Lonely Hearts Meet
Viewing comments for Chapter 19 "Part 2 Chapter 6"Anna and her son escape from a man-made Hell.
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Comment from gramalot8
Barbara, you are leaving us in a suspence, aren't you? No fair. LOL I immediately wanted to look for the link to the next chapter. I can't wait to see who I hope is on the other side of that door.
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2011
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Barbara, you are leaving us in a suspence, aren't you? No fair. LOL I immediately wanted to look for the link to the next chapter. I can't wait to see who I hope is on the other side of that door.
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reply by the author on 30-Jun-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from amada
This is a very fast moving chapter. Mysteries are coming around and unexpected events. I was left on the high air, I wonder what's aunt Margaret's news.
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This is a very fast moving chapter. Mysteries are coming around and unexpected events. I was left on the high air, I wonder what's aunt Margaret's news.
Comment Written 30-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from mumsyone
It sounds like Troy might be going to get to see Anna and Michael? At least for a moment? I'm glad his dad has decided to be Anna's lawyer.
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It sounds like Troy might be going to get to see Anna and Michael? At least for a moment? I'm glad his dad has decided to be Anna's lawyer.
Comment Written 30-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Maureen's Pen
Well damn now I am on the edge of my seat and there is no more to read......sigh...
Wow, great chapter piece I loved it all.
Flowed well, caught me and pulled me through....now who is it at the door behind aunt Margaret????Anna????
LOL I know I have to wait......ogosh...
Maureen
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2011
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Well damn now I am on the edge of my seat and there is no more to read......sigh...
Wow, great chapter piece I loved it all.
Flowed well, caught me and pulled me through....now who is it at the door behind aunt Margaret????Anna????
LOL I know I have to wait......ogosh...
Maureen
Comment Written 30-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from rchitwood
I love reading your chapters my Mother was abused and we lived a hard life growing up.Your story is very inspiring and truthful. I'll be waiting to read the next chapter.Blessings Rita
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2011
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I love reading your chapters my Mother was abused and we lived a hard life growing up.Your story is very inspiring and truthful. I'll be waiting to read the next chapter.Blessings Rita
Comment Written 30-Jun-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from pickthorn
We have to wait in suspense to find out what is happening. It doesn't sound like it is good news about Anna. This is a very suspenseful, well written story. Looking forward to the next unfolding chapter.
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We have to wait in suspense to find out what is happening. It doesn't sound like it is good news about Anna. This is a very suspenseful, well written story. Looking forward to the next unfolding chapter.
Comment Written 30-Jun-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Deanita
Hi Barbara, I'm sorry I haven't read other chapters, but I found this one interesting and well written. I believe Anna is an abused woman and she's safer in the hospital. This behaviour is more common than we know. I hope she's safe.
I will look for the next chapter.
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2011
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Hi Barbara, I'm sorry I haven't read other chapters, but I found this one interesting and well written. I believe Anna is an abused woman and she's safer in the hospital. This behaviour is more common than we know. I hope she's safe.
I will look for the next chapter.
Comment Written 30-Jun-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Narvik
Hey, loved the hook at the end of this chapter. A real page-turner. I kinda like Troy, hope he doesn't regress into a less-than-desirable character, but I guess I'll have to wait.
This is good to look at battered women's situations. As a man, I've seen battered women stay with abusive men and think, "Why not just leave the asshole?" But there are a lot of issues about control and psychological abuse too.
Anyway, this is a great book, Barbara. Keep the pages turning.
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2011
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Hey, loved the hook at the end of this chapter. A real page-turner. I kinda like Troy, hope he doesn't regress into a less-than-desirable character, but I guess I'll have to wait.
This is good to look at battered women's situations. As a man, I've seen battered women stay with abusive men and think, "Why not just leave the asshole?" But there are a lot of issues about control and psychological abuse too.
Anyway, this is a great book, Barbara. Keep the pages turning.
Comment Written 30-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Gideon Roth
Hello Barbara,
Wow, another great addition to your story. This piece was well done as usual with a great use of dialogue that flowed well and held my attention. The only thing you may wish to look at is putting a space in between the words safe()haven that is found in the first sentence. Great job and I look forward to your next post...Tim
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2011
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Hello Barbara,
Wow, another great addition to your story. This piece was well done as usual with a great use of dialogue that flowed well and held my attention. The only thing you may wish to look at is putting a space in between the words safe()haven that is found in the first sentence. Great job and I look forward to your next post...Tim
Comment Written 30-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2011
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I will check that out. Thank you for bringing it to my attention. I appreciate your kind review.
Comment from Nican
This is another good chapter. The dialogue and the action moves along well and the lure for the next chapter section is there. As I have said in another review, I still find the characters stilted and without warmth or appeal other than they are trying to help Anna. I realize that I have missed a great deal of the earlier sections and maybe commenting erringly.
Picayune points:
The line "The men worked through lunch before they were comfortable with their proposal." didn't prepare me for the fact that they finished after 6:00 p.m. I thought there was a timing error.
"Margaret stepped outside and motioned with her right hand to someone." I would have completed this sentence after the word "hand". While it obvious she wasn't motioning to adog, it just helps to keep the mystery there.
" I'd better get my mind off Anna and start on that stack of papers on my desk. I have a meeting in the morning with..." Because it was before sunrise that he thought this, I thought the morning meant tne morning of that day, not the following day.
" He grinned. "I may..." - space after quotation marks
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2011
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This is another good chapter. The dialogue and the action moves along well and the lure for the next chapter section is there. As I have said in another review, I still find the characters stilted and without warmth or appeal other than they are trying to help Anna. I realize that I have missed a great deal of the earlier sections and maybe commenting erringly.
Picayune points:
The line "The men worked through lunch before they were comfortable with their proposal." didn't prepare me for the fact that they finished after 6:00 p.m. I thought there was a timing error.
"Margaret stepped outside and motioned with her right hand to someone." I would have completed this sentence after the word "hand". While it obvious she wasn't motioning to adog, it just helps to keep the mystery there.
" I'd better get my mind off Anna and start on that stack of papers on my desk. I have a meeting in the morning with..." Because it was before sunrise that he thought this, I thought the morning meant tne morning of that day, not the following day.
" He grinned. "I may..." - space after quotation marks
Comment Written 30-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2011
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I will check those areas. Thank you for your kind review.
