Lonely Hearts Meet
Viewing comments for Chapter 23 "Part two, Chapter 7"Anna and her son escape from a man-made Hell.
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Comment from Dave M
Barbara,
This is an excellent chapter about all the decisions a woman in Anna's situation has to make, and as you said, often without any help. It can be daunting, and I was not bored. I enjoyed this post and couldn't find anything to criticize.
Dave
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2011
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Barbara,
This is an excellent chapter about all the decisions a woman in Anna's situation has to make, and as you said, often without any help. It can be daunting, and I was not bored. I enjoyed this post and couldn't find anything to criticize.
Dave
Comment Written 21-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2011
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Thank you for your kind review and support.
Comment from Queenise
I did not think it was boring at all and loved it as much as the other chapters. You have done a great job showing how this affects lives and I thank you. Had some relatives that have gone through this and it is a shame. Great job again,Barbara. Queenise
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2011
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I did not think it was boring at all and loved it as much as the other chapters. You have done a great job showing how this affects lives and I thank you. Had some relatives that have gone through this and it is a shame. Great job again,Barbara. Queenise
Comment Written 21-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
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My pleasure. Queenise
Comment from Jen Gentry
Barb
I did not find this chapter at all boring in fact I think it was very touching and flowed together very well
One sentence I think you should look at
"I guess the office already closed.
otherwise perfect chapter
Blessings
Jenny
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2011
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Barb
I did not find this chapter at all boring in fact I think it was very touching and flowed together very well
One sentence I think you should look at
"I guess the office already closed.
otherwise perfect chapter
Blessings
Jenny
Comment Written 21-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2011
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I had fixed that sentence. Maybe I forgot to save it or something. I will go back. Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Shirley McLain
I didn't think the chapter was boring. You still brought out emotion in both Anna as well as Paul and his wife. You did an excellent job as always.
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2011
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I didn't think the chapter was boring. You still brought out emotion in both Anna as well as Paul and his wife. You did an excellent job as always.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2011
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Thank you for your kind review. I a reviewer gave me a three on my previous post because it was boring. I am admitting up front that nothing exciting is happening.
Comment from AprilShower
Hi, Barbara. I didn't think this was boring. Like you said it is necessary for the story. The reader needs to know what the abused woman plans on doing. Wouldn't this man's hypersensitivity show up while dating? I dated a fellow who bragged about beating up his father. I refuse to date him after that. Years later I met his wife who had divorced him. She told me he beat her. If a man shows any of these tendencies, the woman should not go out with them or marry them. April
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2011
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Hi, Barbara. I didn't think this was boring. Like you said it is necessary for the story. The reader needs to know what the abused woman plans on doing. Wouldn't this man's hypersensitivity show up while dating? I dated a fellow who bragged about beating up his father. I refuse to date him after that. Years later I met his wife who had divorced him. She told me he beat her. If a man shows any of these tendencies, the woman should not go out with them or marry them. April
Comment Written 21-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2011
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Not alway do these tendencies show up while dating. Thank you for your kind review.
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You're welcome, Barbara. April
Comment from MizKat
Barbara - This is a very good chapter to your book. It isn't boring in the least. It's got a lot of useful information. Nicely written. Kat
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2011
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Barbara - This is a very good chapter to your book. It isn't boring in the least. It's got a lot of useful information. Nicely written. Kat
Comment Written 21-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Belinda
Hi, Barbara, everything suits like a puzzle this time. But I see you have those little nagging thoughts to elaborate for next chapters ... A very delightful read.
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2011
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Hi, Barbara, everything suits like a puzzle this time. But I see you have those little nagging thoughts to elaborate for next chapters ... A very delightful read.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2011
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Thank you for your kind review and support.
Comment from Nanette Mary
Hullo Barbara ...
You suggest that this chapter might be somewhat boring but I did not find it so. It projects a good lesson, not only to abused women but to all who wish to attain something, showing that the financial aspect should be faced and worked out before decisions are made.
There are just a few small changes to recommend ...
* You have - Anna, Margaret, Betty leave (present tense) to look for at two possible apartments. As this story is being written in the past tense, I suggest - Anna, Margaret and Betty left to look at two possible apartments.
* You have - will give us an estimate of how much the utilities run. I suggest - an estimate of how much the utilities will cost.
* You have - the average electric is about $200 month.
I suggest - the average monthly electricity account is about $200.
* You have - You're representing me for free and now making .... please no! 'for free' - although so commonly used now - is totally ungrammatical. Things can be free -
free of charge or for nothing but never 'for free.'
* You have - or in his case, a large sink. Whichever
you're more comfortable with. I suggest .... a large
sink, whichever you're more comfortable with.
I look forward to the next chapter.
Love from ..... Nanette Mary.
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2011
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Hullo Barbara ...
You suggest that this chapter might be somewhat boring but I did not find it so. It projects a good lesson, not only to abused women but to all who wish to attain something, showing that the financial aspect should be faced and worked out before decisions are made.
There are just a few small changes to recommend ...
* You have - Anna, Margaret, Betty leave (present tense) to look for at two possible apartments. As this story is being written in the past tense, I suggest - Anna, Margaret and Betty left to look at two possible apartments.
* You have - will give us an estimate of how much the utilities run. I suggest - an estimate of how much the utilities will cost.
* You have - the average electric is about $200 month.
I suggest - the average monthly electricity account is about $200.
* You have - You're representing me for free and now making .... please no! 'for free' - although so commonly used now - is totally ungrammatical. Things can be free -
free of charge or for nothing but never 'for free.'
* You have - or in his case, a large sink. Whichever
you're more comfortable with. I suggest .... a large
sink, whichever you're more comfortable with.
I look forward to the next chapter.
Love from ..... Nanette Mary.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2011
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The first suggestion, It is a discussion I am having with my readers, not part of my post, I am talking to them in present tense. Thank you for your kind review and assistance.
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello
Boring no WAY
Who ever gave you an average rating for this chapter doesn't realize the fear that so many Abused women go through..
I could feel the concern Anna had --
Thank God she has others who are willing to advice her what to do.
Gert
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2011
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Hello
Boring no WAY
Who ever gave you an average rating for this chapter doesn't realize the fear that so many Abused women go through..
I could feel the concern Anna had --
Thank God she has others who are willing to advice her what to do.
Gert
Comment Written 21-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2011
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On my previous post, I received a three because it was boring. He also said Betty was too domineering. I was just covering my bases. I appreciate your kind review.
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You are welcome Barb
Gert
Comment from quashdog
It wasn't boring. Life and living require one to make such calculations. Anna was a little paranoind about Paul playing with the boy. Some men love to have interaction with kids, while others like Booby, cannot even have a decent relationship with their own progeny.
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2011
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It wasn't boring. Life and living require one to make such calculations. Anna was a little paranoind about Paul playing with the boy. Some men love to have interaction with kids, while others like Booby, cannot even have a decent relationship with their own progeny.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2011
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I received three stars on my last post becauseit was boring, hense the warning. There's no sex, vilence, or chase scenes. I appreciate your kind review.
