Steve's Poems for Kids
Viewing comments for Chapter 21 "Some Other Day"A collection of my children's poems
19 total reviews
Comment from DIS-illusioned
--Interesting picture image--comical.
--Good alternate line rhymes, and good rhythmic flow.
--"There's hair inside their ears."
Eww! Gross! But nicely done :)
--"Yeti-Saquatch man"
Sasquatch.
--Gruesome, monstrous imagery--nice.
--"And it's too bad I'll have to take
My bath some other day!"
LOL! Nicely done.
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2011
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--Interesting picture image--comical.
--Good alternate line rhymes, and good rhythmic flow.
--"There's hair inside their ears."
Eww! Gross! But nicely done :)
--"Yeti-Saquatch man"
Sasquatch.
--Gruesome, monstrous imagery--nice.
--"And it's too bad I'll have to take
My bath some other day!"
LOL! Nicely done.
Comment Written 19-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2011
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Thank you
I was kinda pleased with the ending....
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, mystery writer, a great job writing this poem about the excuses people can come up with to avoid a bath. i wish you the best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2011
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this is very well written, mystery writer, a great job writing this poem about the excuses people can come up with to avoid a bath. i wish you the best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 19-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2011
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Thank you for the review.
Comment from jadapenn
LOL, I really enjoyed this ploy to avoid the bath for the day. Some jolly terrible creatures behind the door and very good reason to keep on this side. I smiled all the way down the poem. Well written and presented. Best wishes for the contest. I enjoyed. luv jada
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2011
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LOL, I really enjoyed this ploy to avoid the bath for the day. Some jolly terrible creatures behind the door and very good reason to keep on this side. I smiled all the way down the poem. Well written and presented. Best wishes for the contest. I enjoyed. luv jada
Comment Written 19-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2011
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Thanks, jada
Glad you enjoyed and could smile at my monsters...
Comment from ksherwoodrn
Cute poem with very descriptive words used in it to help bring the poem to life. Loved the ending also. How true that could be...kathleen
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2011
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Cute poem with very descriptive words used in it to help bring the poem to life. Loved the ending also. How true that could be...kathleen
Comment Written 19-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2011
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Yeah, anything to avoid the bath!
Thanks for the review
Comment from sweetfeather
I sure had fun reading this one! I loved that you used unual words to get your description across. The picture was fun and the rhyming was good. You have the heart of a child and it shows! "More please" lol
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2011
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I sure had fun reading this one! I loved that you used unual words to get your description across. The picture was fun and the rhyming was good. You have the heart of a child and it shows! "More please" lol
Comment Written 19-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2011
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Thank you - heart of a child I will take that as a compliment!
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Yes, who would not hope for the heart of a child? so yeah, it's a big compliment! : ) Hey, what time is it where you are?
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11am Queensland (Eastern Australia)
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More please - check out Crazy Critters in my portfolio
Oops - I guess you can't do that yet....
Maybe when the voting for this has finished...
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Remind me again please : )
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Maybe now...
Crazy critters is the one most like this in my portfolio but there's plenty of other silly stuff in there if you have time to poke around...
kiwisteveh
Comment from ewenmail
Good rhyme, good poem...good fun! What else would a good poem require, apart from an appreciative reader...we're all here and maybe happy, for it, into the bargain. I suppose we're smiling a lot as well. I'm also glad that a 'writing prompt' should be so effective. This may encourage more of us to consider responding to them in future. A good prompt and reply. Many thanks to all, Ewen
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reply by the author on 19-Jun-2011
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Good rhyme, good poem...good fun! What else would a good poem require, apart from an appreciative reader...we're all here and maybe happy, for it, into the bargain. I suppose we're smiling a lot as well. I'm also glad that a 'writing prompt' should be so effective. This may encourage more of us to consider responding to them in future. A good prompt and reply. Many thanks to all, Ewen
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Comment Written 19-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2011
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Thanks for the lovely review. Glad the poem brought a smile.
Comment from Freya Seerwing
This really made me laugh! Thank you for sharing it! I am glad you didn't mention the nasty demon from the Lord of the Rings Trilogy - the one living within the Mines of Moria!
I wouldn't want to find THAT behind a door in my mum's house! I don't think my cats would appreciate that either!
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2011
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This really made me laugh! Thank you for sharing it! I am glad you didn't mention the nasty demon from the Lord of the Rings Trilogy - the one living within the Mines of Moria!
I wouldn't want to find THAT behind a door in my mum's house! I don't think my cats would appreciate that either!
Comment Written 19-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2011
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... or that big spider thingy inside the mountain
Thanks for the kind words.
Comment from Kingsland
You have all kinds of little nastiness behind your door. This is a well written poetic verse with some very descriptive language in its poetic views. It was my pleasure to have read and written this response for... John
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reply by the author on 19-Jun-2011
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You have all kinds of little nastiness behind your door. This is a well written poetic verse with some very descriptive language in its poetic views. It was my pleasure to have read and written this response for... John
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Comment Written 19-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2011
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Thanks, John
Comment from Melspoems
I think this is great.
It's funny, the rhymes and rhythms are great, and who would of thought so many scary creatures could be hiding behind one bathroom door ?
Best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2011
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I think this is great.
It's funny, the rhymes and rhythms are great, and who would of thought so many scary creatures could be hiding behind one bathroom door ?
Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 19-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2011
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Thank you for the kind words - you should see what's really behind the door.
