Dear Lexi
Viewing comments for Chapter 49 "Mutterings""Let the little children come unto me." ~ Jesus
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Comment from adewpearl
I'm so sorry to hear Lexi had such terrible problems - I hope the fact you've been reviewing today and writing means she is better.
Your description of Lexi's fretfulness are vivid, easy to visualize and create such a sad mood
good use of alliteration
excellent internal rhyme of happenstance/perchance
and what a great scene as her hands work their way into prayer mode
I love the speculation that she and God are chatting
what a lovely hopeful conclusion :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2011
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I'm so sorry to hear Lexi had such terrible problems - I hope the fact you've been reviewing today and writing means she is better.
Your description of Lexi's fretfulness are vivid, easy to visualize and create such a sad mood
good use of alliteration
excellent internal rhyme of happenstance/perchance
and what a great scene as her hands work their way into prayer mode
I love the speculation that she and God are chatting
what a lovely hopeful conclusion :-) Brooke
Comment Written 27-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2011
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Brooke: I wrote & reviewed as she was asleep in the crook of my arm where she fits so perfectly. She was really ill for 5 days, then began to turn the corner. We were blessed. Love, jan
Comment from ksherwoodrn
Trust she is better now. So hard when those babies are sick but so thankful that the angels are taking care of them...love this story and the message...kathleen
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2011
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Trust she is better now. So hard when those babies are sick but so thankful that the angels are taking care of them...love this story and the message...kathleen
Comment Written 24-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2011
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after five really bad days, she finally made a turnaround and now it's like she was never ill -- love, jan
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That's the good thing about little ones; they are very resilient and recuperate quickly...so glad.
Comment from chrissy8
Thank you so much for sharing a beautiful free verse poem. I can't believe she really saw angels, wow! I actually remember a time in my life when something paranormal like that happened to me as a child, I wonder if children are just more open to those things, or perhaps so fresh from heaven they are given more visual guidance. Who knows?
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2011
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Thank you so much for sharing a beautiful free verse poem. I can't believe she really saw angels, wow! I actually remember a time in my life when something paranormal like that happened to me as a child, I wonder if children are just more open to those things, or perhaps so fresh from heaven they are given more visual guidance. Who knows?
Comment Written 24-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2011
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christinasimms--Jesus did say to suffer the little children to come unto Him, after all -- love, jan
Comment from WilliamDeen
the unconditional love
of which I have no doubt
was shared with you from above
during your nap
what a beautiful stanza! I really enjoyed reading your poem... Thanks for sharing with us, Pamela
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2011
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the unconditional love
of which I have no doubt
was shared with you from above
during your nap
what a beautiful stanza! I really enjoyed reading your poem... Thanks for sharing with us, Pamela
Comment Written 24-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2011
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thanks, Pamela -- love, jan
Comment from sleepypoet
I love this poem. The attention you have payed to this little one while in sleep is precious. You have been transfixed as her tiny hands came together under her little chin. Prayer mode. Perfect.
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reply by the author on 01-Jul-2011
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I love this poem. The attention you have payed to this little one while in sleep is precious. You have been transfixed as her tiny hands came together under her little chin. Prayer mode. Perfect.
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Comment Written 23-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2011
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yes, it was absolutely captivating. love, jan
Comment from writerwish
What a lovely poem and portrays a mother's dilemma each time her baby gets sick. It is so hard to predict how they will be and just when to take them to the doctors. Your unconditional love though will keep her well protected. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2011
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What a lovely poem and portrays a mother's dilemma each time her baby gets sick. It is so hard to predict how they will be and just when to take them to the doctors. Your unconditional love though will keep her well protected. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 23-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2011
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thanks, writerwish. love, jan
Comment from amahra
Beautifuly baby. Well all babies are beautiful. But I loved the that you used this precious baby as your them. I loved the poem, thought it was a bit long, but loved it just the same.
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2011
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Beautifuly baby. Well all babies are beautiful. But I loved the that you used this precious baby as your them. I loved the poem, thought it was a bit long, but loved it just the same.
Comment Written 23-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2011
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amahra: How long is too long for a poem? One can't shorten it as the story would not be complete otherwise. Thanks for your review. love, jan
Comment from sgalletti
Oh my goodness Jan! You and Lexi are in my prayers for sure! How horrible for one so little to be going through so much pain. And yet, you observe her talking to God and she talks with you about angels. Amazing! God works in mysterious ways. I know it must be very hard for you to leave her after all this trauma. Have a safe trip and I will be praying for Lexi to get well...Hugs, Sue
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2011
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Oh my goodness Jan! You and Lexi are in my prayers for sure! How horrible for one so little to be going through so much pain. And yet, you observe her talking to God and she talks with you about angels. Amazing! God works in mysterious ways. I know it must be very hard for you to leave her after all this trauma. Have a safe trip and I will be praying for Lexi to get well...Hugs, Sue
Comment Written 22-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2011
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thanks, Sue -- she was so much better by the time I returned -- I got to talk to her every day -- what a sweetie she is -- thanks for your prayers. love, jan
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hi Jan,
now isn't it amazing how a child tht is ill makes you realize how precious life is
This part definitely impressed me--
are you and God chatting
as you are resting?
is He telling you
all is well -
the ear infection, virus,
and whatever other germs
are attacking you
are under His control?
Gert
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2011
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Hi Jan,
now isn't it amazing how a child tht is ill makes you realize how precious life is
This part definitely impressed me--
are you and God chatting
as you are resting?
is He telling you
all is well -
the ear infection, virus,
and whatever other germs
are attacking you
are under His control?
Gert
Comment Written 22-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2011
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yes, it was also a bit scary, too -- love, jan
Comment from Piggies Grandma
This is a very lovely poem and very cleverly written and very well thought out. I enjoyed reading it very much. That is pretty amazing what she saw.
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2011
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This is a very lovely poem and very cleverly written and very well thought out. I enjoyed reading it very much. That is pretty amazing what she saw.
Comment Written 22-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2011
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yes, P.G. I thought I might be wrong about what I was thinking until she told me that. love, jan
