Lonely Hearts Meet
Viewing comments for Chapter 21 "Part 4 Chapter 6"Anna and her son escape from a man-made Hell.
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Comment from nora arjuna
Hi barb, looks like things are getting better for anna. You handled the pre-court proceedings well and made troy's father sound professional. Troy must be impatient to see her. :)
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2011
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Hi barb, looks like things are getting better for anna. You handled the pre-court proceedings well and made troy's father sound professional. Troy must be impatient to see her. :)
Comment Written 11-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from CALLAHANMR
Hi Barbara:)
I really like the tender way Paul leads Anna through all the preparations and paperwork as he reassures her that she is intelligent and capable of taking charge of her life.
This story should be beneficial reading for any woman traumatised by an abusive and bulling husband. This is the message that gives battered women hope.
It is obvious that Paul has her best interests and safety at heart. I'm sure there will be some rough times ahead when she has to face Bobbie in court.
I have no criticism for this chapter. I like the way you are developing the story. Hurry with some more.
Love and Irish hugs,
Roger
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2011
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Hi Barbara:)
I really like the tender way Paul leads Anna through all the preparations and paperwork as he reassures her that she is intelligent and capable of taking charge of her life.
This story should be beneficial reading for any woman traumatised by an abusive and bulling husband. This is the message that gives battered women hope.
It is obvious that Paul has her best interests and safety at heart. I'm sure there will be some rough times ahead when she has to face Bobbie in court.
I have no criticism for this chapter. I like the way you are developing the story. Hurry with some more.
Love and Irish hugs,
Roger
Comment Written 11-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2011
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Thanki you for your kind review.
Comment from Chris Tee
Well Barbara The story is becoming interesting now.
Another good write we have here ma'am.
I hope you are feeling better and are on the mend girl.
Thank you for keeping us informed.
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2011
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Well Barbara The story is becoming interesting now.
Another good write we have here ma'am.
I hope you are feeling better and are on the mend girl.
Thank you for keeping us informed.
Comment Written 11-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2011
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Thank you for your kind review and support.
Comment from rchitwood
I have been keeping up with your story and I am glad Anna has a lawyer and I hope Bobby has to stay in jail.You write a very good story and the dialogue is great so is the characters.Very believable,Rita
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2011
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I have been keeping up with your story and I am glad Anna has a lawyer and I hope Bobby has to stay in jail.You write a very good story and the dialogue is great so is the characters.Very believable,Rita
Comment Written 11-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Janie King
This is very well-written and held my attention all the way. It makes one feel tense inside when she asks about him killing her before the cops get there? It's happened way too many times. On to the next chapter. God bless.
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2011
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This is very well-written and held my attention all the way. It makes one feel tense inside when she asks about him killing her before the cops get there? It's happened way too many times. On to the next chapter. God bless.
Comment Written 10-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Nanashirley
I have been enjoying your writing as usual you put real feeling in your words. The fact that you give the weak strength is a talent. I saw no need for editing.
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2011
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I have been enjoying your writing as usual you put real feeling in your words. The fact that you give the weak strength is a talent. I saw no need for editing.
Comment Written 10-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Connie P
Bobby really did a number on Anna's self-esteem, but that's almost always the case in these situations. She's VERY lucky to have Troy and Paul as I've said before. An extremely good chapter, it left me wanting more.
Connie
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2011
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Bobby really did a number on Anna's self-esteem, but that's almost always the case in these situations. She's VERY lucky to have Troy and Paul as I've said before. An extremely good chapter, it left me wanting more.
Connie
Comment Written 10-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Maureen's Pen
Another great piece of work, that I finished too early.
Such a great flow and your characters depth gives them life.
I enjoyed this chapter very much.
Thanks for sharing
Maureen
Hugs & Blessings to aide in your health
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2011
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Another great piece of work, that I finished too early.
Such a great flow and your characters depth gives them life.
I enjoyed this chapter very much.
Thanks for sharing
Maureen
Hugs & Blessings to aide in your health
Comment Written 10-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Carolyn Hilliard
paying job. The people you work with rely on information you supply them. If you were
word is missing from the sentence below; above shows whole line.
The people you work with rely on [the]information you supply them.
THIS LINE: meeting. Any questions? NEEDS QUOTATION MARK
THE STORY IS GOING WELL. YOUR AUTHOR'S NOTES ARE VERY INFORMATIVE. UNFORTUNATELY DENIAL IS USED BY ABUSEES; THEY BELIEVE THEY DESERVE WHAT HAPPENS TOO MANY TIMES.
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2011
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paying job. The people you work with rely on information you supply them. If you were
word is missing from the sentence below; above shows whole line.
The people you work with rely on [the]information you supply them.
THIS LINE: meeting. Any questions? NEEDS QUOTATION MARK
THE STORY IS GOING WELL. YOUR AUTHOR'S NOTES ARE VERY INFORMATIVE. UNFORTUNATELY DENIAL IS USED BY ABUSEES; THEY BELIEVE THEY DESERVE WHAT HAPPENS TOO MANY TIMES.
Comment Written 10-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2011
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Thank you for catching that. I have made the correction. I mentioned the self-esteem issues a few posts back in my author's notes.
Comment from denhagan
This Part 4 of Chapter 6 was very interesting to read about Troy telling his dad, Paul about his aunt having Anna with her. Paul then meets with Anna and goes over legal documents for her to sign.
Some mistakes are listed below:
Eighth paragraph, should be "his" throat not "this".
Need to look at redoing this to where it is clear,
"I'm going to use the term we're because we are a team now. We're going to ask for child support. I'm going to try to use Michael's bruises and scratches that were documented while in the hospital,"
I enjoyed reading this writing.
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2011
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This Part 4 of Chapter 6 was very interesting to read about Troy telling his dad, Paul about his aunt having Anna with her. Paul then meets with Anna and goes over legal documents for her to sign.
Some mistakes are listed below:
Eighth paragraph, should be "his" throat not "this".
Need to look at redoing this to where it is clear,
"I'm going to use the term we're because we are a team now. We're going to ask for child support. I'm going to try to use Michael's bruises and scratches that were documented while in the hospital,"
I enjoyed reading this writing.
Comment Written 10-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2011
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Thank you for your kind review and I made the suggested changes.
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You're welcome. I enjoy your writing. Dennis
