meter.
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My friend. I am receiving replies to very old reviews on Fan Story. I would much prefer you reply to my current e-mails. Sue
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Sue, the hospital time has give me time to check up and have things in chronological order. You're not the only one out of sync.
