X Marks the Spot
Bob and Bill go fishing...25 total reviews
Comment from rawahymis
Very cute poem full of witty humour.
Lively and cheerful tone.
The little cyclical adventure trip is clearly established, and the ending is sharp and unexpected.
Came quite close. Congratulations for the grand effort.
rawahy
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2011
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Very cute poem full of witty humour.
Lively and cheerful tone.
The little cyclical adventure trip is clearly established, and the ending is sharp and unexpected.
Came quite close. Congratulations for the grand effort.
rawahy
Comment Written 22-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Steve
Comment from adewpearl
Excellent use of abcb rhyming and good flow to your lines.
Nice use of alliteration in phrases like working week and Bill to Bob.
You have definitely made me laugh with this dumb and dumber pair of friends - I guess they've found the perfect match for their cluelessness - what a fun story. LOL Brooke
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2011
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Excellent use of abcb rhyming and good flow to your lines.
Nice use of alliteration in phrases like working week and Bill to Bob.
You have definitely made me laugh with this dumb and dumber pair of friends - I guess they've found the perfect match for their cluelessness - what a fun story. LOL Brooke
Comment Written 21-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2011
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Thanks, Brooke. It's an old joke, but a good one.
I didn't realise Sally Yocom has also posted a poem based on the same joke!
Steve
Comment from Melba
Cute, very cute. Nicely written. Enjoyable to read. Good ending. Bill and Bob are perfect for each other. Good story and nice humor.
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2011
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Cute, very cute. Nicely written. Enjoyable to read. Good ending. Bill and Bob are perfect for each other. Good story and nice humor.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2011
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Thank you again.
Yes, I was referring to Dame Nellie Melba - so you are named after an opera singer and, by implication, a dessert. I won't ask which you're better at, singing or eating cake!
Steve
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Yes I'm pretty good at desserts.
Comment from egmosley
Poet,
Your story left me smiling, mainly because this would have been the thing that I probably would have done...I like the last stanza.,..it really made me laugh out loud..don't hate him....ha, ha, ha
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2011
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Poet,
Your story left me smiling, mainly because this would have been the thing that I probably would have done...I like the last stanza.,..it really made me laugh out loud..don't hate him....ha, ha, ha
Comment Written 21-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2011
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Thanks for the review - glad you enjoyed the joke.
Comment from writerwish
I like this one it is stupid but funny. I hope I can remember to tell this as a joke to my freind or family tomarrow. Love the picture too.
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2011
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I like this one it is stupid but funny. I hope I can remember to tell this as a joke to my freind or family tomarrow. Love the picture too.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2011
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Thanks - glad you enjoyed my little poem-joke.
Comment from pixiemillie
As one who loves to fish this piece speaks to me :+). You've told the story well of Bill and Bob and neither seems to get that marking the bottom of the boat won't make finding that spot a reality.
Your rhyme and rhythm are perfect for me and reads aloud well. I find nothing here to criticize except perhaps the dullness of the two fishermen.
Thank you and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2011
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As one who loves to fish this piece speaks to me :+). You've told the story well of Bill and Bob and neither seems to get that marking the bottom of the boat won't make finding that spot a reality.
Your rhyme and rhythm are perfect for me and reads aloud well. I find nothing here to criticize except perhaps the dullness of the two fishermen.
Thank you and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2011
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Thank you - glad you enjoyed the joke.
I have had at least one reviewer just as silly as the two fishermen who obviously didn't work out why it was funny.
Comment from Melspoems
lol, very funny.
Its got a nice happy feel and rhythm all the way through and the last stanza is great.
Best of luck, thanks for making me smile.
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2011
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lol, very funny.
Its got a nice happy feel and rhythm all the way through and the last stanza is great.
Best of luck, thanks for making me smile.
Comment Written 20-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2011
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Thanks for the kind review - glad it raised a smile.
Comment from Belinda
This is hilarious, Author. Marking the boat is something, using another boat is another. What a logic...I can't help laughing at the end of the poem.
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2011
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This is hilarious, Author. Marking the boat is something, using another boat is another. What a logic...I can't help laughing at the end of the poem.
Comment Written 20-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2011
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Thank you - it is an old joke, but a good one.
Comment from Justin Chopin
I would beat the tar if I was that much a fishing enthusiast and serious fishermen if my friend just very stupidly wrote the directions on the back of a boat that he very moronically just sold. Oh well so much for the great team of Bob and Bill. Very good job with the poetry very funny and very well written.
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2011
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I would beat the tar if I was that much a fishing enthusiast and serious fishermen if my friend just very stupidly wrote the directions on the back of a boat that he very moronically just sold. Oh well so much for the great team of Bob and Bill. Very good job with the poetry very funny and very well written.
Comment Written 20-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2011
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Thanks for the review.
Comment from moyramouse
Great poem and I loved the last stanza and the author's notes!!! This really made me laugh. Good rhyme and meter and a story that was so enjoyable to follow.
Well done, mystery poet...... I think I have sussed who you are, the poople juice is indelible my friend. xxx Good luck in the competition, this is a strong contender. xxmouse
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2011
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Great poem and I loved the last stanza and the author's notes!!! This really made me laugh. Good rhyme and meter and a story that was so enjoyable to follow.
Well done, mystery poet...... I think I have sussed who you are, the poople juice is indelible my friend. xxx Good luck in the competition, this is a strong contender. xxmouse
Comment Written 20-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2011
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Damn! i knew I should have washed that poople juice ou more thoroughly.
I am a little embarrassed as Sally Yocom has shown me an almost identical poem (Jake and Joe instead of Bill and Bob) that she posted some time ago...
There are some strong poems in this - if you can spot mine you can probably spot pix's verbal gymnastics and I wonder who wrote hat cute little pasta poem?
