Comment from Dawn Munro

Excellent

Oh GEEZ! You've done it AGAIN! I'm out of sixes, and this fantastic chapter DEMANDS to be rated as it deserves, and I'm out of sixes! Bev, this had me gripping my laptop as I read, especially when you changed verb tense to present tense for Mia's explanation of what was happening - it was like I was there! That's some trick, my talented friend, and you pulled it off beautifully!

MASTERFUL!!! GRIPPING!!! Hold onto your hats before you read THIS chapter folks - you're about to be blown outta ya seats!!!*********************************!!!

 Comment Written 06-May-2015

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reply by the author on 06-May-2015

Gosh, I'm blown outta my seat by your great review, Dawn. Thanks so very much! Your encouragement means as much as an extra star -- even more.

I'm so glad you mentioned the tense change, and I'm glad you felt it worked. I wasn't sure if I could pull it off.

I really appreciate your generosity and encouragement, my friend.

XX Bev

reply by Dawn Munro on 06-May-2015

Bev, honest-to-God, the verb tense change MADE it work, IMO - and what a hair-raiser! So sp-o-o-ky - I just loved it!

reply by the author on 06-May-2015

Thanks again, buddy. :)

reply by Dawn Munro on 06-May-2015

Always!

Comment from boxergirl

Exceptional

Really good stuff, Bev. Your descriptive sensory details provide strong imagery and connections for the reader, especially during Mia's entranced experienced with Charles. 8-)

 Comment Written 06-May-2015

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reply by the author on 06-May-2015

Thanks so very much, BG. I appreciate you mentioning what you liked about this chapter. That's always helpful.

I much appreciate your generosity!

:) Bev

Comment from Curly Girly

Excellent

This is extremely well written. No spags spotted.
Dealings with the supernatural are best left alone, in my opinion. And your last line sums it up well:
I believe Charles Bellingham was a Satanist, and we're dealing with extremely potent, demonic energy.
The evil energy was tangible in the descriptions and actions within this chapter.

 Comment Written 06-May-2015

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reply by the author on 06-May-2015

Hi, CG. Thanks so much for this very encouraging review. I appreciate your insights. :) Bev

Comment from Drew Delaney

Excellent

Wow! This is pretty freaky. It seems real in a sense. I have written a few scenes in the past of a ghostly figure appearing, but have not gotten into the logistics of the reasons. This is dealing with Satanic activity which scares the heck out of me. The writing and believability is good. Keep up the good work. Drew xx

 Comment Written 06-May-2015

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reply by the author on 06-May-2015

Thanks very much, Drew. Good to hear from you. :) Bev

Comment from royowen

Excellent

That's interesting, that the apparition she saw maybe the cause of the camera being drained of energy! She hasn't understood why Jim Norris would run from the ghost! Mia, in a vision had seen a vision of Charles Bellingham torturing and murdering the maid to get information that would uncover the whereabouts of his wife and lover, exciting place at the moment, good yarn, my friend, well done, blessings, Roy.

 Comment Written 06-May-2015

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reply by the author on 06-May-2015

Hi, Roy. So good to hear from you, as always. Thank you for this grand review. More mayhem to come!

Blessing you to as well...

Bev

reply by royowen on 06-May-2015

My pleasure Bev.

Comment from Ric Myworld

Excellent

Thanks for the pleasure of reading another outstanding chapter that helps us readers to feel what your characters are experiencing. The feeling of narrowly escaping the grasp of Bellingham with Mia. :-)

 Comment Written 06-May-2015

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reply by the author on 06-May-2015

Hello, Ric. Great to hear from you. Thanks for hanging in there with me on this novel. I appreciate your support and encouragement very much!

Bev

Comment from Joy Graham

Exceptional

Another sixer for you, Bev. I'll give you as many as the site allows me to give to you :)

"(There) nothing below me but rocks" - "There's"

This story is giving me goose bumps. I am loving it!!! Good thing I am reading it in the morning when it is not dark. I am getting a good idea of a paranormal type story. I am feeling the creativity flow into me so I can continue with my own story.

 Comment Written 25-Sep-2012

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reply by the author on 25-Sep-2012

Joy, you are so generous to take all this time to read my novel and offer such good insights. As if that's not enough, you give me a six! Wow, you are so generous, my friend. Hugs, Bev

Comment from Paradox Tremors

Excellent

Double Wow, Mia is tuning in quickly to the madness of the manor. I hope it doesn't affect her too badly during the mission. Another well written chapter my friend.

 Comment Written 14-Aug-2011

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reply by the author on 14-Aug-2011

Thanks, PT. Mia is a strong lady - she has to be with all the shenanigans going on! But, there is another member of the team that will play a bigger part when the demonic energies begin to take their toll. Thanks so much for your great and wonderfully generous review. I so appreciate your support. Kind regards, Bev

Comment from closetpoetjester

Excellent

Hmmmm, nice little chapter Bev and it seems Emma has captured the image of the woman in the photo quite convincingly. Great dialogue between characters and more than plausible in the telling. Well narrated and you rarely waste a syllable my friend. Good little bit of excitement with the spirit talking through Mia. Some great imagery as I read and boy am I glad I am reading this in the day. Please forgive me I am endeavoring to catch up and now I have the f*****g flu! LOL
Cheers Phillippa xoxo

 Comment Written 14-Jul-2011

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reply by the author on 14-Jul-2011

Hi, closet. I hope you are better soon, my friend. It's good to hear from you...just because it's you! Thanks for your reading of my chapter. I have another one going out in a few days...but I absolutely do not want you to feel pressure to review. I hope you know I appreciate it whenever you get time!! Thanks again for reading and for the wonderful support you always offer for my writing efforts. Take care of yourself, hey? XXX Bev

reply by closetpoetjester on 14-Jul-2011

Thanks Bevver, you are so lovely not to put pressure on me but I need pressure.
I work better flat to the board! Hahaha
Catch up soon
xxx
Closet
PS I feel better today but still clogged up! LOL

reply by the author on 15-Jul-2011

Oh, I'm glad to know you are on the mend, buddy. I like that phrase - flat to the board. Another great one I plan to use! XXX Bev

reply by closetpoetjester on 15-Jul-2011

Use it wisely my friend.
Hahahaha
xxx
Loves ya Bevver

reply by the author on 15-Jul-2011

hehehe

Comment from Piggies Grandma

Excellent

I enjoyed reading this chapter Writingfundimension and I thought it was very cleverly written and well thought out. It is very interesting.

 Comment Written 05-Jul-2011

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reply by the author on 05-Jul-2011

Thanks so much PG. I appreciate your generosity and your support! Warm regards, Bev