Comment from Gert sherwood

Excellent

Hi Jan,
I don't know how I missed your cute poem about the ice cream poem It was a delight to read about how your granddaughter acted
Yes free verse worked very well.

Gert

 Comment Written 04-Jul-2011

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reply by the author on 04-Jul-2011

thanks, Gert -- she won't eat popsicles -- says they-re too cold -- same for ice pops -- just likes ice cream, the little stinker -- love, jan

Comment from Narvik

Excellent

Loved it, Jan. I could visualize this vividly all the way through. I loved this:

"the bottom of that ice cream cone
had just become the top"

and the last line topped it off perfectly. Great job.

 Comment Written 04-Jul-2011

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reply by the author on 04-Jul-2011

thanks, Captain Jack -- she's a mess, for sure -- love, jan

Comment from Aski

Excellent

Like you I like free verse more than a rhyming poem. However, if you are just playing around it can be fun. Telling a little story adds to the entertainment. This life style experience is one the enables a reader to recall other different perspectives to eating too. It's memories like these that make great stories later on in life, like when your granddaughter is getting married and there is a review of her life.

 Comment Written 04-Jul-2011

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reply by the author on 04-Jul-2011

you are so right, Aski -- I took pictures so am hoping to put her pictures in the book with the poem -- love, jan

Comment from Cumbrianlass

Excellent

Ha! Love this! I'm sure Lexi will treasure your telling of her first experience with an ice cream cone. And I'm with her - I don't like the cone either. Just pass me the ice cream! Great art work too.

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2011

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reply by the author on 02-Jul-2011

Avril, you are so right -- more room for ice cream without the cone -- love, jan

Comment from Patrick G Cox

Excellent

Hi Jan,

An amusing tale, children can be hilarious in their sudden likes and dislikes ... My brother caused our Grandmother - a cinfectioner of note - huge offence by refusing to even sample a magnificent "rainbow" sponge cake she'd made for his birthday - he thought the large silvered sugar balls she'd decorated it with were hat pins like the one's our other Grandmother used to pin up her hair...

Patrick

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2011

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reply by the author on 02-Jul-2011

that is too funny, Patrick -- thanks for sharing -- love, jan

Comment from Mastery

Excellent

Hi, Jan. LOL..Excellent spoof on the craziness at Mickey Dees...Shades Of my own experiences when my kids were pint-size. Good encapsulation of the adventure. You will never forget, I'll bet. Bob (Nothing wrong withnfree-verse.)

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2011

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reply by the author on 02-Jul-2011

thanks, Mastery -- love, jan

Comment from heyjude

Excellent

Jan, I know Lexi will enjoy all your poems that you're
writing for her. It's wonderful having grandchildren
and leaving memories for them in written form. I like
that thought ... she likes her ice cream straight.

 Comment Written 01-Jul-2011

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reply by the author on 02-Jul-2011

yep, she's a lot like her nanny when it comes to that and other things -- love, jan

Comment from ulster3

Excellent

Hey jan...
Very fine rhyme. To me it's the free verse that's harder. This is outrageously funny. The images are hilarious! I loved this read.
Warmly, Rebecca

 Comment Written 01-Jul-2011

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reply by the author on 02-Jul-2011

I took some great pictures of the faces she made while this was happening -- she really is my little buddy -- love, jan

Comment from c_lucas

Excellent

McDonald's have a strict policy on how their food is served. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for an easy read. Loved the humorous overtone.

 Comment Written 01-Jul-2011

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reply by the author on 01-Jul-2011

Thanks, Charlie. You must be right. love, jan

reply by c_lucas on 01-Jul-2011

You're welcome, Jan. Charlie

Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

typo in final line - tales her ice cream straight - takes
Oh, years from now this is going to make your precious Lexi laugh and laugh - you have preserved such a great memory for her
This is just SO funny - and with such great descriptive detail - I can see the whole thing unfolding in living color :-) Excellent rhymes, too, which make for a good read. Brooke

 Comment Written 01-Jul-2011

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reply by the author on 01-Jul-2011

thanks, Brooke -- it's been rolling around in my head a couple of days so needed to get it out -- love, jan