My Book of Favored Sonnets
Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "A Silent Dawning"My collection of various sonnets.
32 total reviews
Comment from Vladilynn
Marvelous sonnet you got here, I like how you written this one and picture play along with the poem. Very magical to combined together. Love the Shakespeare dangling syllables too.
Keep it up and good luck!!
Love much
Lynn;0)
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2011
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Marvelous sonnet you got here, I like how you written this one and picture play along with the poem. Very magical to combined together. Love the Shakespeare dangling syllables too.
Keep it up and good luck!!
Love much
Lynn;0)
Comment Written 13-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2011
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Thank you so much, really appreciate your encourating review.
Comment from adewpearl
Your sonnet has strong rhymes in the prescribed form for the English sonnet form, and your lines have a steady cadence because of your consistent iambic meter.
I like the alliteration in whisp'ring willow tree and the lovely sensory appeal of your descriptions.
Your poem of faith also creates a wonderfully serene and reassuring tone. Good luck in the sonnet contest, JoLynne :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2011
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Your sonnet has strong rhymes in the prescribed form for the English sonnet form, and your lines have a steady cadence because of your consistent iambic meter.
I like the alliteration in whisp'ring willow tree and the lovely sensory appeal of your descriptions.
Your poem of faith also creates a wonderfully serene and reassuring tone. Good luck in the sonnet contest, JoLynne :-) Brooke
Comment Written 13-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2011
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Thanks, Brooke, always need luck, LOL Appreciate your time.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, dawnoftomorrow, i enjoyed reading this sonnet, i haven't attempted one yet because i haven't mastered iambic meter. good luck in the contest
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2011
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this is very well written, dawnoftomorrow, i enjoyed reading this sonnet, i haven't attempted one yet because i haven't mastered iambic meter. good luck in the contest
Comment Written 13-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2011
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Yeah, it can be hard to master but once you learn it, it will be hard to write freer. Thanks for taking the time to read and review.
Comment from kiwisteveh
I'm sure what Shakespeare did and what most discerning readers do is to automatically shorten some of those 'extra' syllables. I am happy to pronounce hour and flower as one syllable and empower as two, just as Shakespeare must have pronounced owest and growest as one and wanderest as two. I bet in some editions it is shortened to wand'rest to indicate this.
Back to your very pretty poem then, which is chock full of good things:
Rhyme and meter excellent (although I personally wouldn't rhyme hours (plural)/flower (singular)
A purist might say that you don't have much of a 'volta' or turn in your 3rd stanza, but for me that's not a big deal.
The theme grows gradually towards the final couplet.
I have a tiny niggle about 'surround' on its own where 'surrounding' might be more natural, but meaning remains clear.
In other words - damn good sonnet and good luck in the contest - but not too much as I have my eyes on the prize!
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2011
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I'm sure what Shakespeare did and what most discerning readers do is to automatically shorten some of those 'extra' syllables. I am happy to pronounce hour and flower as one syllable and empower as two, just as Shakespeare must have pronounced owest and growest as one and wanderest as two. I bet in some editions it is shortened to wand'rest to indicate this.
Back to your very pretty poem then, which is chock full of good things:
Rhyme and meter excellent (although I personally wouldn't rhyme hours (plural)/flower (singular)
A purist might say that you don't have much of a 'volta' or turn in your 3rd stanza, but for me that's not a big deal.
The theme grows gradually towards the final couplet.
I have a tiny niggle about 'surround' on its own where 'surrounding' might be more natural, but meaning remains clear.
In other words - damn good sonnet and good luck in the contest - but not too much as I have my eyes on the prize!
Comment Written 13-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2011
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Very nice review, very detailed, much appreciated. You are right there is not much of a turn in this one, nice to know someone knows what a sonnet is all about. I must say I have always been way to try the purist, LOL Thanks so much for the detailed review.
Comment from sito saguid
i love the mysticism in this sonnet.
without mentioning the word, the poet was able to convey her awe and her submission to the Divine.
i felt the Divine's assuring embrace in these lines --
"So let this comfort wrap itself around
and take you on a journey you've not known. " --
the author does not need to defend herself. poetry is also sound. if the poem's music enlivens the soul then poet had done her job well.
my soul had gladly accepted this sonnet's invite to " To feel this omnipresence close, surround," and to be guided " where all longing souls atone."
a heartfelt sonnet.
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2011
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i love the mysticism in this sonnet.
without mentioning the word, the poet was able to convey her awe and her submission to the Divine.
i felt the Divine's assuring embrace in these lines --
"So let this comfort wrap itself around
and take you on a journey you've not known. " --
the author does not need to defend herself. poetry is also sound. if the poem's music enlivens the soul then poet had done her job well.
my soul had gladly accepted this sonnet's invite to " To feel this omnipresence close, surround," and to be guided " where all longing souls atone."
a heartfelt sonnet.
Comment Written 13-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2011
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Thank you so much for your understanding and wonderful review, much appreciated.
Comment from Enrique28
I can sense what you describe in this lovely verse. It's an awesome feeling of anticipation that you get standing on the brink of a sunrise. A time to perceive a Divine presence and be enlightened! I love your presentation, but above all your poetic voice. Well done!
Enrique
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2011
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I can sense what you describe in this lovely verse. It's an awesome feeling of anticipation that you get standing on the brink of a sunrise. A time to perceive a Divine presence and be enlightened! I love your presentation, but above all your poetic voice. Well done!
Enrique
Comment Written 13-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2011
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Thank you so much, really appreciate your kind words of review.
Comment from Minglement
Shakespeare aside, I found no issues with this lovely poem well describing what well may be the most beautiful time of day. Great entr for the sonnet contest and I wish you luck. Marcia
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2011
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Shakespeare aside, I found no issues with this lovely poem well describing what well may be the most beautiful time of day. Great entr for the sonnet contest and I wish you luck. Marcia
Comment Written 13-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2011
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Thank you so much for your thoughtful words of review.
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You are so welcome. Really enjoyed your write. Marcia
Comment from sasil
This is masterful--I quite enjoyed the cadance of your lines--danglers and all. Nice inspiring message in your sonnet contest entry--best wishes!
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2011
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This is masterful--I quite enjoyed the cadance of your lines--danglers and all. Nice inspiring message in your sonnet contest entry--best wishes!
Comment Written 13-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2011
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Thank you so much for your thoughtful words of review.
Comment from Piggies Grandma
I enjoyed reading your poem Dawn. I thought it was very cleverly written and well thought out. Your carefully chosen words paint a lovely picture. The picture you have added is lovely.
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2011
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I enjoyed reading your poem Dawn. I thought it was very cleverly written and well thought out. Your carefully chosen words paint a lovely picture. The picture you have added is lovely.
Comment Written 13-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2011
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Thank you so much for your thoughtful words of review.
Comment from glpar
I, for one, really like this. The imagery is strong as are the verses. I see no problems with the way it is written. Since I'm not a poet I tend to look at poetry like art. I know what I like and I like this.
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2011
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I, for one, really like this. The imagery is strong as are the verses. I see no problems with the way it is written. Since I'm not a poet I tend to look at poetry like art. I know what I like and I like this.
Comment Written 12-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2011
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Thank you so much for your thoughtful words of review.
