What A Fool Believes
Just my view of foolish perceptions5 total reviews
Comment from Chris Tee
Sorry I had to abandon the read because this is not in the required format. You will not shape in the contest. This is a three line poem required
Do not despair there is help on the way.
Let me try to help you.
It is a 5-7-5 Haiku format, Ok:
Example:
I love you so much = 5 syllables
My love for you is extreme = 7 syllables
Much is love for you = 5 syllables
Three lines only you see
Every = 2 syllables eve=1 ry=1 total = 2
Now do not give up go and edit it, osr post it under general poetry and I will re-review it for you. If you do not understand tell me in your reply Ok
Never quit.
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Sorry I had to abandon the read because this is not in the required format. You will not shape in the contest. This is a three line poem required
Do not despair there is help on the way.
Let me try to help you.
It is a 5-7-5 Haiku format, Ok:
Example:
I love you so much = 5 syllables
My love for you is extreme = 7 syllables
Much is love for you = 5 syllables
Three lines only you see
Every = 2 syllables eve=1 ry=1 total = 2
Now do not give up go and edit it, osr post it under general poetry and I will re-review it for you. If you do not understand tell me in your reply Ok
Never quit.
Comment Written 14-Jul-2011
Comment from dinoscribe
OK. Under the contest rules the fact that this is not in the required format makes it difficult to rate.
However, this is a beautiful poem.
Your message is so strong, and the refrain, the repeating line speaks volumes adding emphasis to every word you have written.
The flow truly rolls of the tongue.
I wish this wasn't for this particular contest. I really would have loved to give you at least five stars.
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2011
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OK. Under the contest rules the fact that this is not in the required format makes it difficult to rate.
However, this is a beautiful poem.
Your message is so strong, and the refrain, the repeating line speaks volumes adding emphasis to every word you have written.
The flow truly rolls of the tongue.
I wish this wasn't for this particular contest. I really would have loved to give you at least five stars.
Comment Written 13-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2011
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It was really late, and I had been up for more than 30 hours. Sorry about the background. I am not sure how, or if I can change it. I am new on here, and not a computer person to begin with. I have to use them for my novels, but I try just to use the word program. Though, my agent says I have to start doing the social network thing. Thanks again.
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Try clicking on your post and going to edit this, thats at the top of the page. This action should take you back on to the writing page. If you then go down to the circle of colors and choose another on for the back ground that should fix the problem. You have to press the save button before releasing the poem back for public reading or you will lose the fix. Hope this helps and good luck. :) Ps. if your still stuck ask Tom, you can get hold of him under the contact us button.
Comment from Rose Hearth
I think this is a lovely, insightful poem. I like your rhyme scheme and the repition. However, this is a contest entry, and as such, must reviewed according to how it fulfills the rules. When you enter a contest, it is imperative that you read the guidelines. This prompt was for a 5/7/5, which is a three line poem consisting of the syllable count 5/7/5...hence the name. Under normal circumstances, I would have stayed with the two-star rating, or less based on that. I understand that you are new here and getting used to how it works. Welcome, and don't be discouraged by folks like me. I do like your style.
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2011
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I think this is a lovely, insightful poem. I like your rhyme scheme and the repition. However, this is a contest entry, and as such, must reviewed according to how it fulfills the rules. When you enter a contest, it is imperative that you read the guidelines. This prompt was for a 5/7/5, which is a three line poem consisting of the syllable count 5/7/5...hence the name. Under normal circumstances, I would have stayed with the two-star rating, or less based on that. I understand that you are new here and getting used to how it works. Welcome, and don't be discouraged by folks like me. I do like your style.
Comment Written 13-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2011
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Thanks! I will try, though not sure how.
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Pull up the poem. Click the edit poem box. Scroll down until you see the color circles and fix it. As the default colors are black on ivory, you must have chosen the colors when originally 'writing' the poem? Let me know when you fix it and I'll give it another go.
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think it is fixed, let me know.
Comment from egmosley
James 39,
anyone would be foolish not to get the message of your poem. I like the contrasts emotions and images and situations. The refrain ties every stanza together and ends up where you began. Deep.--and that's what a fool believes--this speaks volumes
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James 39,
anyone would be foolish not to get the message of your poem. I like the contrasts emotions and images and situations. The refrain ties every stanza together and ends up where you began. Deep.--and that's what a fool believes--this speaks volumes
Comment Written 13-Jul-2011
Comment from The Stranger
OK, there must be a joke here, like with the emporors clothes, well Im no fool and I dont believe I see anything here other than a blank screen
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OK, there must be a joke here, like with the emporors clothes, well Im no fool and I dont believe I see anything here other than a blank screen
Comment Written 13-Jul-2011
