Lonely Hearts Meet
Viewing comments for Chapter 20 "Part 3, Chapter 6"Anna and her son escape from a man-made Hell.
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Comment from Mara del Mar
I love this chapter, Barbara, and I like Troy is tender with Anna who has suffered to the point of living like a frightened animal. I like the educational work done with his novel. Congratulations.
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2011
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I love this chapter, Barbara, and I like Troy is tender with Anna who has suffered to the point of living like a frightened animal. I like the educational work done with his novel. Congratulations.
Comment Written 05-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
Isn't it awful that some women have to resort to such drastic measures to get away from their abusers. Well written chapter, and valuable info in the Author notes!!! Debbie
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2011
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Isn't it awful that some women have to resort to such drastic measures to get away from their abusers. Well written chapter, and valuable info in the Author notes!!! Debbie
Comment Written 05-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, barbara., another great chapter for your book, i am glad that his aunt margaret was part of the underground movement to help the abused women, look forward to the next chapter.
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2011
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this is very well written, barbara., another great chapter for your book, i am glad that his aunt margaret was part of the underground movement to help the abused women, look forward to the next chapter.
Comment Written 05-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Patrates
I hope Troy is not the good guy that will turn into the bad guy in the end. I'm getting this feeling that there will be a huge twist in your story. Especially that you left the reader hanging when Troy talked to his dad over the phone.
Hmmmm.....
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2011
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I hope Troy is not the good guy that will turn into the bad guy in the end. I'm getting this feeling that there will be a huge twist in your story. Especially that you left the reader hanging when Troy talked to his dad over the phone.
Hmmmm.....
Comment Written 05-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2011
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I am curious why I received a 4. I don't know what to correct to make it a 5. Thank you for your kind review.
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I intended to give you the star rank next to the highest but I don't have 6 anymore so 5 became the highest that's why I gave you 4 without realizing that the equivalent of the stars remain the same. Sorry, lemme see if I can correct it
Comment from missy98writer
Barbara,
Ooh Troy calling on his cell phone may be a bad idea. What if he's being monitored my a creepy detective for her abusive creep of a husband. You've written another teriffic chapter with excellent narrative and descriptive scheme. Your great dialogue moved the chapter along at a good clip. I forwad to see what happens in the next chapter. Keep on writing riveting chapters, my friend. How are you feeling?
Live ya...Melissa.
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2011
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Barbara,
Ooh Troy calling on his cell phone may be a bad idea. What if he's being monitored my a creepy detective for her abusive creep of a husband. You've written another teriffic chapter with excellent narrative and descriptive scheme. Your great dialogue moved the chapter along at a good clip. I forwad to see what happens in the next chapter. Keep on writing riveting chapters, my friend. How are you feeling?
Live ya...Melissa.
Comment Written 05-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2011
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Thank you for the kind review and your continued support.
Comment from The Stranger
well Troy has now made contact with Anna and has explained the situation regarding her abusive husband, though I'm left wondering about this telephone call....
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2011
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well Troy has now made contact with Anna and has explained the situation regarding her abusive husband, though I'm left wondering about this telephone call....
Comment Written 05-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2011
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The telephone call will come into play later. Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Shirley McLain
Excellent chapter and I am glad it was Anna. You always do such a wonderful job and the story is well worth reading. Looking forward to more.
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2011
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Excellent chapter and I am glad it was Anna. You always do such a wonderful job and the story is well worth reading. Looking forward to more.
Comment Written 05-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from axelbeariter
We keep everything secretive for the women's safety."/Even us cab drivers--all the taxi drivers in our company (Gainesville, Fl) were sworn to secrecy when given an order to pick up an anonymous fare to take to the abused womens' shelter. Actually, there were only a select few of us screened for doing that trip. Had to spout a password at the gate too. I've also comforted a few women during those trips.----It's free."/That's fine, but for effect you might consider adding or saying instead, pro bono.----Another great writing job.
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2011
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We keep everything secretive for the women's safety."/Even us cab drivers--all the taxi drivers in our company (Gainesville, Fl) were sworn to secrecy when given an order to pick up an anonymous fare to take to the abused womens' shelter. Actually, there were only a select few of us screened for doing that trip. Had to spout a password at the gate too. I've also comforted a few women during those trips.----It's free."/That's fine, but for effect you might consider adding or saying instead, pro bono.----Another great writing job.
Comment Written 05-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2011
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Thank you for your review and insight. I will change the free.
Comment from Connie P
So finally, Troy at least knows Anna's safe. The ironies of life ... his own aunt involved in safe housing women when he's involved in the situation with Anna.
Great chapter!
Note:About a year after you became part of Betty and Paul's family*(,I think) I found out ...
Connie
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2011
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So finally, Troy at least knows Anna's safe. The ironies of life ... his own aunt involved in safe housing women when he's involved in the situation with Anna.
Great chapter!
Note:About a year after you became part of Betty and Paul's family*(,I think) I found out ...
Connie
Comment Written 05-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2011
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Thank your for your kind review.
Comment from rchitwood
Very good story and I have been following it to see what happens to Anna.I really have enjoyed your story,Good dialogue and characters and very believable. Thank you for sharing,Blessings Rita
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2011
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Very good story and I have been following it to see what happens to Anna.I really have enjoyed your story,Good dialogue and characters and very believable. Thank you for sharing,Blessings Rita
Comment Written 05-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
