Steve's Story-Poems
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Comment from nancyjam
Very funny! I loved it.
"CAT scan, LAB report."
Didn't see it coming.
Great rhyming and cadence
suitable to this "silliness"
Really enjoyed it.
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2011
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Very funny! I loved it.
"CAT scan, LAB report."
Didn't see it coming.
Great rhyming and cadence
suitable to this "silliness"
Really enjoyed it.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2011
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Thank you - not really an original joke, but one I felt was worth 'poemising'
Steve
Comment from jackpeg
All very well told in very catchy rhyme and meter, at least, up to the last couplet. I know there is most likely a language pronunciation difference, but "bought" and "Report" just do not rhyme in the U.S., and having been at least as close to Kiwi Land as sydney several times, I fail to understand how it rhymes in your neighborhood either. Nevertheless, what does work for me is marvelous. Yes, I get the cat scan and lab report puns, but it took a couple of minutes.
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2011
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All very well told in very catchy rhyme and meter, at least, up to the last couplet. I know there is most likely a language pronunciation difference, but "bought" and "Report" just do not rhyme in the U.S., and having been at least as close to Kiwi Land as sydney several times, I fail to understand how it rhymes in your neighborhood either. Nevertheless, what does work for me is marvelous. Yes, I get the cat scan and lab report puns, but it took a couple of minutes.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2011
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OK, I have to ask you about this rhyme thing - actually you are only the second person (out of about 30) to mention it. Actually to my ear bought and report are almost perfect rhyme. Perhaps the 'r' sound in report makes it a tad longer, but the vowel sound is identical. I would happily rhyme taut, caught, short, abort, fought, sought, sort..... My current dictionary doesn't offer help with pronunciation, but I will take a look online and see if I can spot what you funny Americans have done to our language in this instance. If your phonetic transcription skills are up to it, perhaps you could indicate how you would say each word...
Steve
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BOUGHT/REPORT. With written words we can only transmit meaning, not the actual pronunciations. Your dictionary would probably give the same pronunciation symbols as mine, but we would most likely pronounce the symbols differently, too. I think it is only the last syllable of REPORT i.e., PORT with which I have the problem. It has the letter "r" and BOUGHT does not. The irreconcilable difference is between OT and ORT.
Comment from WilliamDeen
My fee I waived, but then you bought
The CAT scan and the LAB Report!"
HILARIOUS!!! Thanks for sharing your poem!!! Pamela
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2011
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My fee I waived, but then you bought
The CAT scan and the LAB Report!"
HILARIOUS!!! Thanks for sharing your poem!!! Pamela
Comment Written 26-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2011
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Thank you - the joke is not original - I loved the ending too so thought it deserved my poemising treatment!
Steve
Comment from Darla9
This was too funny, I absolutely loved it. What a dramatic artwork you have chosen as well ;) Well deserved five stars, excellent job, thanks for the laugh :)
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2011
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This was too funny, I absolutely loved it. What a dramatic artwork you have chosen as well ;) Well deserved five stars, excellent job, thanks for the laugh :)
Comment Written 26-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2011
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Thank you - glad you enjoyed my retelling of this funny joke.
Steve
Comment from moyramouse
Even though I guessed this was coming I still loved it! it reads brilliantly aloud - have just performed it to husband Terry who loved it too. Poor Bob, still he could cook it and have crispy duck and pancakes. I loved the CAT scan and the Lab report. xxxmouse
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2011
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Even though I guessed this was coming I still loved it! it reads brilliantly aloud - have just performed it to husband Terry who loved it too. Poor Bob, still he could cook it and have crispy duck and pancakes. I loved the CAT scan and the Lab report. xxxmouse
Comment Written 26-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2011
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Thanks. Not an original joke but cute all the same. Somebody tells me the final rhyme bought/report doesn't rhyme. How does it sound to you?
Steve
Comment from Sophiaalexandra
aw this was really funny and kinda sad. so im getting from the author note this isn't a true story? which is good cause i feel bad for the duck if it is. this was silly and interesting. thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2011
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aw this was really funny and kinda sad. so im getting from the author note this isn't a true story? which is good cause i feel bad for the duck if it is. this was silly and interesting. thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2011
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Thank you!
I have had many shocks at vet bills, but none for a dead duck!
Steve
Comment from Suzie Q
LOL! I absolutely love this!! What imagination and humor! Wish my brain could think of this stuff. I especially liked " The dog soon saw he'd have no luck, at rousing the departed duck. He gave his golden head a shake, Confirming there was no mistake" and of course the ending was brilliant! Well done!
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2011
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LOL! I absolutely love this!! What imagination and humor! Wish my brain could think of this stuff. I especially liked " The dog soon saw he'd have no luck, at rousing the departed duck. He gave his golden head a shake, Confirming there was no mistake" and of course the ending was brilliant! Well done!
Comment Written 26-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2011
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Thank you - to tell the truth I didn't think of this either - I just took somebody else's joke and 'poemised' it. Glad you enjoyed.
Steve
Comment from patwannabe
kwisteveh, I love it. You took a very funny story (that I have in my stack of keepers) and made a masterful poem out of it. Very, very clever. In fact, gonna give you one of my rare sixers and bookcase it. pat
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2011
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kwisteveh, I love it. You took a very funny story (that I have in my stack of keepers) and made a masterful poem out of it. Very, very clever. In fact, gonna give you one of my rare sixers and bookcase it. pat
Comment Written 26-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2011
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Yes, I wondered who would recognize the story. This is the second one I've tried where I've taken an existing joke (got to be one I like!) and poemised it. Good way of remembering the joke too!
Thank you so much for the Six - I appreciate it.
Steve
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I enjoyed reading your silliness. It was cute, made me smile and was just plain fun. You poem flowed smoothly with made it easy to read. I enjoyed the rhyming scheme also.
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2011
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I enjoyed reading your silliness. It was cute, made me smile and was just plain fun. You poem flowed smoothly with made it easy to read. I enjoyed the rhyming scheme also.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2011
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Thanks, Barbara - maybe I'll leave the prose to you experts now and just stick to my funny little poems!
Steve
Comment from dogontherocks
I loved it so much I sent a copy to my daughter and her husband who are both Veterinarians. I gave you credit of course. Good rhymes, unforced. Nice easy structure, A good funny story well told with perfect accompanying artwork. Love your sense of humor. Nicely done.
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2011
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I loved it so much I sent a copy to my daughter and her husband who are both Veterinarians. I gave you credit of course. Good rhymes, unforced. Nice easy structure, A good funny story well told with perfect accompanying artwork. Love your sense of humor. Nicely done.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2011
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Thank you - must be handy to have vets in the family - especially at bill-shock time!
Glad you enjoyed and of course it is OK to share.
Steve
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No such luck. They live in Georgia and we live in California. Ther's no justice in the world.:)
