Steve's Story-Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 22 "Dead Duck"A collection of my poems
46 total reviews
Comment from fun_tosha
Nice poem, though emotional:( and funny:)I liked the first two paragraphs.They were full of rhythmic words.
Keep sharing your work with us.
Fun_tosha
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2011
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Nice poem, though emotional:( and funny:)I liked the first two paragraphs.They were full of rhythmic words.
Keep sharing your work with us.
Fun_tosha
Comment Written 15-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2011
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Thank you for reviewing.
Steve
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It was a pleasure too.
Comment from KC
Super super poem. It had everything for me in a humourous poem - great rhyme, great story and a denoument which brough a smile to the face. Now back reviewing with a bit more time so will look at more stuff. Keep up the great work! Maybe have a look at Big Brother if you want some satire! Regards Kevin
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2011
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Super super poem. It had everything for me in a humourous poem - great rhyme, great story and a denoument which brough a smile to the face. Now back reviewing with a bit more time so will look at more stuff. Keep up the great work! Maybe have a look at Big Brother if you want some satire! Regards Kevin
Comment Written 29-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2011
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Thanks for the enthusiastic review and the six stars - I appreciate it.
Steve
Comment from bbowen6757
Very funny and well done. You kept me all the way waiting to see what was next. Cute art work to go with the poem. Watch out for those "cat scans".
Bobby
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2011
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Very funny and well done. You kept me all the way waiting to see what was next. Cute art work to go with the poem. Watch out for those "cat scans".
Bobby
Comment Written 29-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2011
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Thanks - just a joke I heard that I thought was rather cute so I poemised it.
Steve
Comment from jehanned
LOL! Funny author notes. I feel silly, I have been reading such seriousness today, that I didn't see the end coming. >.< I thought maybe the cat was going to eat it so there was no way that it could be anything BUT dead. : )
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2011
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LOL! Funny author notes. I feel silly, I have been reading such seriousness today, that I didn't see the end coming. >.< I thought maybe the cat was going to eat it so there was no way that it could be anything BUT dead. : )
Comment Written 27-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2011
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Thank you - no need to feel silly - most people have been sucked into the punch line here - unless they've heard the joke before.
Comment from MariJo
This is very amusing! I love the humor you have created with this. You have misspelled "favorite" however it doesn't take away from the humor. It is always a good idea to use the spell check provided for us. Outside of that it is very good & fun to read.
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2011
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This is very amusing! I love the humor you have created with this. You have misspelled "favorite" however it doesn't take away from the humor. It is always a good idea to use the spell check provided for us. Outside of that it is very good & fun to read.
Comment Written 27-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2011
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Thank you - I don't used the spell checker because I write in UK English (or in my case NZ) which is what tripped you up with favourite...
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Ooops! Sorry about that!
Comment from writerwish
Cool ending. I could not have guessed it. Nice way of showing insistence and good rhyming ability shown here. I like the picture too, staging a little comical to lighten things up a bit.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2011
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Cool ending. I could not have guessed it. Nice way of showing insistence and good rhyming ability shown here. I like the picture too, staging a little comical to lighten things up a bit.
Comment Written 27-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2011
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Thank you - just a piece of fun really, testing out my theory that some jokes can be recycled as poems - this one seems to work well.
Steve
Comment from Brad Sterling
An old joke brought back to life - which is more that can be said for the duck with no luck - good flowing rhyming poem which manages to raise a smile - welcome by all today -continued luck with writing...Brad.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2011
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An old joke brought back to life - which is more that can be said for the duck with no luck - good flowing rhyming poem which manages to raise a smile - welcome by all today -continued luck with writing...Brad.
Comment Written 27-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2011
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Thanks, Brad.
If it brought a smile it achieved its purpose, even though it was not strictly original.
Steve
Comment from strandregs
Congratulations on another piece of brilliance.
I would assume you have been to the vet recently.
Was the vet wearing ducktails?
Best Zelick
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2011
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Congratulations on another piece of brilliance.
I would assume you have been to the vet recently.
Was the vet wearing ducktails?
Best Zelick
Comment Written 27-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2011
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Thank you - just testing my theory that old jokes can be recycled as poems.
The vet was probably wearing a tuxedo the amount he charges!
Steve
Comment from Piggies Grandma
This was very cleverly written and well thought out kiwisteveh. I enjoyed reading it very much, especially the cat scan and the lab report.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2011
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This was very cleverly written and well thought out kiwisteveh. I enjoyed reading it very much, especially the cat scan and the lab report.
Comment Written 27-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2011
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Thank r kind review!
Steveyou for you
Comment from Inge_Meldgaard
Yes, I've heard this joke before, and it's quite a good one...and you've written it well :} but, I must say, this isn't one of your best ;P
Typo: one hour ago." - no need for the " here.
The one he said would leave no doubt,
* Presumably 'This one.....' ? otherwise, it sounds a bit weird.
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reply by the author on 27-Jun-2011
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Yes, I've heard this joke before, and it's quite a good one...and you've written it well :} but, I must say, this isn't one of your best ;P
Typo: one hour ago." - no need for the " here.
The one he said would leave no doubt,
* Presumably 'This one.....' ? otherwise, it sounds a bit weird.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 27-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2011
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Funny you didn't like this one - apart from a couple of Americans who think the last couplet doesn't rhyme, it has been very well received - probably got more six star reviews than any of my other pieces - go figure! Maybe just lucky timing - several people commented it was good light stuff for a relaxed Sunday morning...
It was a little bit of a slap-dash effort i.e. written very quickly, but I was reasonably pleased with it...
Steve
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It's all a matter of taste, I guess, and quite often mine does not coincide with the majority ;P
