Lifeless
A cry from someone who is bored in life.5 total reviews
Comment from adewpearl
Your poem is in good 5/7/5 order.
I like your rhyme of do/you and I like your use of a question to engage your readers.
I feel so sad for anyone who is bored with life - how tragic it must be to have no interests, no hobbies, no volunteer work, no family - such a long list of things there are to devote time and energy to - for a person to have none of those things makes me so sad. Brooke
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2011
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Your poem is in good 5/7/5 order.
I like your rhyme of do/you and I like your use of a question to engage your readers.
I feel so sad for anyone who is bored with life - how tragic it must be to have no interests, no hobbies, no volunteer work, no family - such a long list of things there are to devote time and energy to - for a person to have none of those things makes me so sad. Brooke
Comment Written 29-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2011
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Thanks for your response. So true what you said. It's a tragic for a person to feel this way but it's a real situation for some youngsters and adults alike. Thanks once again.
Comment from peggles
like the title
Verse very brief not really much to comment from
would have liked to know why you are so bored with life
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2011
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like the title
Verse very brief not really much to comment from
would have liked to know why you are so bored with life
Comment Written 29-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2011
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Hi, thanks for your comment. I work with youngsters and it is a pity that this is a cry I hear quiet often.
Thanks once again.
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Hi, thanks for your comment. I work with youngsters and it is a pity that this is a cry I hear quite often.
Thanks once again.
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Now I have you. Makes sence
Comment from ernesto escarro
Lifeless
A want for something-
especially sighing for freedom.
where no tracking of behavior is done.
But then a reality of importance
that he is not singly living in this world.
So got to know what to live for not boring at all?
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2011
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Lifeless
A want for something-
especially sighing for freedom.
where no tracking of behavior is done.
But then a reality of importance
that he is not singly living in this world.
So got to know what to live for not boring at all?
Comment Written 29-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2011
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Hi, thanks for your comment. Much appreciated and enjoyed reading your feedback.
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Hi, thanks for your comment. Much appreciated and enjoyed reading your feedback.
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Welcome. God bless.
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Thanks then for extending your time with me. I hope I have given the light to the inquiry in your poem. God bless.
Comment from Dana Taylor
I play mah-jong. I enjoy 5-7-5. It's a way of saying so succinctly what you might otherwise take half a dozen pages to say. Well done.Dana
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2011
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I play mah-jong. I enjoy 5-7-5. It's a way of saying so succinctly what you might otherwise take half a dozen pages to say. Well done.Dana
Comment Written 29-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2011
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Hello Dana. Thank you. So true I enjoyed trying a 5-7-5. It's short and sweet.
Comment from Chris Tee
The syllable count is perfect but your presentation could improve to stand a chance in this fierce contest.
Add a bit of color and a picture to enhance your work.
Nevertheless well done!
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2011
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The syllable count is perfect but your presentation could improve to stand a chance in this fierce contest.
Add a bit of color and a picture to enhance your work.
Nevertheless well done!
Comment Written 29-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2011
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Hi Mr Tee, Thanks for your tip. I'm afraid I have to learn how to do such things as i'm new here and it's my first try. Thanks once again.
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Before you paste your poem you click on FanArt.com just above the title ok.
Then you follow all the prompts. Once you have selected the art then only you paste your poem.
The color is in two circles at the botto you can click on the circles or select from the box the one is back ground on the right and fomt on the left. go and try you might have to cut the poem and paste again after you have selected the picture Try never give up. We were all new.
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Thanks for your help and encouragement.
